My Sin

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Poem By: JohnstonCunning
Poetry

Tags: life, sin, letter, informative

Some of you might have heard this or at least the title before OR the reply to this by someone. I wrote this for someone but gave it it to someone else entirely. I couldn't do it. View table of contents...

Submitted: Aug 17, 2008 Reads: 55 Comments: 7 Likes: 3

As I rot here
My head spins,
I don't know what to say
or where to begin

I wish I could show you
or tell you my tale,
I've been trying to hard
hoisting an unhoistable sail,

I know it's wrong
A terrible sin
A selfish life
A beast within

This is my problem,
My demented life verse,
I can't stop it,
An almost irreversible curse

Kick me while I'm down
Deal the final blow
I don't ask for much more,
I just want you to know

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Comments:

todeszellen91

good poem.
but dont take my word for it.
i cant think of anything else to say, and its so impersonal to jus twrite
"i liked it"
or "good poem"
but since i dont have anything else to say, im just wasting your time...
XD

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

It's okay, my times not worth anything. ^_^ I'm glad you like it

traviscunningham

good poem jon!!! i like how you express yourself using poetry.

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

Thats really the only way I express my self, since I'm trying not be so dramatic. I use poetry. Thanks!

GiGi Joy

i love this poem....thank you for writing this in the first place *hug* can't wait to see you monday

Posted: Aug 17, 2008

Author Comment:

But it stressed you out! I feel terrible about it! Thank you for the Reply though. ;_; I miss you all. See ya tomorrow!!

Iggysgirl

Its really good. I love ur poems. ^^ A bit depresing. But most great poems are.

Posted: Aug 18, 2008

Author Comment:

ThankYou. Well theres a reason for that. I'm glad you enjoy them. I plan to post more soon.

sunnybutterfly

I saw your post on my friend's site so I decided to check your stuff out...

So, I think your writing is really good. You've got to keep your work up!

On this poem, I so know what you mean with the guilt of sin. It's just like a prominent regret. I think you should at least SHOW this to the person you intended it for. It might offer some understanding and someone they could turn to. Up to you...

Keep producing great work!

Posted: Aug 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Hello new friend! Umm, thank you! Well showing the person it was meant for, might not work so well. I don't see that helping my case, but I REALLY wanna tell them how I feel about them. I'm not getting anywhere. Anyway, I will try to continue my passion for poetry throughout my school studies and home affairs. I will post more when time agrees with me and lets me be in the same place as a computer and my poetry notebook. XD Thank you for the read and thank you for the advice. I might try it, if I get enough guts to.

Iggysgirl

Im adding this to my favorites....

Posted: Aug 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Okay, thank you! ^o^

ohsodifferent

wow. so sad. what's the sin? and can you explain the summary to me...amazing poem....wow.....you're descriptions are out of this world....will you be my friend when you're famous???

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Author Comment:

lol ^_^ Famous? Idk....I never thought about it! Do I have to be famous to be your friend though? ;-; Yeah, I'll explain it. Lemme go check the summary again.