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Submitted: Apr 2, 2008    Reads: 36    Comments: 4    Likes: 1   


I'm his, he's mine

Our hearts use to beat in time

I look at him, he looks at me

We used to be so very happy

I kiss him, he kisses me

I cant help but wonder if he still loves me

I keep playing the game, I dont break any rules

So why is it all he does is stall?

Will he stay or will he go?

Now hes hit his all time low

Now now, let him think it through

Does he want me or does he want you?

Watch him leave the house so quiet

He thinks that I would start a riot

But yes hes right, like I'd let him go

With that woman who hurt me so

She stole him away with that twinkle in her eye

She used to say 'oh im oh so shy!'

Now we know what we did wrong last

We trusted that excuse of a man way to fast!

Kelly Brett


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Nice poem

Posted: Apr 2, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks poewhit, its good to have another opinion. xx

Very nice poem! It really tells a story, and it made me think about the stuff I've been through. But I kept feeling like I was waiting for more but it never really came. Still really liked it. Keep up the good work!

Posted: Apr 3, 2008

Author Comment:

I know what u mean with this one, i had bee writing it on and off for a few weeks and i never felt like it was finished but just decided if i was ever going to publish it that its now or never lol./ i was so close deleting it a few times! My three day blues is one im very proud of would love ur opinion. x

Yes sometimes we run at things out of desperation and then have to eat hammers for breakfast, if you read Hammers For Breakfast by me you will get what I mean. 15 thumbs up here.

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

i will read hammers for breakfast becuase i have no idea what that comment meant. hehe. but thanks anyway and im sure ill understand once ive read your stuff! kelly xx

The quality of the poem is above average. this tells a very narrative based story. almost like I'm listening to it in my skull. Nicely done.

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for the good comment, kelly x



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