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Three day blues!

Poem By: kellymarie64
Poetry


I suffered with postnatal depression when I had my 2nd baby and this is a small insight into how it feels. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 3, 2008    Reads: 54    Comments: 5    Likes: 3   


I try to be honest

I try to be true

I try to love my baby

the way you want me to

why wont my heart let me

follow my heads plea

to be the kind of mother

all women strive to be

I want to open up my heart

to this child im told is mine

but all my head keeps saying

is that not all is well and fine

Put the baby to your breast

is what they all do say

and all I really want to do

is scream and run away

Is my life a lie now

and do i have to leave

because I dont understand now

why anyone loves me

I cant love a baby as beautiful as this

then I am not someone they are likely to miss

Keep him safe and love him well

Hes better off with you

 

Now isnt it just lucky

I have the three day blues!

All this will be over in a day or two

but for some, postnatal depression

is really coming through

So when your feeling lonely

or really feeling blue

speak to a doc or midwife

or just someone close to you.

Kelly Brett


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Comments:

or write your feelings down in verse
and share it with us all,
for there are things we must express
to keep us walking tall.

great stuff

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much. will keep writing. xx

Wow this poem is truly a great piece of work! You really express your emotions well. Near the end though you switched from a,b,a,b to a,a,b,b, rhyme scheme so it was confusing. But still great, you're truly talented:)

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much for that lovely comment, i noticed the rhyming went a little off after i read it back but thanks for being honest tho, nice to get constructive notes. thanks xx

kellymarie64:

Well written and expressed emotions. On a most important topic, which does not receive the attention it deserves. Good job. Gave it an "I Like It" vote.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you very much ed, i amglad you liked it. i did try to make a complicated condition easier to understand. thank you x

Great poem. I loved it. You can really feel the emotion and care put into it. I know the feeling, too. Wonderful job. :D

Posted: Apr 9, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you so much mystory, its comments like that, that make me continue writing, xx

Nicely done. My wife can relate to this after having giving birth to my first child Lexi. Vivid emotional strings to grab onto in this. small punctuation errors. write on.

Posted: Apr 30, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you, i was hoping some people would find they could relate to it, kelly x



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