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tears In The Rain

Poem By: KinkyBootz
Poetry


Emo- in class- verry good View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 11, 2008    Reads: 125    Comments: 8    Likes: 4   


Arriving in class, the room falls silent,
You lay down your books, though you hear it all.
People look upon you with unhidden resentment,
You don’t accompany them down to the mall.

The teacher avoids you, at your parents request,
The dream from last night still burns in your head.
Staying in touch is becoming a quest.
Would this affect you if in fact you were dead?

The dream of the world enshrouded in black,
It seemed so real and clear.
This world would be fine for you, if only you could find a way back.
You let the textbook cover your face, enclosing the single shed tear.

The scars on you arm,
The cut from last night,
You know their doing you harm,
But how else can you fight?

You once wore a shirt, but never again,
You thought they might understand.
Your explanations fell like tears.. in the rain.


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Comments:

Very well written, clever theme and well delivered, 7 thumbs up.

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Kool, Thanks

This one was so sad! Still you did a great job again. It was well-written and expressive.

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much, you rock :)

Aw, at first I thought it was about being confined to writing and not being around people socialising, then as I read on it became clearer. I nice write, enjoyed it. ~ KB

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Kool, Thanks

hrmm, i was ok. not your best. The first verse it just like what happens to be.. *sigh* oh well

Posted: Apr 11, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL, I know its not my best, TY

I absolutely loved the second to last stanza. It really is true, and I can relate to this poem so fully. This was incredible. Good emotion and imagery, it was fascinating. I liked it, though the 'in the rain' part didn't really catch on. -two thumbs up- :D

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thankyou so much :)

Tears in the rain are tears no-one will ever see because it's raining. Again another sad poem, poignant and touching. Second last stanza, there are better ways to fight because with self harm you never win. (personal experince though not cutting)

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes i totally agree, *I AM NOT AN EMO*

Aww Hun
So Sad, But I Know How It Feels, Its Not The Best
x

Posted: Apr 14, 2008

Author Comment:

LOl, finally, someone didnt ask "are you only 14"

Thankyou so much. LOL

KBz

Lolz Its Ok
And Poople Say That To Me As Well Coz Im Only 14
Lolz
xx

Posted: May 3, 2008

Author Comment:

lol kool



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