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Poem By: Kirsten Rain
Poetry

For jfm98's challenge about Michael Jackson View table of contents...

Submitted: Jun 26, 2008 Reads: 42 Comments: 6 Likes: 2

What happened to the crowd-pleaser inside of you

You had fans

You had fame

You were adored by almost all the girls

Until you plastered a hardening shell on your skin

And turned horendous and ugly

We thought you had a heart

Til plentiful rumors unsurfaced you doing things to a poor little child

Being negilent with you mind

Doing un-godly deads

Hurry and set your heart right

Save a puppy

I wonder if all your acts and due to you being so alone

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Comments:

jfm98

GOOD JOB!! I loved it! Congrats on bein' the first 2 finish my challenge!

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks

bubbly

hi! kirsten. had u not even mentioned his name, all descriptions lead to mikey boy. were it not for "thriller", he'd be long gone from my fav list. may better sense prevail him.

good work. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you lol. Thriller is a good song :)

jadey oneil

Ouch! ^^
That matched...
Well, you hit the right angle. LOL!
Wonderful! ^^

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Author Comment:

lol thank you :)

Farstyles

thats pretty good. it made sense and its very interesting. i like :)

Posted: Jul 3, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you :)

Kritika

pretty interesting.....

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks

Hmmm, impressive for a fourteen year old.

Simple language, clear and concise.

It is nice to see someone who must be relatively new to the craft, not restrain herself with unnecessary repetition or strict form.

Although it's not metered as such, it still has a rhythmic quality to it.

Posted: Nov 4, 2008