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OHSHCKaori challenged me to write a story/poem with the given relationship and emotion:
Sorrow, Husband/Wife
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Submitted: Jun 20, 2008 Reads: 62 Comments: 10 Likes: 7
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Oh this is just sad. It captures the emotion perfectly!! *Cries* How sad.
I love it though. Such real emotion.
Thanks for taking the challenge
~Kaori
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
you did a good job here expressing the pain of alcoholism; the lonliness, the suppression of feelings, although the ending was unexpected I really it. very nicely done MA!
~katie
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
i like how you changed POVs like that!
Very great and tells a lot!
Loved it!
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
A happy ending it seems....I love it. The whole poem flows so well. An awesome piece.
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
Nice work MA
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
I like this. Well structured poem.
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
This met the challenge and then some, MA!!! It stands on its own. You've expressed your deep feelings from within perfectly, creating a heartfelt write!! I love this piece... one of my favorites of yours!
Peace and happiness.....Jerry
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
Oh I bet she went even a little further than half way.
Very well done!
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
This is a beautiful sad poem, intricately written, entwining he and she, and says so much between the lines. I agree with Jerry, one of your very best. I relate to it very well.
Posted: Jun 23, 2008
Wow! This captures so much emotion. Great job!
Posted: Oct 19, 2008
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