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A Glorious Revolution

Poem By: matmoo
Poetry


def: rev-o-lu-tion [rev-uh-loo-shuh n]: a sudden, complete or marked change in something. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 1, 2008    Reads: 74    Comments: 1    Likes: 0   


Don't say I shouldn't sing
in these barren streets,
Don't say I shouldn't cry
and scream to my hearts
content in this wasted
place.
Shouldn't I dance for joy,
whatever they say?
Who cares if I'm crying?
I'll cry anyway.

And out in the fields the
flags are flying.
And in through the town
the voice of your name
is a thunder roll as
flashing dancing angels
clap hands and echo
the mercy waves of you,
whilst every man and
women lift their heads
to cry; 'Oh! What a glorious,
What a glorious revolution!
Today, I am made new.' 


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Comments:

Glorious indeed and if I'm not mistaken it seems to have a religious meaning to it. If you wanted to make it more obvious you could capitalize the You's and Your's that refer to God/Jesus. Again, very lovely piece.


I don't mean to be the grammar police, but just to edit:
"hearts" I think should be possessive "heart's"
and the lines "whilst every man and ((womEn)) lift their heads" might be better was "woman lifts."




One day this will become non-fiction.

Posted: Jul 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you very much for commenting! You are not mistaken, this does have a religious meaning to it and I am glad that it came through, but other people have not seen it so clearly. I therefore think you're suggestion regarding 'You' etc... is a very good one. Likewise, i'll change the grammar stuff as well. Thanks for pointing these things out!
matmoo :)



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