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Well i know its really late but this is my attempt at Seesawmae's challenge View table of contents...
Submitted: Jun 9, 2008 Reads: 55 Comments: 9 Likes: 6
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.... wow! that was... you have me speechless! my goodness, this poem was amazing matthew! the imagery was fabulous and just overall it was a breathtaking read! i absolutely loved it!
ha i feel like i have commenter's block :S
i just don't know what else to say... like i said, i'm speechless! at a loss for words b/c this was brilliant!
fantastic writing matt!
keep it up :)
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Matt this is amazing! The imagery is so complex and beautiful that I can hear the wind blowing and the sea gull crying faintly, the wind is whipping my hair, and stinging rain is pelting my arms. Its really rich with detail! I love the two lovers bound together against the elements and against raging emotions beating at them. I also like when poems go full circle and end where they began.
This one was worth the wait. You do extraordinary work that always leaves me inspired. Thanks for sharing it with us Matt!
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Oh hello seduction.
Shall I shoot my metaphor dice and see if I roll em high?
Here I go.
Land And Sea. Two opposites. Two ladies. Two lovahs (lovers in peach language)(try it "lovah"). The narrator looks to which one is most homey for him....he cries out to both and wonders which one will fight the good fight with him? (sink into the storm for me)(BEAUTIFUL LINE btw).
The 2nd stanza compares the two and their personified reactions to the gulls cry for home. The sea cuddles in. The gull looks over his shoulder (so to speak) while going to the sea and observes the land. Feeling guilt (Love in its evergreen shade falls victim) to both, but to neither.
Am I driving you insane yet? Sorry! But this is how I read poetry, not just yours, but yours especially!
3rd stanza: The personified sea is searching. (clings to the image of love)(image???). Now, get your scuba gear on because I am about to go deep. What happend to the personified land? The land provided a base for the lovers to grow from. Without the sea, there would be no land, without the land, there would be no sea.
BUT lookout. The last stanza shows the pain of having neither. Poor Gull.
Of course, I'm way off base. Just wanted to give you a clip of how I read other poetry.
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
oh ps -
LOVED it!
My fav of yours now.
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
hmmmmm ^_^ I am going to give this interpretation a try; ^_^
the first stanza to me sounds like depression (sinking) 'a lone gull circles in the brooding sky, it's cry is lost to the wind' bitterness and sinking.
second stanza:
left desolate and bearily able to survive (suisidal thoughts)? as depression has sunk to it's all time low,
But then; 'a cry is heard' and the star I see as representing an epiphany of light.
third:
now battered but silent he see's himself not alone,
he looks upon what was and pity's it. The night gathers him up in it's calm aftermath.
fourth:
the next time storm (depression) gathers now he is willing to battle it (against the wind) so this time along with the depression is autumn leaves and rain to heal and cleanse. the man still feels victim but is fighting now.
oh, I don't know, probably SOOOOOOOO way off, but hey it was fun, I much enjoy this guys ^_^
take care Matthew, until we meet again........:)
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
I'm so captivated by the beauty of the words that I do not want to interpret the hidden meaning behind it. The sensory experience is enough this time. And oh, your style reminds me of Matthew Arnold!
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
OK! nice. i loved this one:)
Love in its evergreen shade falls victim
to the raging tempests might, and its star
is blown out of the sky.
you see that line, was simply amazing. i love the thought of stars been blown out of the sky... nice.
1 up from me.
all the best...lexie
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
as the storm birds gather.
i am in love with that..
Posted: Jun 12, 2008
sorry for taking so long to comment! This is so amazing! it's brilliant and i love it soooo much! a great interpretation of the picture! great work!!! :)
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
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