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Ok i thought long and hard before posting this. It was written a while ago now when i lived by the sea. It was my observation of those sun worshipers. View table of contents...
Submitted: Jun 9, 2008 Reads: 86 Comments: 8 Likes: 6
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"Dancer of the starlight shade". Wow Matt! I completely love this and keep picking out parts that I like even more the second and third time around. Once again it is so full of detail and remarkable pharasing that it really needs to be read over and over again. Don't be surprised if I come back and comment again. :) I really do love this one.
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
iS this ever morbid! This is unlike your poetry!
I felt like I was sinking while I read it. (i am a beach girl).
ok, well....you are obviously telling us that you wait for the searing heat to pass and that's when you really cherish nature. you take your rise when the commoners have passed.
Awesome poem Matt!
Posted: Jun 9, 2008
Really good and heart felt!! i have to agree with classy peach with the fabulous hair, very much unlike you, but hey!! thats what good writers do, write in different styles eh?
Very well done!!
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
Oh my goodness, I am a sea worshipper who too sometimes "observes" and likes to think I am "different" to those just flocking on the beach to tan skin, make eyes at surfers or loll in the sand without appreciating the majesty and beauty of the ever rolling sea and surrounds. (But they look at me, just another sun- worshipper!) This is written very well, I love the ending. Very worthy of a post Matt! I truly enjoyed reading it.
Posted: Jun 10, 2008
don't hate me....please. but i didn't like it. for me it was hard to read. i love the beach, for i'm there every chance i get. but this one didn't rub me the right way.
SORRY, PLEASE PLEASE DON'T HATE ME :(
lexie
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
I am not able to identify myself with the theme. But I could 'feel' the sea shore even though the words were different.
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
Ok, I read it again to see if I felt differently about it and nope, still love it and I don't find it the least bit offensive. I think its beautifuly written, wonderfully orignal in phrase. and I love the different point of view.
Posted: Jun 12, 2008
"The Wax of Human Thought"....hmmmmm
I was smiling the whole time I was reading. Then, I went back and read it again. As I'm reading this time, this is what pops out and grabs me.
I breathed
I dreamed
I see .......
Melting
Splashing
Haunter
Chained
Spilling
Porter.......
I watch
beasts
Losing flesh
Praising
Enjoying
flesh
fleeting motionless
screaming
calling
I am.....
pulled
Song, dancer
Dancing
Foaming
Flesh
smoulder in the ashes of
A burnt out summer sun.
Sometimes I don't always get it the first time so I have to break it down like this (just thought I'd explain). I mean I understand it, but have to break it down to understand it more. I really like your writing. This is a Beauty!
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
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