My distant female, all is now a race

to that most bitter and calamitous end.

Spring is upon us and everything is in

preparation for life; but there is no future

now, the tears are spent, and the world

is pushed aside. The void within is

surging to its glory, only gravity keeps

me from falling, as I watch the fading

image of the sun burst with one last

agonising scream for life. Who is that

face looking back at me – that face in

the mirror? It’s changed out of all

recognition. On the outside I

smile, but I’m falling apart within.

Comments:

seesawmae

aww, this is so amazing, and exactly how i feel!! great poem, i really loved the emotion, something i always enjoy in poetry!

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx seesawmae as always for your wonderful comments...they mean so much to me thanxxxx

poewhit

A persons face and body most times expresses the inner person to an observer

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

yes u r right, however, we all have secrets we keep buried deep inside..sometimes so we don't hurt someone else..or to save ourselves from pain

CrystalTears

great poem!! i really enjoyed it!! Great writing!!

Posted: Apr 12, 2008

Author Comment:

thanxxxx

Anna Therese

Expresses well the "masks" we often wear. I like this.

Posted: Apr 13, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx so much...i was trying to express that some of our deepest thoughts are known only by ourselves...thanx so much for reading

I like to let your poems settle for a while and sorry for the delay in reviewing.

This is magically morose. Here were my thoughts after reading, and I am not sure that is the meaning, but that's the great thing about poetry....we all see it differently.

Crying keeps real emotions at bay. Once the water falls the enormity of a life changed settles and pools in astringent tragedy. Sink or swim? Swim to pacify the world or sink with the stars only to help the moon shine.

Crying maybe creates an absorbent to shock...when crying is done is when the glory of void sets in.

Posted: Apr 14, 2008

Author Comment:

ah, thanx again peachy for your wonderful comments, they r pure poetry in themselves and put my little scribbles to shame. u express my thoughts beautifully! oh, i would sink to help the moon shine brighter, but only if it would light the path for lovers to tred!!!

Itsuwari

Oh what wonders the psyche holds. I will keep my interpretation to myself, lest it influence others. I do love this piece, one of my favorites of yours, though as far as structure and form go, it could use some work. But what do I know of poetic form?

Posted: Apr 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks, im glad u like it. structure and form are always difficult in modern poetry because post modernist writers tend to reject the old confines of writing poetry, which means structure is open to debate. This poem is a very loose attempt at a sonnet, but without the rhyme structure

Wandiola

'I watch the fading
image of the sun burst with one last
agonising scream for life' How did you learn to write like that? One word AMAZING AHHHHH!

Posted: May 7, 2008

Author Comment:

ah, thanx so much. i guess that line came from the pain of missing somebody very special

Dragonfly

I read this one twice! You have such a flair for the written word. It's amzing really. And, I know the feeling well. :) (Are you a Matt or a Matthew? You seem kind of like a Matt?)

Posted: May 10, 2008

Author Comment:

im a matt..matthew is too sundayish for me. this poem is about somebody very special too me, though she is in italy and i'm in a different part of europe!!!

WhatIsInAName

Love it.

beautifully written.
Alot of emotion :)

Posted: May 16, 2008

Author Comment:

hey thanx so much for the comment, glad u liked it

Nixie

No matter if the heart is breaking, the world laughs as it continues, as if nothing had ever happened, as if the day is just as bright as before. So you change, you adapt to deal with the reality of the situation. Distance is the greatest divide that I know, because you can‘t do anything to change it. This is what I got from this, a sure longing by a defeated heart. I have written a similar piece, more about recognition, and not knowing who this new person is after such changes. Anyway, I could go on but I will save it. :) Thank you Matt for putting my brain in motion this morning! I enjoyed this. ~ Nixie

Posted: May 30, 2008

Author Comment:

hi, thanx so much for a wonderful comment. I think u got this poem spot on. I would love to know which poem of your u speak of? Maybe i'll have to read them until i find it; i will do that. Thanx again!

findingmyway

I love this - it's beautifully written and very true. How many times do we put on a happy face for the rest of the world, when on the inside, it is the complete opposite? I know I've done that many times before at least. Thank you so much for sharing this. :) You have a real talent with writing poetry; can you still take a look at any of mine?

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

hey thanx so much for the comment. its nice when people can relate to the things you write. Of course i'll read your work. I'm planning to make a cup of tea and sit down to read.
Thanx again!!

Kred35

yes, it truly speaks to me. Many, many times, smiling as if everything is okay, when it's really not.

A Beautiful poem.......

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

wow, thank u so much for a lovely comment, i'm so happy the poem speaks to u. Thank u!

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