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it's a poem about the pain we feel on the inside, even though we smile at the world on the outside. View table of contents...
Submitted: Apr 12, 2008 Reads: 100 Comments: 12 Likes: 8
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aww, this is so amazing, and exactly how i feel!! great poem, i really loved the emotion, something i always enjoy in poetry!
Posted: Apr 12, 2008
A persons face and body most times expresses the inner person to an observer
Posted: Apr 12, 2008
great poem!! i really enjoyed it!! Great writing!!
Posted: Apr 12, 2008
Expresses well the "masks" we often wear. I like this.
Posted: Apr 13, 2008
I like to let your poems settle for a while and sorry for the delay in reviewing.
This is magically morose. Here were my thoughts after reading, and I am not sure that is the meaning, but that's the great thing about poetry....we all see it differently.
Crying keeps real emotions at bay. Once the water falls the enormity of a life changed settles and pools in astringent tragedy. Sink or swim? Swim to pacify the world or sink with the stars only to help the moon shine.
Crying maybe creates an absorbent to shock...when crying is done is when the glory of void sets in.
Posted: Apr 14, 2008
Oh what wonders the psyche holds. I will keep my interpretation to myself, lest it influence others. I do love this piece, one of my favorites of yours, though as far as structure and form go, it could use some work. But what do I know of poetic form?
Posted: Apr 15, 2008
'I watch the fading
image of the sun burst with one last
agonising scream for life' How did you learn to write like that? One word AMAZING AHHHHH!
Posted: May 7, 2008
I read this one twice! You have such a flair for the written word. It's amzing really. And, I know the feeling well. :) (Are you a Matt or a Matthew? You seem kind of like a Matt?)
Posted: May 10, 2008
Love it.
beautifully written.
Alot of emotion :)
Posted: May 16, 2008
No matter if the heart is breaking, the world laughs as it continues, as if nothing had ever happened, as if the day is just as bright as before. So you change, you adapt to deal with the reality of the situation. Distance is the greatest divide that I know, because you can‘t do anything to change it. This is what I got from this, a sure longing by a defeated heart. I have written a similar piece, more about recognition, and not knowing who this new person is after such changes. Anyway, I could go on but I will save it. :) Thank you Matt for putting my brain in motion this morning! I enjoyed this. ~ Nixie
Posted: May 30, 2008
I love this - it's beautifully written and very true. How many times do we put on a happy face for the rest of the world, when on the inside, it is the complete opposite? I know I've done that many times before at least. Thank you so much for sharing this. :) You have a real talent with writing poetry; can you still take a look at any of mine?
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
yes, it truly speaks to me. Many, many times, smiling as if everything is okay, when it's really not.
A Beautiful poem.......
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
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