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The Cursed and the Blessed Part 1

Poem By: matthew smith
Poetry


This is my poem for Alice’s challenge, though this is only the first part, another two parts will follow later.
She gave me the subject of dry ice and setting of castle.
The words were:
captivate
alluring
indulge
taunt
approbative
crucify

Oh, I asked for an allusion, well there’s several in here. Of course there’s references to Troy, and there’s also references to Dante and The Divine Comedy.

Hope you can follow the story I’m trying to write.
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Submitted: Jul 7, 2008    Reads: 62    Comments: 4    Likes: 7   


I was walking alone in the dead of the night,
With the moon in its splendour profusing with light,
And the leaves on the trees held a silvery touch,
Now my heart that was empty was filling with such,
And the silvery magic was like a dead dream,
Reflecting an image that lay still in a stream,
And as I bent down to quench my lips of their thirst,
I saw in that stillness a star that had burst,
From the hearts of the lovers who stared at that face,
The perfection my finger that beauty did trace.
 
Now the cold pale face that lay tranquil and still,
Pulled me into a nightmare against my own will,
As I bent down to kiss of those watery lips,
I sank to the depths like Troy’s storm battered ships,
And I saw the world fade with the moon on my back,
As the death pale faces grew anguished and sick,
They groped at my shoulders and clung to my hair,
For now I had joined the cursed souls of that lair,
And the breath in my lungs burned a fiery red,
My consciousness faltered, my image dropped dead.
 
Like a fish in the depth of a stream I was hooked,
or a star in the sky by a poet was plucked,
I was hauled on the bank by a grown and a sigh,
An old fisherman in his rags stood there by,
The TAUNT from his lips was a sickening blow,
To INDULGE in such passion has led to this woe,
As I looked in his eyes the reflection was clear,
Young fool was the tone of his pertinent leer,
The legate of my soul came to CRUCIFY me,
Like the ships bound for Troy on that desolate sea.
 
I stood in the toll of that anguishing bell,
The corrupter of heaven’s nine circles of hell,
And like the great poet I sank to my knees,
As images flickered between the dead trees,
Oh Lord in your mercy take pity I plead,
 My soul in this hell will eternally bleed,
The silence was awful, the judgement was made,
My last exultation on earth had been played,
My APPROBATIVE honour had sunk to this place,
Where the fickle of heart had been drawn by that face.
 
 
 
 
 
As I lay in the mist many years could have passed,
I was cold, I was numb in the spell I was cast,
The nightmare was endless, the darkness complete,
But somehow I managed to crawl to my feet,
For somewhere beyond in the distance a light,
Like a welcoming fire on a treacherous night,
To a traveller weary who as walked a dark road,
Abandoned by God to bare the weight of his load,
And the nightmare continues, the curse is still bound,
To my soul who fell victim to the spell that I found.
 
I cannot believe that I walk to the beat,
Of my heart that keeps motion with the sound of my feet,
Though I walk a dark road alone and afraid,
Too scared to look back at the languishing shade,
The face so ALLURING still fills me with hope,
Though I stumble and fall and I struggle to cope,
And I walk like a dead man but somehow awake,
This nightmare continues, but wait there’s a lake,
And behind it so menacing, foreboding and still,
A castle to CAPTIVATE my heart with its chill.
 


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Comments:

Matt, I think its an awesome story. I'm just sorry that I have to wait to read what happens in the castle. I love the rhyming and the flow of it. The stanza with the fisherman was my favorite and I loved the lines "Like a fish in the depth of a stream I was hooked, or a star in the sky by a poet was plucked," You did a really good job Matt and it was worth the wait!

Posted: Jul 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you Sisi, the other parts of the poem might take a while to write though because i am a bit lazy. Thanx as always for reading

Reads to me like a "Shakespearean" ballad, very rich, very evocative. ..and more to come. You have a distinctive style Matthew - exceedingly poetic and your use of ryhme quite magical.

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

thanx Anna, the style is a little old fashioned but i love that kind of poetry. Your comments are so sweet, thank u so much. And Shakespearean balled, i wish!! ha, thanx again for reading,

god, why do you have to be so amazing at poetry? lol
this is incredible... like... i'm at a loss for words matt lol i should have given you harder words! grrr! hahaha!
but seriously - this is amazing. it has a very smooth flow and it reads wonderfully. ah and you leave off with the castle, yet to bring in the dry ice but oh i can't wait. i'm really excited. this is wonderful ^^
looking forward to part 2 and 3 - so far you're doing excellent with the challenge! it can only get better from here :D

Posted: Jul 8, 2008

Author Comment:

ha, thanx Alice, i always love your comments, u r too kind. The dry ice as took some thinking about, will it be in part 2 or 3? hope the story i was trying to tell comes across. I suppose the style is a little old fashioned which many people won't like, but i thought it went well with the subject. Thanx for reading, and yes it can only get better from here? haha!

Well yay you! The first line automatically and very much in a grandeur sense places us deep into your mind, and seeing exactly what you want us to see.

I love the thought process of seeing a star that had burst....too much stress for the poor soul.

And oh my god, bent down to kiss the watery lips. Matt, let's make out! Ha! I love that sentence!

And onto your gradual steps with wickedness...fraud, treachery, glutton...wait a sec...is the author being seduced by a fallen angel? OOOh, I love this Matt! Love the rhyming and the story of seduction and how the author is trying to fight the seduction but doesn't want to fight the seduction! yippee! He drinks the last bitters and dregs of loneliness! Only to see a glimmer over his shoulder.

Matt, I love it. Flowed off the palette like exotic debauchery.

Sweet.

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

Author Comment:

ha, thanx peachy, your comments are as wonderful as always. im so happy you like the poem/story so far. there's two more parts to come remember. im so glad you like the romantic images in the poem. ah, seduced by a fallen angel, yes indeed like so many before him. how many men died fighting at Troy? What you women do to us poor souls? yes he is fighting seduction but he wants to be a victim of it, so it leads him into a place of hell. but there is more to tell. he is equally cursed and blessed, so i wonder what fate as in store?



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