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The Lone Bed

Poem By: matthew smith
Poetry


is this poem about desire? View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Apr 3, 2008    Reads: 91    Comments: 9    Likes: 8   


The sounds of London echo through the room,
though it is late and I am just in bed
the city does not sleep. It’s two o’clock
and the days heat held by the buildings
seeps from every corner of a dirty
city, the air is clammy about the room
and draws me in like the vapour of a drug,
as the alcohol of the evening,              
now stale on my breath, leaves me dry
and frantic for your smile.
 
Though you are near you seem so far away
like the voices I hear on the street below,
laughter meant for another ear,
replaced by despair in the falling light
and I like a thief fall into shadow,
as distant sirens play their mournful tunes.
Secure in the comfort of the lone bed
I pull the covers tighter, then I think
of you downstairs and feel guilt, for I
have forced you into a cold retreat.
 
Maybe I shouldn’t be here in this room?
Your world is all around me pressing its
history onto my consciousness, as
I shrink from being a part of its memory.
The bed may hold secrets I have no wish
to know, though teasingly my mind won’t give
up the ghost and briefly I feel pain.
Now the darkness reveals more of you,
I can taste you on the sheets as I pull the
duvet tighter and fall into a soft sleep.  


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Comments:

You have a wonderful way with words. Great imagery in this poetry. Very alluring style, almost like a mysterious yet magical way of expressing ideas. Great poem matthew! ^^

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks Punishment, its encouraging to hear such warm praise, it makes the writing so worthwhile

OOOH!Deep...

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks kitty...wish i could have wrote it in the shape of a bed!

Wow-- your poem is really delineate, even in the space of just a few words:)! I loved the images-- I could almost feel the heat, hear the sirens and the children's laughter, feel the self-consciousness... Really good. One thing though-- nothing about your words (just your formatting) but this part you might want to change:
the city does not sleep. It’s two o’clock...

Usually you don't put periods in the middle of a line in a poem... Perhaps you can move It's two o'clock down onto a seperate line-- play around with the formatting (not the words, I love the words)^_^!

Anyway lot's of special chocolate to you,

Ghiradelli Girl.

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for your comments Ghiradelli they mean at lot. i will play around with the formatting and c wot comes up, though i must keep my 10 lines to each stanza

beautifully written, powerful images and hauntingly memorable. I gave it an I like it vote.

Posted: Apr 4, 2008

Author Comment:

wow, thank u so much Anna..im really happy u like it

Irwin
(not registered user)

This reminded me of a medievil London even the sirens at the docks, in the fog. Very atmosphereic. I also liked the half hidden desire.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you Irwin. i like poetry with strong images that can transport you visually. i also ilke poetry to have hidden layers, that only hint at a meaning. dont know if i managed this but thanks again for stopping by, hope it was worth it

You've placed me there visually. To me, this is your first erotic piece. Altho i see erotic in lots of writing where the author has no clue to the layers they've just laid.

I really like this one Matthew, it's nice to know that men feel such sentiments in a moment where they look back and realize what's just occurred.

Assurance. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted: Apr 6, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you yet again Classy Peach for your wonderful and insightful comments

this is a really great poem, very beautiful!! Greatly written! Good job! :)

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks...sooooooo glad u found my work...now im off to find yours!!!!!!!

This strikes me as overwhelmingly sad. There he rests in the bed alone thinking about her and the secrets that the bed holds. Of course, we don't know what he's doing in the bed alone (?) or why the guilt. I could easily twist it in my mind to something of an personal and erotic nature that keeps him under the covers. Very thought provoking. I'm going to stop here before my mind keeps wandering. :)

Posted: May 12, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank u sisi, let your mind wander, is that not one of the many reasons we write? I love poetry that temps the reader (i spelt it right!!) to speculate, but but ultimately doesn’t reveal all. In truth the poem is about having a female as one of your closest friends, and when the boundary’s of love become confused. So I wanted a bit of sexual tension in there, as well as feelings of guilt.


This to me sounds like your memory coming back to haunt you. But in the last verse you speak about being in her place and whether you are welcome. It's as if you've crossed a line and you can't move back. It is also erotic but subtly so.

Friend or more than, sometimes it's just nice to have someone who can see you, and that can be appealing and it's easy to get confused. Anyhow, I love this Matt, it’s a great poem! ~ Nixie

Posted: Jun 1, 2008

Author Comment:

This was written some time ago when i used to visit a friend of mine who lived in London. We were close after spending 3 years at uni, but when a very close friend is female there's always questions about how deeply you feel for that person. Does your emotions go beyond friendship? I think almost everyone as experienced this in life



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