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Submitted: May 8, 2008 Reads: 96 Comments: 13 Likes: 6
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Sweet and melancholy come to mind when I read this. It's vivid in my head as I read it, and I was also thinking the first stanza seemed like the perfect excuse to stay home with the covers pulled up over your head. You have quite a bit of talent Matthew!
Posted: May 9, 2008
Hi Matthew :-)
I enjoyed this.
yep we never do know what the weather will be do we?
I live in MN. so many times it is the main topic of conversation LOL!
I like the part that you say 'she'll blame me and I'll blame the weather' LOl.
anyway nice reading, I have seen you here and there but think this is the first time I have commented?
see you around ~katie
Posted: May 9, 2008
Matthew why do you always speak of aging in your poetry? I'm betting you are probably 10 yrs younger than me but it seems to plague you.
I like to think that gale force winds mean someone is thinking very powerfully of you.
This also speaks of how women think too much. (guilty!)...ya right it was the weather! it probably was, but she'll think more of it.
Walking slowly and whispering sadly sorta sums up the whole tone...you've spent a year (4 seasons!!) waiting for something magical to happen with someone yet it hasn't. Some would think what a waste, while I believe I see in this poem that you gave it your all, and that's all we can ask of ourselves in life. And walk away proudly.
The rainbow shimmers in the distance (operative word = distance)...this is a very optimistic poem for a man to write and how you sell your soul to love (or hopes of**) yet doom lingers Matthew, in her voice. (words like frozen and muttering, scatters, forced are her voice).
What a very refreshing poem Matthew. I really like it.
Posted: May 10, 2008
Awww Matthew, thank you for the e-hug this morning.
(speechless)
Posted: May 10, 2008
that was a nice poem. i enjoyed it. =)
Posted: May 10, 2008
As always, wonderful work Matthew. The imagery and your emotional prowess of the written word is exceptional.
Posted: May 11, 2008
Very well written and emotionally overwhelming. The visual imagery is just superb.
Posted: May 12, 2008
Aw, matt I loved this. Sweet and delicate truths, it's funny how little things rely on the weather. I great metaphor for life! ~ KB
Posted: May 14, 2008
I like this. Rain is my kind of weather.
Posted: May 14, 2008
I love the rain, not say I don't like the sun, both are perfect bliss in there own way. But the weather does seem to hold some control over us and our daily habits. I thought this was a lovely read, the ending made me smile! ~ Nixie
Posted: May 16, 2008
Aww, this was so sweet. I was deeply touched by it. I love your choice of words, and I could really connect with it. You have so much talent, and I envy you. You do such a great job with your writing. I hope you continue to write more. :D
Posted: May 17, 2008
I like this.
The weather does scupper the best laid plans to meet with a lover.
Embrace the weather and its moods and adapt your plans accordingly... A walk in spring rain with a lover or watching the leaves blow round in autumn.....
Really good poem.
Peace
Boneman
Posted: May 18, 2008
wow i'm rather late getting to this one.
another fine piece of poetry. it was enjoyable.
my favorite line:
Today is snow,
white like a fairytale in
April.
loved the metaphors used throughout. a poem very well written!
marvelous work ^^
Posted: May 18, 2008
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