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The world is a fragile place, and though we may live on solid ground, we are always stood on the edge of a void. View table of contents...
Submitted: Apr 19, 2008 Reads: 341 Comments: 12 Likes: 5
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lovely. for some reason, my favorite line was "rambling buildings spill their past onto the encroaching grass" i dont know why... but that line for some reason stands out to me. maybe its the personification.
lovely imagery used! the story in the poem is sad and heartfelt but i liked it muchly. :)
Posted: Apr 19, 2008
destination assured
that's my favorite line in this poetry.
I think or wonder if you've realized that you wrote this peering through a window (from the train). While you are not a part of it as the window buffers you, you still notice and feel safe in the womb KNOWING there is a buffer between you and that undeniable and inevitable bleakness just beyond. Like being in love but never speaking your heart....what the heck are you really in love then?
Pow! This one hits hard Matthew.
Posted: Apr 20, 2008
hmm, this is very very nice!! i enjoyed it!! keep up the good work!!
Posted: Apr 25, 2008
Nice Matthew, you write poemystories too. I really think thats cool!!
Posted: May 4, 2008
Wicked!!! I loved it!!! discriptive yet story like!
A*
Posted: May 7, 2008
For some reason this poem makes me feel sad and optimistic at the same time. I feel as though I'm watching a journey unfold. Great work!
Posted: May 7, 2008
I read this one twice too! Once I read it out loud and it beautiful! This would be a good poem to narrate and post. I see more and more people posting music with their work, but it would be awesome to hear somebody besides myself read it. Great job!
Posted: May 10, 2008
your poems always sound so...well, poetic. i felt like i was reading a poem from a collection or book of poems. good job! =)
Posted: May 10, 2008
wow. your writing made the wrld so majestic and translucent. Like i want to start writing then and there. your adaptations to love made me enthralled. thank you for this piece of fiction. haha :)
Posted: May 13, 2008
Aw, my poor heart is clutching in my chest right now! Ha! Absolutely brilliant, Matt! ~ KB
Posted: May 14, 2008
hi! matt. u've summed it up so well, "where being in love and never speaking your heart is the most painful kind of love". nice. ;-)
Posted: May 14, 2008
Hello,
i must commend you on your flair for vivid imagery, it was spot on. Ur poem was certainly nostalgic evoking bittersweet emotions. I like ur work, but i must confess poems with rhymes in the verse are my particular forte, so i may not be able to give you a thorough critique of ur work. Regardless ur poem made an intresting read. gr8 going.
Posted: May 23, 2008
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