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Through waters where the moon fled

Poem By: matthew smith
Poetry


It's a poem about love View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Mar 31, 2008    Reads: 97    Comments: 8    Likes: 5   


Through waters where the moon fled I see no
hour, I see no limit to the blind
distance, to the aching sea and green waves,
 
those green waves and the falling sky are my
destroyer, alone under the lamplight
I’m waiting for the night to close me down.
 
The night as claimed me. I see your face
among the lovers spilling over the street like
wine, each face seems to mock me and I
run, defeated, and ride the green wave.
The night smothers me. Among the lovers
I am ridiculed, a crow among men.
Each face which turns to laugh is your face,
and I’m left in the voice of the rain.


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Comments:

W-O-W!!
i love the figurative language used!!
i'm lovin' it!

Posted: Mar 31, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you, i hope to post some more soon

That last line is really full of depth and reads great.

Posted: Mar 31, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks, i look forward to reading your poetry

A rain that devours the seeds
and blooming will be in morning.
Let me start again.
I don't want to follow the moon.


Would people feel less alone if they didn't see lovers rushing the streets? Is it only envy? Or is it a dark lure that enables self sadness which is a bit too familiar/safe.

I am so glad you've joined Booksie and look forward to your writing. Thank you for making an appearance on my page so that I was able to find such luxury from your pen.

Posted: Apr 1, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you. poetry can be seen as questions which we all have our own answers to, thats why a poem can mean something different to every reader

Wow! Another powerful poem "the aching sea","through waters where the moon fled" - beautiful images and thoughts. I loved this.

Posted: Apr 5, 2008

Author Comment:

again thank you Anna. images of the sea again, theres a powerful influence on my work in relation to love, sea and loss.

Ah, the longing of a lover and the eternal pounding of the sea. You write beautifully if I can take this first one as an indication.

Posted: May 9, 2008

Author Comment:

ah thank u so much. I always associate the sea with longing, there’s just something mesmerising about it

I know this feeling all to well, the mocking of the ocean, the green sea! Interesting metaphor Matt, I like it. The ocean keeps on turning, and on the other side is clear blue water. :) Just a thought. You inspire me! ~ Nixie

Posted: Jun 4, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Nixie, thanx for the lovely comment. Love is both beautiful and cruel, but I don’t think we’d have it any other way!

Love is strange ...a mirage...i do feel the stab of jealousy in my heart when i see lovers on streets and those who r close to each other - physically and emotionally....

life, career, profession, etc etc etc...become more imp once we r married and we just lose the magic...

i guess this is life and this is love...which still keeps us together....

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

Author Comment:

its hard seeing lovers together when you are alone or going through pain. Yes you know how beautiful they are but its that pang of jealousy that hurts. There is always the images of distance and water in my poems!

I LOVED it! Its really wonderful the way you have presented the whole of it. And loved the imagery! :-)

And i guess I know how exactly it feels to see lovers together, when you're in pain of losing one...
Take care!

nuttyz~

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey, thinx for reading, and leaving a wonderful comment! I'm happy you could feel what i was trying to write. Thanx again for reading!



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