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Submitted: Jul 3, 2008 Reads: 90 Comments: 14 Likes: 13
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wow matt O.O
i think this is a new favorite. i absolutely loved it and the repetition added on, building up to the breathtaking climax "Tonight I cannot write because my hand trembles frm the impact of your touch" - my jaw dropped! this is such a beautiful poem! i want to click the "i like it" button a zillion times!
a beautiful and brilliant read my friend!
keep up the excellent writing!
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
When you first joined booksie your poems were filled with similar longing, but it was a joyous happy longing, this one is not like that. It's almost a morose morbid longing. What an interesting change Matt. You've used one of my all-time favorite words in this poem.
Drunk with passion is so cool.
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
This whole poem took my heart. I felt the longing you expressed. Sitting here myself thinking, but not writing like I want too. So much emotion, such desire for one beautiful soul making your passion that much stronger. The ache of loves passion, the beauty of ones soul, inside a heart of such warmth and gentleness. The deep journey of ones love expressed with such passionate desire to just be. Longing....to be....to have!
Posted: Jul 3, 2008
This one is my favorite of the two you just posted. I just love it Matt. Its sad and full of wanting, longing. He wants somebody that is too far away and his mind won't quiet down about it. He wants to concentrate, but her image keeps popping into his mind. My favorite line might be "Tonight I cannot write for my words trace the echo of your silence." Although, "For alone I am struck by this realisation;
the acknowledgement that my touch is cold,
pointless, impossible." - is so sad that it makes me want to cry.
I love this one Matt. Its a wonderful poem by a man bursting with talent.
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
hi! mat. write, my friend, write. for that is the elixir of life. that touch should give u impetus to write an epic. so, here's waiting for - an epic! liked the thought in this poem . lol. ;-)
Posted: Jul 4, 2008
This poem trembles and enamates with sadness and longing and heartache and a wistful aching beauty I found so appealing. A lovely write Matthew.
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
I love this.. refreshing and real that is what I like and need and want ... more please perhaps you could peek at me
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
Fantastic, if paradoxic
Posted: Jul 6, 2008
Wow, this is absolutley beautiful and very well written, this is definatly a favorite, well done.
Posted: Jul 8, 2008
the shyness of touch,
the impulse of breath,
the longing of silence
LOVELY...and u said "u cannot write tonight?" I wish i too could think like this...
Tonight I cannot write because my hand
trembles from the impact of your touch.
She is so lucky to have someone as warm and lovely as you are....she is everything u would have asked for i am sure and she definitely is the INSPIRATION behind ur words and thoughts and love...and everything....
GOD BLESS YOU
Posted: Jul 13, 2008
This is wonderful, Matthew!!! Having nothing to write down means there is so much to write about. Perhaps, your mind was full of thoughts---the thought of her---that you just didn't know where to begin or how to get it started. ^^
Great read. :-)
Posted: Jul 17, 2008
The man who says he cannot write tonight churns out a brilliant opera of words. What an irony!!
Posted: Aug 10, 2008
My god - I was in the room watching you. WOW.
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
And again. WOW.
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
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