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My first poem. It's about being cheated on, or being deceived in general.
Andrea Abyss sier: I like it, it's kind of sad. But the rhyme scheme in the first stanza isn't as good as it is in the second stanza. The third line seems a little too long for follow the rest of them although I understood what you were getting at.
Submitted:Nov 20, 2012 Reads: 43 Comments: 2 Likes: 2
Your memory invades my dreams
What do you want, what do you need?
What you did hurt more than it seems
Was what you did out of greed?
Do you seek me out to hurt me more?
Isn't it enough, what you've done before?
I ponder to myself, what did you do this for?
You left me thinking you're a fucking whore.
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