120 Sinners

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Poem By: Methelusa
Poetry

Tags: sin, sinners, sinning, winning, clarity of thought, methelusa, judy, glass\' theme

Written to celabrate the coalition of time a) the moment this was created, and b) the combining of that moment with the time spent using cognitive thought and motor skills to bring it to life. View table of contents...

Submitted: Jun 6, 2007 Reads: 49 Comments: 6 Likes: 0

120 sinners, sinning

Above the statues pillars, grinning

A passivity that belies your years

A lividity, that comes with age

100 liars, lying

Below the ocean cold

A digression to the sentiments

The suppleness of youth.

Twisted.

I heard you, I heard you there.

And I saw you, I caught you out.

10,000 smiles.

1 million miles.

To you. Around you

Arrainged for your beauty,

Lost in your eye

Pick me out with a lullaby

Jellybean concucbine

Lost forever, and forever lost

A hundred wishers, wishing.

Up to you.

Down to you.

In and out and all around

Please don't call me if i'm down,

I'll find a way to get through to you.

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Comments:

Dawn Prest

"And what you never knew, can never get to you..."
Nice work-how many will understand the summary?!?!?!?
Woot woot.

Posted: Jun 6, 2007

Author Comment:

"Someone with time to waste, but not me, not me"

Tesseth

Hey, the summary is what got me to read this piece! I thought it was quite intelligent, so I was curious about the writing it was created for. And...I was not disappointed! I really love your writing! It is unique and creative. I'm thinking this all comes pretty natural to you...freestyle, off-the-top-of-your-mind, very natural. I need to check out more of your stuff!

Posted: Jun 6, 2007

Author Comment:

Ha ha - yeah you're right, I don't tend to think things through too much, let them come. If I sit down with a topic in mind I often struggle to stay on course, so I just write whatever pops in my head! Thanks for the comment, very much appreciated.

leesah

Thought the flow could actually be a song..loved this one, going down as one of my favs by Meth!

Posted: Jun 7, 2007

Author Comment:

Wow! Thankyou, I thought it was a little throwaway to be honest, I had words in my head, but no idea of song, but I may have to go and get my guitar. It was another 5 minute rant of mine! Appreciate your thoughts leesah.

Dmonik

You done it again Meth. Another superb piece of coherent randomness. Dawn's right though, I didn't get the summary at first, had to re-read it. 120 Sinners? Sounds like my house used to be when I had parties every friday night. No more though, I've calmed down in my old age ( Nearly 30!?!?! Shit, pension time soon! ) lol

Love the jellybean concubine line. I seen some strange things in my time, but never one of those! Great work. 5/5

Posted: Jun 7, 2007

Author Comment:

Ha ha - yeah my house too on a Saturday, but that was when I was young...thanks for the support, appreciated.

Saturday Night

You rock my friend. A very enjoyable read.

Posted: Jun 9, 2007

Author Comment:

Thankyou very much!

Vic Monchego

Meth, you have a fine pen. We'd like to re-post one of your fine poems at Vic Monchego's Episodes. "120 Sinners" is one of my favorites. vic.monchego@gmail.com. With thanks, VBM

Posted: Jun 10, 2007