Hearts and Flowers

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Poem By: Methelusa
Poetry

Tags: love, tears, loneliness

Twisted take on love and all... View table of contents...

Submitted: Feb 12, 2007 Reads: 92 Comments: 7 Likes: 0

Hearts and flowers, is all I want from you,

I lost my power, to stay so close to you

And I feel the misery, of all your mystery,

What was I thinking, when I first cried for you?

So I remember, the walks in the pouring rain,

How could I forget? Or feel like that again?

Can you find the way, to appease and release my eyes

So i can fade away on hells sweet misery.

Hide your perfect sin, buried in those eyes

The stars are black tonight, there is no reason why,

Desiring to a fault, teardrops owned and sold

What was I thinking, when I first died for you?

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Comments:

matmoo

nice!
very layered. Is that the word? pehaps... deep, mysterious, charming? something like all that in one maybe.

: matmoo )

Posted: Feb 12, 2007

Author Comment:

Cool, thankyou! I was going for mystery, with being love season and all...

Dawn Prest

Nicely put, my love.

Posted: Feb 12, 2007

Author Comment:

Mystery for always, my dear.

I'll give them all 5, as much to help put you above some other listless poets who litter these pages as to venerate your work as the publishable marvel that it is.

It's such a gorgeous pleasure to read a poem that tells me what the writer is feeling and I'm not reading thinking, "the metre sucks, where's the beat? That line sticks in the neck..." etc.

I wonder if you perform these live? They have a ring of spoken confidence about them.

By the way, your poetic sentiment shines through each line. My favourites are here...

"The stars are black tonight, there is no reason why,

Desiring to a fault, teardrops owned and sold"

Posted: Feb 19, 2007

Author Comment:

Thankyou for such high praise! I do feel that poets can sometimes bang out line after line of listless work. And I have been guilty of that many times. Most of the work I've put up here has been performed live in song form at one time or other, sometimes the rhythm translates, other times not. But I don't believe that I've put anything up here that I am not proud to have written, and it is nice that others are getting something from the work.

Many, many thanks again. Jim.

autumnevers

That was an amazing poem and it was very deep you are exceptional poet!!

Posted: Mar 16, 2007

Author Comment:

Thankyou very much, it's something I'm very passionate about.

leesah

Yup another great piece! Your language is quite unique. Didn't mean to rhyme there..but once again amazing stuff.5!

Posted: Mar 16, 2007

Author Comment:

Thankyou, I always appreciate a positive comment from you, as I have a respect for your work aswell.

Bitter Irony

Very lovely. I'd list some favorite lines, but I would probably wind up repeating the whole poem!

Posted: Mar 17, 2007

Author Comment:

Thankyou, i always appreciate it. I'm glad you like it, although I have to say it wasn't meant to be a 'lovely piece! But whatever you get out of it, that's all that matters with any artform.