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Of the cuff, I just liked the two words as a title, and took it from there. May be some typo's, as it was 2.30AM when I wrote this. View table of contents...
Submitted: Apr 14, 2007 Reads: 48 Comments: 5 Likes: 1
Here I lie, in his hands
Below a bed, a sense of doom
A sickly sweet atheme
A charcoal smile, remembering.
Heavens sadness, in our eyes,
A mothers love, with damned disguise
Habitual lovers, on the streets
With pinhole cameras, and dirty sheets.
Out of breath, in empty rooms,
A sigh of sadness, leaves us bemused
Icy breath, against the wind
It's heavens sadness,
Remembering.
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very good i love it and if you wouldnt mind and read some of my work nothing specific what ever you choose doesnt matter.
Posted: Apr 14, 2007
A well structured poem with an enticing theme.
Posted: Apr 15, 2007
Like it. "Not bad for something I came up with in the middle of the night."
Nicely done, no wasted words of feelings.
Posted: Apr 15, 2007
This one got me thinking... so you have done your job most brilliantly once again.
Posted: Apr 16, 2007
Bloody brilliant piece, I love the third line most of all, it hit me, ya know. Great jod.
Posted: Feb 5, 2008
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