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Submitted: Feb 26, 2008 Reads: 138 Comments: 23 Likes: 12
Inside a whiskey bottle
I wallow.
Waking up in cold sweats
feeling hollow.
Another drink until
tomorrow.
Sometimes this truth is
hard to swallow,
unlike the whiskey
that drowns my sorrow.
In the future-there lies
a past.
Things I've done come
to haunt me, Alas.
Seeing horrible visions
my life
aghast.
From this bottle
I'll drink my last.
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That is a bottomless pit of hell the bottle
Posted: Feb 26, 2008
I thought this one was good. You can feel the anguish and desperation. Good job.
Posted: Feb 29, 2008
nice interpretation of alcoholism. (if there is one)
captured the emotion and sence of solace really well, in yet few and simple words.
good work. x
Posted: Mar 23, 2008
Brilliant - so few words get right to the point - excellent work.
Posted: Nov 23, 2008
Sounds like the voice of experience. I, too have had lots of experience. If you care to, I have a few poems in my profile, relating to alcoholism. Also, if you like, I wrote an article "Alcoholism: An Essay Of Truth" I would love to hear your views.
MA
Posted: Nov 23, 2008
well written, straight to the point. Me likey.
Posted: Nov 24, 2008
Getting Clean And Sober
Getting clean and sober.
Tired of all the beatings and the hatred of the people for the poor and homeless man
Working and justifying all eye am.
Working for a FIVE DOLLAR bill to get more beer.
Becoming drunkard was the plan.
Time will not erase all the alcoholic waste of time in meaningless meetings like AA.
The day the day had come to come unwound to come apart to find the help of GOD above.
Eye packed a bag eye took some food but not enough to survive for more than just that DAY and eye did FIVE.
FIVE days into the desert and eye was not alone for the SON OF GOD
Who sits upon the THRONE was watching me.
Eye did my time in the desert sun just walking without home
And aimlessly beginning mye new life in sobriety.
Eye survived mostly by pure luck and the SPIRIT of the SON
Who would not depart from me and eye found GOD again
Inside of me and even in the people around about me.
COLD TURKEY is a song but also an attitude and if it gets the JOB done
Than that is what ALL of you should DO.
Eye am sober TODAY because of JESUS and some time spent in agony
Sweating out my alcohol and getting clean and sober.
LISTEN unto me the LORD has heard my prayer and never will eye need another drink
Eye made a VOW to GOD above to drink no more alcoholic beverages until eye am with HIM in glory inside of HEAVENS door.
Please understand that a VOW it must be kept there is no further going back
COFFEE at my elbow and sodas when eye sleep
There is no mmore booze for homeless hobo to drink.
Posted: Nov 24, 2008
Very moving poem. I too wrestled with my demons for a long time. I am now clean and sober.
Keep walking towards the light and better days
Peace
Boneman
Posted: Nov 25, 2008
When someone is in pain, they turn to alcohol for relief but that doesn't have to be so. I'm impressed by this poem. You captured the feeling. Kudos.
Posted: Nov 25, 2008
ive been in the bottle.
ive also been in the pipe.
in the pill.
in the white fluffy wonderpowder that makes you go WOAH when you snort it.
none of it is cool.
But I know what it is like because I have been there.
I'm here for you, for moral support at least.
I know what it's like to be stuck in something that you feel like you have no control over whatsoever.
Me, I found God and my life became better after that.
Not instantly.
Not even close to quick.
It was a slow change, but it was a good one.
Things take time.
Just remember that there are people who have been there and kicked the same things you are struggling with..
People that you can go to if you need somebody just to listen to what you have to say.
Posted: Nov 25, 2008
feeling hollow, another drink until tommorow....
How true. So true, it's sad. I've been there, fighting for my father, but not everyone can be saved...
HopeXP
Posted: Nov 25, 2008
I rote one called The Addiction... but it was about a guy being addicted to murder... I guess it's not quite the same. Well penned tho and congrats on getting featured on the main page!
Posted: Nov 26, 2008
Very good poem.........you brought the feelings of a drunkard come alive.......
Posted: Nov 27, 2008
i like this.. its really good and well written..
it captures the feeling too..
.x peace
Posted: Nov 27, 2008
i liked this poem, because it was really interesting and the phrases were great
Posted: Nov 29, 2008
i've started the whiskey diet..i've lost four days already!
great poem pal, loved it!
x
Posted: Nov 29, 2008
Wow. That was amazing. I don't intend to be mean, but I'm an editor at heart, and horriable has no A.
Other than that, that was the best poem I've read in about... a while. A long while. Thank you.
Posted: Nov 29, 2008
Good work. Strong sentiment captured well. There can be strength on the page - and honesty - found no where else.
Posted: Nov 30, 2008
Ah yes, your poem is clearly about
the choices one makes. To each his
own. Good write and read! Kind Regards.
Posted: Nov 30, 2008
Well written. Insightful. A pleasure to read.
Posted: Dec 1, 2008
Especially loved the last sentence, and really liked the rest of it. I hope you beat this thing! I believe you can do it :)
Posted: Dec 1, 2008
Good poem. Beer was my best friend for a long while; i've not drank in about 4 months but i'd love to have a few. It's a strong addiction that one doesn't understand unless you've been through it. I could bury my sorrows in up to a case a day at times. Self-medicating, of course, but I also loved the taste of it as well. Thanks for sharing.
Steve
Posted: Dec 2, 2008
Short but powerful, having alcoholism in my family I can relate somewhat. However, your words make it clear that there is a pain inside that those of us without the addiction ourselves can not comprehend. Thanks for sharing this poem, I'm sure it will touch a lot of lives.
Take Care
Posted: Dec 2, 2008
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