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Killer Smile.

Poem By: MissAlice
Poetry


Oh little one with Scarlet Dreams..
This is my first poem to submit, and it's not completely done as you can tell--but my friend courtney really wanted me to submit something so I will edit it later!
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Submitted: Jul 14, 2008    Reads: 56    Comments: 6    Likes: 4   


Killer Smile

Oh little one with Scarlet Dreams

Whose mind is clouded so

Your apron stained with Violet tears,

the pain, it overflows..


Saphire pools of rippling hate

Brown curly locks of dread

Dark skin to match your tainted soul,

Whose innocence has fled..


"Your name." I ask "Is all I want."

"One answer will suffice."

Instead you give a wicked smile,

One coated thick with ice.


Oh little one with Scarlet Dreams

Whose mind is clouded so

Your apron stained with Pastel tears,

the pain, you'd ne'er show..


Those eyes, once filled with joy and life

Hold no remorse or love

a hellish void now rests in place,

a Crimson past of blood.


"If I oblige, and so I shall

What then will you persist?

a troubled past, a shackled mind

All shrouded in the mists?"


Oh little one with Scarlet dreams

Whose mind is clouded so

Your apron stained with Crimson tears,

No one will ever know.


"Your name," I say. "Again I ask

Is all that I pursue.

No trickery or foul deeds here"

At least give me a clue?"


She smiled that look of wretched mock

But then with a small voice

She raised her head in soft reply,

and said "It is your own choice."


"What a strange, peculiar girl." I said

"To speak such horrid thoughts..

What harm could come from knowing a name

What madness has it wrought?"


At last between two lips of red

A single word took form

It broke my heart into pieces and shards

And left me feeling forlorn


PS. *EDIT*

I added a bit more, yay! ^^ ill try to finish it up tomorrow. Sorry for the lateness , but I'm just really busy at the moment and can't find time to finish this dang poem. XD

This is my first poem to submit, and it's not completely done as you can tell--

but my friend courtney really wanted me to submit something so I will edit it later!


*Happy Reading*



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Comments:

Hm...interesting concept. I'd really like to see how you finish it.

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you lol, and I'll be sure to update you when I finish it. :)

Ha, I like! It sounds better than it did when you read it over the phone! You accomplished quite a bit in the odd hours of the morning! :D

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

I like it. Tell me when you complete it. Oh, and thanks for being my fan!

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

Sweetness.

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

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amazing!
i love the story and the idea, an i especially LOVE the two stanzas in which the person asks the girl for her name, it blew me away =]
love your work *cheers*
keep me posted :D:D
take care ^^

Posted: Aug 12, 2008

Author Comment:

hugs for miss karen? -huggggs!!- yay thank you so much for your wonderful comments :DD lol // those two stanzas were my favorite too! :] i'll update ya soon. :)

@_@
Wow, you deserve a cookie for that one or something XD
I loved it, especially the last four lines.
Ahmayzin'

Posted: Aug 31, 2008

Author Comment:

yay cookie!!! :DD lol thank you for reading, glad you liked it. ^^



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