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Submitted: Aug 8, 2008 Reads: 19 Comments: 2 Likes: 2
Sitting under the apple tree,
A breeze tickling my toes,
The bright sun
Shining on my face,
I thought of you.
Walking along the canal side
Watching the cygnets swim
The beautiful swans
Protecting their young
I thought of you.
The moon lights up the night
Stars twinkle in the sky
As I lay in my bed
Waiting for sleep to come
I thought of you.
Then I remembered you had gone!!!
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Hi Moon... a very "wonder-full", enjoyable poem you have written from the heart with much feeling, tenderness and imagery... ((until the last line!!)) No one is ever 'really gone' unless we bury our thoughts and feelings. Our memories and places kept special in the heart keep these people right where they belong... alive within us forever!
In your lovely poem, you are kept awake remembering NOT because you have lost a someone and they are gone now but because you loved them and miss their physical presence. That is what is so wonderful about love... those that we love continue to live in our hearts long after they are 'gone'.
To happier days and many blessings.....Jerry
Posted: Aug 12, 2008
Very atmospheric moon...sad ending but the memories are vivid and superbly captured. One of your best I'd say.
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
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