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Submitted: Jun 20, 2008 Reads: 144 Comments: 58 Likes: 19
Dandelions
In a secret garden in my mind,
there's dandelions, sunflowers, and roses.
I pick out the dandelions and blow
and I see the little seeds fly away.
Then I close my eyes and wish,
that someday true love will find me.
The seeds blow away across the cloudy sky
and again I'm standing there gazing so high.
Everyday I pick out a dandelion and blow,
then I make a wish because deep down,
I'm still hopeful..
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I loved this! The whole idea of blowing the dandelion seeds was very good. I wish I'd thought of it! I thought the whole tone of the poem was nice.
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
I love how your poem involves around one particular image, and it's very effective because of that! It's a very romantic image in my head too, you know, the woman blowing dandelions across the field by herself wishing...
Very sad but hopeful too :) great work
(ahem especially since you wrote like 7 poems today already)
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
Very good! I agree with contoverse, it was a great idea to focus on the blowing of the dandelion petaly seedy things. =) Its good to have a poem that focuses on being hopeful when life today isn't exactly too promising.
Keep it up!
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
everyone needs to be hopeful even in their worste state. very inspirational i liked it write more like this.
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
Wow again! Your poems make me smile. Thank you!
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
very hope inspiring poem. nice work
Posted: Jun 20, 2008
-no comment-
its just really good
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
i loved this.........it is a poem that will just brighten your day and make you smile! i was subconciously smiling throughout the poem! =)
~Lemon
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
this is a very uplifting poem i love it
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
Beauteous! When and how do you write this stuff? Does it just pop into your head? Cuz if it does, you are SO lucky you have such a natural talent. I love it!! Mucho amor,
-Rosalie ;)
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
This is very pleasant, i must say!
i remember i used to do that myself!
Great job!
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
had the image in my head the entire time. Beautiful imagedry
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
hi! april. keep ur hopes flying high and they'll come true. u've great descriptive and imaginative power in ur poem that's a pleasure to read. keep it up. lol. ;-)
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
Dandelions are my fav flowers. Loved the poem so much more. Thank you.
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
I really enjoyed this one....:)
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
Aww ^^ I really loved this one. Like each little seed is a spark of hope. =]
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
I like this one. Simple, uncluttered, honest.
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
wow!!! this is amazing!!!!
i loved it. very creative!!!
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
I may just be weird (which I am, but still), but I found your poem to be very deep in a way I can't really explain. I liked it! A lot!
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
This is a very nice poem. I love the idea of dandlions carring wishes (it makes sence)!
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
i loveeeeee it i love it i love it plz look at my book storm dragon im stilling going on it but some is up
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
See the comments above mine? *Points to them* They say everything one could possibly say about a lovely poem like this. They have stolen everything possible. Sorry. If you want something nice Look above!! It's wonderful.
~Kaori
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
i heart dandelions, my friend; this is a great read =)
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
I used to make wishes on dandelions too. Some came true and others weren't meant to be. Just letting them go into the world is a lesson in hope.
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
Ah, the potential here! Show me. Don't tell me. Consider concentrating on the image of blowing the seeds of the dandelion/milkweed. The puckering of the lips. The blowing of a kiss to your true love . . . Ah so much potential . . . unrealized. :)
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
April, I loved your poem. It was sweet and hopeful.
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
When i blow one of them i image each seed if gogin to travel around the entire world to find my one and give her my love... :) Nice poem. Thank you for the surge of hope!
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
its so sweet!
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
This was really good! I loved it! It's really inspirational, in a world where so few people continue to hope.
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
Really nice. sweet and innocent!
love how you chose a dandelion; very fitting
Posted: Jun 22, 2008
awwwww this is just sooo sweet, i really liked this, usually with poems I get bored because people tend to write (no offense) about heart break and tears etc etc, but you wrote a simple and effective poem that has left me thinking and caused my hand to approach "the i like button"
I am waiting patiently for you to check out my stuff like my new short story "where is the love?" and my new poem "Today's thorns tommorrows roses" thank you ever so much!!
Happy days!
Posted: Jun 23, 2008
You know, what I love about this poem is that fact that it is so endearingly simple. No big words, no particular rhyme. Just a simple expression of feelings.
However, after I sat back and reflected on it, it seemed so much more profound than apparent at first glance. I don't know if I misinterpreted it or not, but the last few lines seemed to have a hint of sorrow in it which did not tarnish the overall feel-good aspect of the poem at all but seemed to add to it.
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
This one gave this warm feeling I so very much needed. Thank you!
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
loved the poem. amazing how you worded it. really captured the moment and the feelings :]
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
I love how it floats along into a really great ending .
Dess
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
I'm glad you left a message on my page. YOur poem is beautiful and very hopeful. Wish I had thought to write something about it but I had forgotten what those flowers were called. lol.
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
absolutely beautiful!
loved it
:]
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
Hey musicplayersMP :)
I read this poem a long time ago but I never commented on it...ah well.
This is a splendid poem! Your imagery is done very well and it creates a great mental picture. I look forward to reading more.
Regan
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
This is an awesome piece. I love it.
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
Very nice poem. Reading it reminded me of my youth when times were so carefree, and I used to blow dandelion seeds just to see them fly, thinking that they looked like little parachutes falling from the sky.
~ô¿õ~
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
itw was so simple and sweet!!!
really beautiful.........esp. the part about blowing away the dandelions.........beautiful imagery!!
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
awww, this was adorable, I immediately wanted to read because of the title "dandelions" I love em! Thanks for letting me know about this, it's awseome. great job!
STeph(:
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
This is powerful!
The imagery is great.
The message is clear.
A wonderful piece! ^^
Keep it up. ^^
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
that was great. i really enjoyed it. good job! =)
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
i like this poem it is very sweet but not to sugary sweet good job :)
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
Ah sweet, it's like wishing on stars, but dandelions (at least in these parts) are more readily available. Excellent write. And please never give up hope, true love is out there somewhere!
Posted: Jun 25, 2008
Very nicely done, I too like your choice of the dandelion. Very sweet, it flows beautifully.
Posted: Jun 26, 2008
Beautiful!!! Loved it!!!
peace Sb
Posted: Jun 26, 2008
I love this poem, the point of not giving up hope yet. Very good job. And I love the idea of dandelions. :)
Posted: Jun 26, 2008
Aw...it broke my heart. So much passion to share and so hopeful. And the imagery was so touching, so vivid, so sensual. What a beautiful heart you have. It was so lovely a poem that it has painted a flowing picure in my mind. Tremendous... And stay hopeful; one day all wish for will be realized..:)
Posted: Jun 27, 2008
What a beautiful poem! It moved me to tears! An inspiration! Well done!
megzbo-x
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
I liked it :) I got a nice visual when reading.
Posted: Jun 28, 2008
'Simplicity is the ultimate of sophistication'
Your poem brings out that evocation...........
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
I love it! I normally dont read poems that have anything to do with flowers or plants, but this one, I have to say, is the best one I've ever read!
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
cute. Relaxing I guess. It really calmed me down from my stressful day at work.
But aren't dandelions weeds?!?!?
Would you mind commenting on my story, Life On The Murder Scene? Thanks!!
***Devi_D***
Posted: Jul 2, 2008
wow...i love it!
Posted: Aug 6, 2008
Godd work! I'd really appreciate your thoughts on my new poem: Last Flight! Thanks!
Posted: Aug 8, 2008
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