booksie sometimes takes a while to load. your poems are very inspiring. i'm gonna be gone for a week i'm leaving saturday. i want to come back to comments. please leave me one sometime next week.

L ♥

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

"makes my heart a little bit stronger"
gosh i loved that line b/c i live by that phrase. everything that happens makes me stronger. indeed a very inspirational poem.
lovely writing ^^

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Hey! This poem is really great, and as, Alice and Lydia have been saying, it is very inspiring. Keep up the good work!!!

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

hmmm good i like most of your poems. You do poems the same way i do. Which is theres really no ryming pattern you just give a punch with it when you want. Atleast this is how i took it. Well maybe not this poem some of the others

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

OH I like this!! it's so positive and influential =] Good job! And thanks for reading. =]

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

its ok i spose sorry poetry's not really my cup of tea but i looked at it and commented like you asked and here have an i like it

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

good job, this is really good! =)(i say good alot)
~Lemon

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

I do admire your skills and free will to just write...songs and poems...this one particular is Nice ;)...Peace

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Very nice inspirational poem. Without punctuation it was a little confusing to read but from my interpretation, it seems like you're saying that although love is great you need to be free because it hurts right now, so the finally free in my interpretation is to be free from love. And even though it might hurt, thus will help you grow and become stronger next time.

Anyway that's just my interpretation and the reason I saw it like that is because that's really how I view life. I never regret anything I've done, and I try to never complain about hurt or sadness because I know that no matter what, I will learn from the experience and gain from it.

Like I said, the poem was a little confusing to understand at first, without the punctuation is sometimes hard to tell where one sentence ends and another thought begins, these lines particularly:

A cry for help longing to stay/Forever to be stuck there so/Open the doors to hope and faith/Open the doors to love and hate

I had to read it a few times to realize that the second line is in the same sentence as the third and fourth, lol.

And the only other thing is that the last line "At last I'm finally free" seems redundant since "at last" and "finally" means the same thing. I would recommend making the line "Finally, I am free" since your title is "Finally free."

That's all! It was a great read and keep up the good work!

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Very beautiful :)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

your poems are all very beautiful i really like them

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

That was so beautiful. It fills me with a lot of optimism. I love the lines - 'Anything I can take on and achieve/Makes my heart a little bit stronger'- you can only learn from experience so opening the door to anything and everything will only make you a stronger person, nothing will therefore hold you back and you'll be freeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.

Keep you the good work!

Olola.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

This poem is really beautiful.I like it.So nice! :)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Very inspiring poem,musicplayersMP

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Very nicely written. I liked the poem. I hope to read more of your work. Keep it up ;)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

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Very inspirational.
"Makes Me Heart A Little Bit Stronger"
Lovvvvvve it!! Lol. Totally what I think about my life.
Nicely done.. xD

~!~Megan~!~

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

wow! i liked it ! very deep!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

i like it and it is really good

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

This poem is really great, and as, Alice , Those and Lydia have been saying, it is very inspiring.i liked it ! very deep!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I hope we all can be that free. Nice one. ^^

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I always admired the thought of love

Having someone there to hug


I also hope "I BE FREE"....

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Excellent! *air guitar*

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

cool poem.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Anything I say will just be repetitive. I enjoyed this poem, though. ^-^

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

I love it! Excellent job!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Like it 2 da fullest.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Beautiful and very inspiring. I have some poems that I think you'd enjoy, and my series, but that's a whole other bucket of worms.
Keep writing and smileing!
Justine/Itania/Alice

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

very nice!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

This is very nice. It leaves room for own interpretation I think.
The way I see it, the narrator at the beginning is tied down, whether literally or figuratively, and by keeping hope and working towards freedom, they finally make it.
Free spirits will wither and die if they are tied down.

Great work.
~Kaori

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

That was amazing :D "When time stops and we're frozen" was my favorite line. I loved it ^^

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

That was such a cute and cool poem!

u have a knack for it

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Nicely done. I really liked it.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Amen to that! **smiles and two thumbs up!**

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Your metaphors were a bit mixed with the frozen escaping through locked doors not making a lot of sense...i liked how this started and ended but was confused in the middle. Perhaps a re-write focusing on the development of one thought. The idea of your poem though, is the most captivating, to be finally free - what a truly wonderful thing!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

it was a bit hard to undertsand what the whole poem meant, took me a few reads.. quite short too.. maybe expand on your imagery and details? just a suggestion.. but the ideas are really out there so good job =)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Wow! I really enjoyed it!
Mad props! Keep up the good work. :)
~Yezi91~

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

You poem is amazing, its great to read.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

really nice i liked it. plz continue to read my writings and give me ur honest thoughts. thanks take care now =]

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Wow. I loved it. This poem sure did put a smile on my face. =)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

good job!!!

.. i really like it
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yes...
it is very insperational

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

beautiful! I love it. Please post on my pomes and stories when you get the chance :D

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

OMG , it was really amazing , just think , one day you can be a famous poet !!

Keep up the good work !
Ranya

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Wow!! I'm so far behind everyone else, but I wanna be the most recent to say I luv it luv it luv it!!! It completely swept me away, and it leaves room for imagination to take hold of it and run away to the farthest recesses of the mind. Mucho amor,
-Rosalie ;)

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Good job, and you seem to have a good following keep it up

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

This was definetely written with feeling, however it seems to lack passion. Don't get me wrong, you probably were passionate about this topis or poem in particular, but when I read it I didn't necessarily feel that passion. Other than that, it was a smooth read and very enjoyable. :)

I have to agree with the sentiments expressed in it, and if you can get the reader to agree with what you've said, that is a great accomplishment in itself. Congrats! You executed that quite well. :)
As a whole I have to say I liked it.

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

hi! april. a hopeful heart is better than a hopeless one. positive energy flows and keeps one free from ill-thoughts and negative influences. ur poem is not only inspiring, it is extremely well-written. keep it up. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Hi. What I like about this is the way you avoid predictable rhyme...shows maturity in my opinion.
For example, 'love', 'hug', 'moment', frozen' are
connected beautifully. I encourage you to continue this practice, because it works really well here.
RICKY.

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

Hmm, . . . I like it!

Posted: Jun 21, 2008

OMG i really, really loved it
i think that it was absolutely wonderful i hope that you feel good about the work you have oublished cuz its real gud


♥ teenwitissues

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

It makes me think of how u must embrace life to live it. I really like this one.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Very beautiful. ^-^

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

If only out entire lives could be spend in the arms of the one's we love....Well if i say more i would be repeating what others have said, I know now one gets tired if hearing how good they are :P

PS: I better get more than a thanks :D:D:D:D:D lol

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

I liked it! Well done!

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Just wanted 2 say congrats for getting on the home page!

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

A very realistic and practical poem on life and love. I appreciated your rhyme. It reminds me of the old saying about better to have loved and lost than never to be loved at all. we all may face such situations in life but your poem adds a sense of positivity in that we can grow from our experiences.

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

having someone to hug and be close to is one of the best feelings
i empathize

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Very beautiful poem, I really like it.

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

amazingly insightful. I loved it

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

One of the best I've read in a while. Love the picture. It's cute. ^-^

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Velly Velly lovley! I loved it!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

It was very good. I like it.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

This is a really wonderful poem. Thank you for sharing!

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

This is the first poem I read in booksie and this is very inspirational. I loved this. I am inspired. will read more

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

this was amazing. oh i almost cried, love it.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

I like how positively cute this is ....Shows the true side of love .

Dess

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Hey, great poem. I think it is an inspiration to those that want independence IMO.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Another inspirational poem!? You're on a roll ;).

I love this one too. The great thing about it is that the narrator's thoughts are explained and detailed perfectly.

Hurry up and write a new one!

Regan

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Once again, another poem that brings back memories of my youth when I was feeling low, and my mom used to sing to me which always made me feel better.
Have you thought about putting your poetry into book form and publishing it?

~ô¿õ~

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

I really loved these lines--


So open the doors to hope and faith

Open the doors to love and hate



i dunno why exactly but i guess because they inspire you to accept all!

anyways.........it was a beautiful poem!

By the way,i would be really glad if you could check out some of my work and comment!! ^-^

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

*sighs*
that was so achignly lovely! I am definately a fan, wow, I love your poems! so beautiful. make sure to tell me when the next one is up!
Steph(:

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

FANTASTICO! muy bueno!

lol, im a little hyper cause i just drank a lot of caffeine. i cant believe im still using spanish, even though its summer break...how sad. but anyway, great poem. i love it! =D

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

So beautiful. I loved it. Great job. =) Mandy

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Short and sweet with a lasting impact. As everyone else has seemed to mention it's very inspirational and I love the simplicity of the piece. Good Job!

Posted: Jun 25, 2008

Great Poem!!! I liked it
Peace SB

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

i like this one. it is very pretty and i am a sucker for a poem about love, wether it's a happy love, a sad love. a love lost or whatever :)

Posted: Jun 26, 2008

when i read this, i felt that i need to break away from my fears of getting hurt or being happy. this is indeed inspirational:)

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

That is really good
it inspires me.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

WOW I don't know what to say as I am so stunned by this beautiful poem! Hey, I just found something to say!
Maybe you could check out some of mine? Would love to hear what a talented writer such as yourself thinks!
megzbo-x

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

Your writing is so sweet and so deep from your heart. To me, this poem is about a lost love; the whirlwind of emotions that swirls, twists and turns our minds makes us crazy and bitter and resentful...then, when time is frozen and realizing there is no going back, you seek the freedom to take on the world and find a better, stronger, more fulfilling and rewarding love. Well, that's how it struck me. To me, love is everything; it's what makes my heart beat, it's what makes me loose sleep...ah....the sweet pain of love:)Keep it up, oh magical poetress...your words give us an insight to our souls.

Posted: Jun 28, 2008

I dont normally leave comments, but I just had to say I love this poem!!

Posted: Jul 2, 2008

love it!!

Posted: Sep 3, 2008