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A poem that me & my best friend wrote want to get some opinions about it
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Submitted: Jun 12, 2008    Reads: 44    Comments: 6    Likes: 3   


So Alone

You wish away the darkness

You wish away the fear

Nothing happens to me and I want to disappear

From this world we live on

I only see the darkness through my eyes

I see you there and you shine like the light

I'm longing for your existence

As you long for mine's

Glancing outside into the dark rain

Feeling oh so lonely but yet

I know you're here

Somewhere outside searching for me

Never have I felt so alone

without you....

Can you see me running foward

right into you?

Like I see you walking toward me

Like the way it's meant to be

I'm feeling so alone

without you....

without you....


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Comments:

its actually kinda depressing lol but still good work =]

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

lol yea :P lol thanks :D

Your best poem other than Fairy tale life

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Author Comment:

:D lol read my "finally free" :) im trying to advertise it! :D
hehe thanks anyways :D

Awwww,sad poem.And great!You write it really excellent!I like your poems.And in this one I liked when you wrote in the end 2 times without you... without you...That gave the poem that something,lol. Really great poem! :)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

hehe it gave me chills :D

It is sad but written very well.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

yea it's about sad love lol :( thank you for all the opinions im taking on a challenge makes me have a metaphor and new vocab words :O guess i can survive it :D

so romantic, love it. :)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks ! :D

Muy bien. YOu did great.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Author Comment:

xDDDD thanks :)



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