good it was nice =]

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

hehe thanks im new :(

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

its ok but i like most of your other works better. :)

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

This was a great read. "Love" here does not represent the emotion here, but is rather understood to be the bond between the narrator and her love.

I also really enjoyed the rhyme since it does not sound like you were trying hard to rhyme at all (which is good cuz it sounds natural!) and that the rhythm flowed so well throughout the entire poem.

Again, I find the lack of punctuation a little confusing but you can probably tell I'm a stickler for that lol. The line "True love is SEALED" was very great because that line instantly conveyed the multitude of emotions the narrator experienced as well as the message that lovers should be joined together instead of apart.

The only suggestion I can make is that the lines

Love can be toyed with
Love can be hated with

started really abruptly in respects to its structure and content to the previous lines that it seemed to kind of come out of nowhere, a little. I can see the connection you made between those two lines and the next two but your meaning is a little ambiguous.
If your meant to say that love can be toyed with or hated but it's always sealed then you can add a "but" in the following line, but if you meant that love is not to be toyed with or hated, then you might have to move the "Don't you feel?" line ahead and reword some things.

That's all! It was a great read! :)

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

this was very good i liked it

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Oh I love the last line, 'True love is SEALED'. It gives you the sense that 'true love' is always there, never changes such as when you have 'SEALED' an envelope; you can no longer open it or change what's inside, whereas 'love' is usually 'toyed with', 'hated with' and 'a rollercoaster ride' and there'll be a time when you've had enough of this 'ride' and want to try another or you decide to stop going on rides all together, hence, having another relationship or forgetting about getting into another relationships all together.
Great poem.

Keep up the great work!

Olola.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Awww,this was really beautifull poem!Sweet,and a bit,only a bit sad...I like it. :)

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

Beautiful poem.

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

it is good keep up the good work

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

i have to give u an "i like"

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

That was awesome ^^ The last line was so true. I can relate to this one. You are very talented :D Great job!

Posted: Jun 20, 2008

beatiful!!!

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Posted: Jun 21, 2008

/Nice I really liked the connections to real life. WATEVR LIFE pukes up on that roller coaster is either nasty or leaves a minty smell from what it ate earlier. Lol. I suk. But it was very good.

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

I loved it very much.

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Are you sure that you are only 14, as it so uncanny, that after reading your poetry, I feel that you are part of my soul. I love your poems.

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Posted: Jun 25, 2008

True love is hard to get. Great poem:)

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

I wasn't questioning your age. Lol
It is if you have some knowledge of my past. Do you believe in reincarnation?

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Posted: Jun 28, 2008