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Those Girls

Poem By: MusikLover13
Poetry


This poem is Based on me.
I really did go through all this and 'Those Girls'
made my life Hell for 7th Grade. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 18, 2008    Reads: 50    Comments: 10    Likes: 5   


Those Girls

They laughed
They picked
I was their biggest target
Over looked, that’s what I was
Because I was different
I wear my hair in the same style
Dress in things that were out for a while
Say what I meant
Meant what I said
Day after day it was the same
At school
In my dreams
They taught my everywhere
That was last year
Year of 07 08.
This is this year and oh boy I can’t wait
For I didn’t care what they thought about me
If I had to be a bitch to get all the respect
Then I’d rather be alone
No I’m not a freak
I find my self quite unique
You just wait until I’m all grown up
I’ll show you all girls

Why I’d rather be a girl like me.


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Comments:

You go, girl!
Loved every word because it is full of meaning and emotion...probably because it was real to you :)
Write more real-life stuff, it suits your talent and your style

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

*Blushes* Thank you again for Reading and Thanks x100 for Reading liking it. (lol)

thats really good and it does show so much emotion. your a really good poet hope to read more of your writing.

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Danny for commenting. Don't worry more will be coming soon. =]

Rock On!!! Nice Job, that was a very cool poem! You go grl!

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Thanks Alice. =]

MusikLover13:

Good one! Gave it an I Like It" vote.

Yes! The teenage years can be rough. In school.

It would help if you were to skip a line between verses, if you intended there be more than one.

Some recommended changes:

Overlooked! That was me! Question: How can someone be overlooked and "picked-on"? At the same time?

They taunted me everywhere

Recommend reading and rating my posting of "Love Intended: #1, #2 & #3". The "comments" section explains my view of poetry and how it is best written.

Thank you!

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks so much for your help. (lol) I had no idea about the over looked & Picked on thing. Good point. Also I will read the poem and comment. =3 Thanks for commenting and liking. XD

I definitely can relate to this, Bethany, btw, I have always loved your name, in fact my little girl is named Tori Bethany...anyway your poem reminds me of my days in juniour high especially-high school is a little better, but it gets even better when your graduated-that's when your finally FREEEEE!!! from the idiotic judging and humiliation crap from the MEAN GIRLS,(one of my fave movies) BTW, I'm not that old(lol) :DDDDxXx

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Lol. Yeah Everyone has been telling me about High School being Better, I sure hope they are right. I also Love mean Girls so we have that in Common and my Best Friends name is Tori. =3

I like it because you just want to be yourself..I respect you for that.

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for commenting. =3 Yeah, no one really respects me for that so it's hard at my School. =/

hi! beth. three cheers to u. BE URSELF. BE BETH EVER! don't bother about them damn girls. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you for commenting on my writing. Don't worry I will be sure to always be me. Thanks for commenting on my writing. =3

Awesome poem.
LOVED IT
:]

Posted: Jul 20, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! =3

Hey Beth :) Now this is what poetry is supposed to be: an outlet. This is awesome and I am glad that you were so honest! Take care, Regan

Posted: Aug 5, 2008

awe, this is soo good, expressing this in this manner. it's so good! yeah, just be yourself, and don't let these girls bother you, there's lots of love out there, and so many other people, don't let a couple of bitches get you down, it's so not worth it Smile! :)

Posted: Aug 28, 2008



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