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Fade Away by Alex

Poem By: MyBrokenDarling
Poetry


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Submitted: Jul 19, 2008    Reads: 27    Comments: 4    Likes: 2   


Fade away

I wish you were here because I’m by myself in the dark

I’m sitting alone with a black rose in this empty park.

It bleeds my pain away, it stands by me because it’s dead

Its petals have fallen, they surround me sleeping in my empty bed.

This whole in me keeps getting bigger, it doesn’t have an end,

It’s carved by my heart as a result of the loss of the dearest friend.

This black rose has fallen only to rise again, I cannot pretend…

Because I’m really broken, I can only wait till all of this will end.

But time doesn’t have a meaning anymore, I live for the past day;

It won’t be the same nowadays I wish you would just fade away…

Everything changes more and more, I just can’t walk through the door.

The darkness is better: simple and cold; that’s why I lay on the floor.

Fade away is all I’m asking for, why can’t I be like I was before?

Fade away is all I wish, why don’t wishes come true anymore?

Fade away is a prize to be won, but why can’t it be gain?

Fade away I think I deserve, just fade away so I can let go of the pain.


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Comments:

Very good attempt. The black rose is a poignant portrayal of your poem's mood. I think we all know the feeling of wanting to dissapear. Your use of rhyme works quite well also.

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

wow.
This poem is really good :]
very well writen
I liked it

Posted: Jul 19, 2008

Great poem! So sad but beautiful. I like your rhyming; spiced it up a bit! Can't wait to read more of your writing! =)
~Maple

Posted: Jul 25, 2008

Hey :) I also liked what you did with the black rose; it fit very well. This is a very interesting poem and I really like the questions that you asked near the end of it. It really rounded out the narrator's uncertainty. I really liked this poem! Make sure and tell me when you post more. Take care, Regan

Posted: Aug 4, 2008



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