I like it. Very sad, and I have been through that feeling before. It sucks. I hope you haven't had too.:) I like it! See ya later

Posted: May 16, 2008

Beautiful. Very sad, and I hope you didn't have to go through something like this. =( It even rhymed! (which my don't do) Lol. Great job. =)

Posted: May 16, 2008

Such emotions... Be strong, Mystory. There are going to be a lot more betrayals after this. Stick with your true friends. Great poem.

Posted: May 16, 2008

hi, another very good poem full of so much emotion. u reall do put everything into your writing. its so sad that a friend betrayed you, there really is nothing worse, but remember what they say, "keep your friends close, but keep your enemy’s closer"

Posted: May 17, 2008

i don't get why people do things like that to each other. it's dumb. i know how you felt though. i've had an experience like this. great job :]

Posted: May 17, 2008

This is wonderful! i personally can relate to this! this spells it out perfectly!! loved it!

Posted: May 17, 2008

hi. nice poem,it's full of so much emotion. its so sad that a friend betrayed you . My best friend betrayed me too. I know how it is like to betrayed.

Posted: May 18, 2008

beautiful poem i like it great job.

Posted: May 19, 2008

Wow. That's so sad. Now I need a hug. Beautiful poem.

Posted: May 19, 2008

Fantastic poem Carly. I expect nothing less. Flowed nicely, and I could really feel the hurt and anger (just a little bit) put into this.
=D

Posted: May 19, 2008

i've been betrayed by my friends my whole life... but if you don't give people a chance, it just makes you hollow inside... it is better to have lived, than not lived at all... good job

Posted: May 20, 2008

It was great... I know how it feels to be backstabbed by your 'bestfriend' and it sucks! All you want is revenge but you fear that if you do anything it'll land you in jail. Then you're just stuck with the gash they left behind and you ignore them to make it heal.
Wonderful work!

Posted: May 23, 2008

AWW I know how you feel! IT's awful, you try to leave them alone and start all over, and they get mad at you because they are still "trying to forgive you and be friends" because they are under the impression that you were the one who betrayed the friendship.

Great emotion. Good job.

~kaori

Posted: May 29, 2008

great poem. i'm facing same the same problem recently.. just on the 8th May.. i found out that my best friend betrayed me. so sad.. cant take it...

Posted: May 30, 2008

Very nice poem. Nicely written, breaks the flow a few times, but still very effective. Just want to say that life is never completely "ruined". Just remember that through everything you go through. :) It's kept me going. Xxx

Posted: May 30, 2008

hi! ms. et tu brutus! ;-)

Posted: May 31, 2008

i have had that happen to me and it is very sad but you move on

Posted: May 31, 2008

its good!!

Posted: Jun 7, 2008

It was a wonderful poem. I have been through many friendships like that. I don't really trust anyone that much anymore. But you poem rocks! SO....ROCK ON, love! Rock on and be strong.

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

I liked this poem. ^__^ you write good poems. V___V I agree with AYAME... i cant trust many people these days... V___V good job, keep writing!!!!! ^__^

Posted: Jun 8, 2008

This poem was so sad.I know how is it feel.But really nice nice poem.:)

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Kind of sad, pretty angry too. And it comes across, which is a good sign in a poem and a poet.
good stuff!
matmoo :)

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Wow..your poem really moved me.
Just what i needed.
A Ex-best friend has done the unforgivable.
I also always say "Don't make someone a Priority when they only make you an option."
I heard that somewhere and It's always suck by me.

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

Wow this is so powerful and I love the way this is written..I can relate to this completely, and I bet (unfortunately) many others can too. Very good job. :)

Posted: Jun 14, 2008

I love this! When I read it, it felt like you were pulling the words right from my heart. Unfortunately, I just woke up today and realized my best friend has been lying to me and betraying me for quite some time. I invited her over for coffee this morning and she said some things to me this morning that really woke me up. I won't ever look at her the same way again, nor will I ever trust her again. A great work hun! Thank you for sharing it!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

I love it! That's what poetry is all about, expressing your emotions. Friends can hurt, and I've been there and felt that. Thanks for your inspiration!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

love it... becuz it is so true!

Posted: Jun 18, 2008

Wow..this was brilliant! I feel like saying bloody brilliant...so this was bloody brillinat too! :D
I have been meaning to read this for days, and I was def. not dissapointed. Please tell me when you have a new poem! (:

Posted: Jun 19, 2008

Enjoyed it. Makes me want to know what happened (pls don't spoil it by telling). In time you may actually look on it as a gift, as crazy as it sounds now.

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

this flowed heka well.and, like many others, i have recently gone through this with a friend. it sucks when it happens, but, then again, you cant change the past. and, just maybe, everything happens for a reason.great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =)
~Lemon

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

very very good.

captured the emotion well.

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

a great poem. i can relate to this as my best friend did the same thing to me. i have learned a painful lesson but i no longer see her and she has lost out. i now have a true best friend who treats me better than she ever did. have faith. snow

Posted: Jun 29, 2008

I LOVED IT. It was really well written, and It expressed a lot of emotion.

I sent the poem to my mom, because she just had a bad friendship problem.

And... GREAT JOB!

Posted: Jul 1, 2008

Amazing poem! Write more. And thanks for welcoming me in such a warm way. Meanwhile, please give feedback on my story.

Posted: Jul 11, 2008

wow that was an awsome peom. it made me sad. but it was awsome.

Posted: Jul 12, 2008

That was really powerful, it was really sad.
Im writing a poem at the moment like that but its about being too forgiving and every time the person gets hurt they forgive and the pain gets worse every time.

Posted: Jul 13, 2008

I'm so sorry. You seem to be in real pain. That happened with me too. But I forgot her.

Posted: Jul 14, 2008

i can relate to this, I like it.

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Brilliant! Simply brilliant. I loved it. Your poem really captured the sentiment of betrayal, something I would expect that everyone reading would have experienced at least one.

Posted: Jul 16, 2008

Hmm...very touching poen..written from the bottom of your heart.
Dont wurry you will overcome this grief, as time heals everything.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

I know how it feels to be betrayed by your best friend!

This was an incredibly beautiful poem! Very touching and you have put in a lot of very deep emotions!

Take care my friend!! ^_^

Posted: Jul 28, 2008

I understand what you're talking about, but I have trouble understanding the difference between when somebody breaks my heart and when my heart becomes broken by my own reactions to life.

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Great writing! I'd really appreciate your thoughts on my new poem: Last Flight! Please! Thanks!

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

I love this poem. It's so deep and honest. & i totally know what it's like to be betrayed, especially by your best friend. It stinks ): But, then again, you know you better off without them. Great job.

Posted: Sep 1, 2008

wow, that, i... can totally relate to. i had this best friend and i told her everything, wrote her so many poems, and then just one day... she told me she didn't wanna be my friend anymore. now she's a HUGE jerk to me... and i use to try to make her my friend again, but it's no use... she's mean to me. :( i love this poem.

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

yeah i lost a best friend...told her everything she helped me i helped her and then when something happened just one little decision and then 4 years of friendship gone in a instant... it crushed me and the wounds it left still haunt me....

your poem truly touched me : )

Posted: Sep 5, 2008

Yes , betrayal hurts .However, don't let it rule over your senses .

Posted: Sep 7, 2008

wwwooowww/thats really an amazing poem.and to tell you i know exactly how you feel been there before.and so is my poems. I wrote my poems basically on what happened to me and what i see around me.i'll be looking forward to see more of your poems.

Posted: Sep 10, 2008

I'm not a poet, but I've been wondering about the format of your poem. Usually short, cut lines are associated with short passages. Longer passages such as yours usually have intentions every few lines as a form of separation. I was just wondering if your format was intentional or just happened to be that way.

Posted: Sep 14, 2008

I went through that in middle school. I had two groups of friends, one that I've been with since elementary school, and the other one are full of backstabbers. Great poem, by the way. I might have the strength to find the backstabbers and give them their own medicine.

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

its a breaking fact that it did happen to me too.. =[ it does hurt. But just know, a friend who turns into an enemy has never been a friend. =]

The most important thing is, you dont close yourself into you, and you dont hold back when it comes to trusting anyone new.

Besides all that, i loved your rhymes.

take care, and remember, time heals wounds. =]
it did heal mine.

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Very good conveyance of betrayance !

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

My first read here on booksie. I'll be back. Good job.
David

Posted: Sep 15, 2008

Yee really great poem. I wrote one like it once and friendship is hard! Trust me, I know. I also had an experience like this. And she still tries to hurt me and even though I don't show it, it hurts.

Posted: Sep 23, 2008

I've felt EXACTLY like you. It didn't happen that back. You know even though this hatred causes us to say bad things but deep inside it still hurts a lot doesn't it? Very good poem, specially because I am sure many people can relate to it.

Posted: Sep 30, 2008

Wow. Just Wow! I read this like 10 times and then I just cried. I just experience something EXACTLY like this. It really hurts me. And you know, the best thing to do is try to be friends again, and if that doesnt work, just move on. Don't let it hurt you too much. It's Ok to be sad but its not ok when it starts affecting the rest of your daily life. With me it was more of a popularity problem. Well i was best friends since KINDERGARTEN with this girl... and well suddenly from being least popular person, BAM! everyone started following her arround for no exact reason, and i tell her that i feel left out, and alone. Like shes leaving me and going off with her "possy". and then i tell her, "I havent got a chanch to spend much time with you, and i feel like the people that you hang out with are not your real friends, they are just people that follow you arround and call you pretty." and then shes all, "Well, I have other friends and i can hang out with them if I want to." Then a fight started, My friends possy V.S. Me, and Jacqueline. BY the way her "possy" had about 40 people in it. and we were enemies for a long time, until i decided to write her a letter when i was at camp, and she forgave me, and i forgave her, and now were better friends than before. I hope this didnt hurt you way too bad. I know what its like and wish there was no such thing as evil.

Very good poem! Good Job! really emotional and sad.:D

Posted: Oct 3, 2008

i agree with that poem well thats cause i was in it and thats poem is very good and its really emotional

and your welcome for reading if you were going to type thank you for reading on your comment

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

i ment comment sorry not poem i wrote i agree with that poem but i ment comment
ya good job on the poem

Posted: Oct 5, 2008

Oh Hey thats the same Jaqueline i know! Sup JR?

p.s. this is the same guy is cheese, great poem

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

thats really good; I've been through that a time or two, and it feels horrible. But i think it's a good thing that it happens because then we become stronger.

Posted: Oct 11, 2008

This is a human emotion that everyone goes through. Betrayal is painful, sometimes even more so than loss. A fantastic poem. Do you mind commenting on some of my work? I'm here to learn!

Posted: Oct 14, 2008

thank youu tje poem helped me to make somepeople understand what they done... :)

Posted: Oct 14, 2008

just read this poem I am feeling the exact way .A pain that its hard to discribed ,I Keep asking myself how can my bestfriend just ventured into my life and tear my relationship apart ,how can she lived with herself but I guess that how cold she his.

Posted: Oct 17, 2008

wow,that hit me.It is really good.I like it!Good job!It let me think what my friend did to me...she dissapointed me...now I just leave her alone!:)

Posted: Oct 18, 2008

You have great words,im writing poems but am tooo afraid to show poeple the real me in the inside...you should tell me when you writing a new poem....i love poems it makes me happy!!!!

Posted: Oct 18, 2008

I like your poem, its sad, but good poem.

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

I like your poem, its sad, but good poem.

Posted: Oct 21, 2008

I really like it. I've had this happen once before, but we eventually made up and we're friends again. I really don't think that we can NOT be friends; we just work together.

It's great, and really hard to find friends like that. Anyway, this is a really good poem, and I'm sorry you had to have something like this happen to you.

Posted: Oct 24, 2008

Ok I know you might hate me for saying this, but I've been betrayed by a friend too. If they realize what they did and try to say that they are sorry, and you turn your back, that would be understandable, but it just means your as heartless as they were. I'm not going to make you do anything about it (I can't even if I tried) but think about it.
XxTigerxX

Posted: Oct 28, 2008

Well, its really heart-toching poem...gotta know a lot bout u and d way u wer treated by your so called bst frnd...If I had been in your place, I wud have been totally broken; but u did all right...Ur poem indeed helped me in some of ma problems wich none cud ever understand...Keep writing such Stuffs..Keep it up...

Posted: Oct 29, 2008

V nice v nice i totally relate to it after having been betrayed by an asshole I cared for so much

Posted: Nov 1, 2008

I know how just how you feel a good friend of mine did me the same way, always thinking everything was my fault because our friendship was on rocky ground.

When it was her to blame.

Posted: Nov 1, 2008

You know, I think that pain is always so much more difficult to deal with if it has been caused by someone that you entrusted to your friendship and friendship should mean that you will be true to that person. I feel sorry for her cause at the end of the day she is going to grow to be a very lonely person, for sooner or later word will spread that she is not true. Well done on the poem!

Posted: Nov 2, 2008

this poem is so sad.... but i know how that is!!!

my "best friend" went nuts and cut, burned, and tortured herself and me.

So i can connect very well with this poem--i find it hard to trust anyone anymore. :(

Posted: Nov 4, 2008

wow! amazing. you can still trust other people tho, this betrayal will just make it easier for you to decode people's real ways in the future.

Posted: Nov 5, 2008

Oh god i know how you feel! But my situation isn't as bad. The person who used to be my best mate hardly talks to me because she says i hurt her. But when i ask her how she says nothing. Now she's mean to me! I don't get it but i hope your situation wasn't as bad if this is true. It's a very powerful poem, brill. :)

Posted: Nov 7, 2008

ok listen to me now, this is important. A wise person once said, "keep your friends close, but keep your enemies closer." Try and figure out the message in that. Also, dont let one person who betrayed you, make you mistrust the world. Its unfortunate that there are people in the world who will do that to you, but sadly, there are. But its important to know, that by not trusting the world, you are only denying yourself, and the rest of the world of getting to know you. You must find the strength to pick yourself up, brush yourself off, and tell yourself, "ok this hurt, but you know what? Im going to show this person im strong enough to survive without them." Let me tell you from experience, that if you let it get you down, and you stay down, depressed, and never trust anyone again, then they have won, and thats probably what they want and expect you to do. If you do that, then youll probably see that that is the reaction they want, because it gives them a sense of victory over you. They totally get off (no pun intended, sorry) on seeing your misery. Show them no misery, or dont be depressed forever, pick yourself up and show them wrong. Let them know that their evil rude ways are not enough to keep you down. Your stronger than they are,
show them that, and you have won.

Posted: Nov 9, 2008

A moving poem, all too true in this day and age.

This happened to me about a year ago, a mutual friend insulted the other friend to make her look good. Then laughed it off like it was funny.

Also she did some other nasty things to personal to relate. Suffice to say she lost 2 good friends that day. But I found my best and forever friend. She will never insult me to make herself look better and she is always supportive and my friend whatever happens.

My ex friend lost big time and we won.

Peace

Boneman

Posted: Nov 10, 2008

It was moving and showed depth and emotion. Well done

Posted: Nov 12, 2008

I really enjoyed reading this poem your a very good writer.Amie

Posted: Nov 13, 2008

Beautiful Poem. I loved it. Sorry about your friend.

Posted: Nov 13, 2008

HEY THAT HAPPENED TO ME MY OLD BFF AND I HOPE U R ALRIGHT BECAUSE I HATE MY LIFE BECAUSE OF IT
AND I LOVE THE POEM IT EXPRESSED MY FEELINGS EXACTLY

Posted: Nov 16, 2008

really good. i think it might be even more strong if you get rid of the last line and just end it w/ "you or anyone". gives much more of a punch! screw lame friends. the good ones will always stick by you, no matter what. write on!

Posted: Nov 17, 2008

Wow. That was great.
I loved it. It was so sad, but so powerful.
Great poem!

Posted: Nov 17, 2008

i really liked it and i have gone threw the same thing and it sucks the only person you can count on betrays you it not a pleasant thing to have someone do

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Beautiful. But Sad. Very Sad.
Esp. because I can relate to it like completely
and I think it gave me courage to look this person in
the eye and tell them I'm done with your foolish games.
Because that's how I feel.

well thanks and love your poem
xoxo
DOM

Posted: Nov 18, 2008

Wow, that was great. And I know the feeling >.> bleeh. Comment and read mine sometime! Thanks.

Posted: Nov 19, 2008

Your poem really was amazing! If it is true then that'd be horrible since I know what it's like a best friend being good then ruining a part of your life. Very good =]

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Hey It's the person with the longest comment, CHEESE!

YEa again great job on this this is awesome


THats good that you got over it! Congrats!

Posted: Nov 24, 2008

Omg i love it!! soooooooo cute well ya... very beautiful and sad. really knowing friends betray u. thats sad. i just lost my best friend iveknown her forever! and shes gone.. well it sucks but gotta happen. thanks for inspiration with poem.

Posted: Nov 26, 2008

me again... well ya thats exactually how my life is lol.

Posted: Nov 26, 2008