Sometimes the people you thought were closest to you turn out to be your worst enemies.
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Submitted: May 16, 2008
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There we were, both so young,
Just standing with the crowd.
We were the closest of friends,
Laughing so loud.
As time went on,
I started trusting you more and more.
I told you things that I,
Hadn't told anyone before.
I opened up to you,
I gave you my heart,
Then you turn right around,
And tear it apart.
You think that I don't know,
What you're saying behind my back.
You think you're so perfect,
But there's still so much that you lack.
You predend that you don't know,
Why I'm in so much pain.
Secretly hating you,
Betrayed by you yet again.
You think that you can just,
Butt into my life.
But if you really want to make me happy,
You must pay the price.
And now that I've broken free,
From your deadly curse,
I realize your the one who ruined my life,
And continued to make it worse.
Now you're angry with me,
Because I refuse to answer your call.
Because I'm trying to forget you,
So I won't have to fall.
So now, just remember,
When I turn my back on you,
It's because you did the same to me,
Something horible to live through.
Never again will I trust you.
Never again will I call you a friend.
Never again will you ruin my life,
Our friendship has come to an end.
How dare you say that you care,
How dare you even try.
How can you be so heartless,
And try to make me believe your lies.
I've learned form my mistakes.
I've learned from what I've done.
I've learned not to trust you.
You, or anyone.
I've been betrayed by a friend.
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Comments:
I like it. Very sad, and I have been through that feeling before. It sucks. I hope you haven't had too.:) I like it! See ya later
Posted: May 16, 2008
Beautiful. Very sad, and I hope you didn't have to go through something like this. =( It even rhymed! (which my don't do) Lol. Great job. =)
Posted: May 16, 2008
Such emotions... Be strong, Mystory. There are going to be a lot more betrayals after this. Stick with your true friends. Great poem.
Posted: May 16, 2008
hi, another very good poem full of so much emotion. u reall do put everything into your writing. its so sad that a friend betrayed you, there really is nothing worse, but remember what they say, "keep your friends close, but keep your enemy’s closer"
Posted: May 17, 2008
i don't get why people do things like that to each other. it's dumb. i know how you felt though. i've had an experience like this. great job :]
Posted: May 17, 2008
This is wonderful! i personally can relate to this! this spells it out perfectly!! loved it!
Posted: May 17, 2008
hi. nice poem,it's full of so much emotion. its so sad that a friend betrayed you . My best friend betrayed me too. I know how it is like to betrayed.
Posted: May 18, 2008
beautiful poem i like it great job.
Posted: May 19, 2008
Gemaster
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Wow. That's so sad. Now I need a hug. Beautiful poem.
Posted: May 19, 2008
Fantastic poem Carly. I expect nothing less. Flowed nicely, and I could really feel the hurt and anger (just a little bit) put into this.
=D
Posted: May 19, 2008
i've been betrayed by my friends my whole life... but if you don't give people a chance, it just makes you hollow inside... it is better to have lived, than not lived at all... good job
Posted: May 20, 2008
kitty08
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It was great... I know how it feels to be backstabbed by your 'bestfriend' and it sucks! All you want is revenge but you fear that if you do anything it'll land you in jail. Then you're just stuck with the gash they left behind and you ignore them to make it heal.
Wonderful work!
Posted: May 23, 2008
AWW I know how you feel! IT's awful, you try to leave them alone and start all over, and they get mad at you because they are still "trying to forgive you and be friends" because they are under the impression that you were the one who betrayed the friendship.
Great emotion. Good job.
~kaori
Posted: May 29, 2008
xy
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great poem. i'm facing same the same problem recently.. just on the 8th May.. i found out that my best friend betrayed me. so sad.. cant take it...
Posted: May 30, 2008
Very nice poem. Nicely written, breaks the flow a few times, but still very effective. Just want to say that life is never completely "ruined". Just remember that through everything you go through. :) It's kept me going. Xxx
Posted: May 30, 2008
hi! ms. et tu brutus! ;-)
Posted: May 31, 2008
chie pet
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i have had that happen to me and it is very sad but you move on
Posted: May 31, 2008
its good!!
Posted: Jun 7, 2008
It was a wonderful poem. I have been through many friendships like that. I don't really trust anyone that much anymore. But you poem rocks! SO....ROCK ON, love! Rock on and be strong.
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
I liked this poem. ^__^ you write good poems. V___V I agree with AYAME... i cant trust many people these days... V___V good job, keep writing!!!!! ^__^
Posted: Jun 8, 2008
This poem was so sad.I know how is it feel.But really nice nice poem.:)
Posted: Jun 11, 2008
Kind of sad, pretty angry too. And it comes across, which is a good sign in a poem and a poet.
good stuff!
matmoo :)
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Cali
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Wow..your poem really moved me.
Just what i needed.
A Ex-best friend has done the unforgivable.
I also always say "Don't make someone a Priority when they only make you an option."
I heard that somewhere and It's always suck by me.
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Wow this is so powerful and I love the way this is written..I can relate to this completely, and I bet (unfortunately) many others can too. Very good job. :)
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Been There, Felt That
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I love this! When I read it, it felt like you were pulling the words right from my heart. Unfortunately, I just woke up today and realized my best friend has been lying to me and betraying me for quite some time. I invited her over for coffee this morning and she said some things to me this morning that really woke me up. I won't ever look at her the same way again, nor will I ever trust her again. A great work hun! Thank you for sharing it!
Posted: Jun 18, 2008
I love it! That's what poetry is all about, expressing your emotions. Friends can hurt, and I've been there and felt that. Thanks for your inspiration!
Posted: Jun 18, 2008
love it... becuz it is so true!
Posted: Jun 18, 2008
Wow..this was brilliant! I feel like saying bloody brilliant...so this was bloody brillinat too! :D
I have been meaning to read this for days, and I was def. not dissapointed. Please tell me when you have a new poem! (:
Posted: Jun 19, 2008
Enjoyed it. Makes me want to know what happened (pls don't spoil it by telling). In time you may actually look on it as a gift, as crazy as it sounds now.
Posted: Jun 23, 2008
this flowed heka well.and, like many others, i have recently gone through this with a friend. it sucks when it happens, but, then again, you cant change the past. and, just maybe, everything happens for a reason.great job!!!!!!!!!!!!!! =)
~Lemon
Posted: Jun 24, 2008
very very good.
captured the emotion well.
Posted: Jun 27, 2008
a great poem. i can relate to this as my best friend did the same thing to me. i have learned a painful lesson but i no longer see her and she has lost out. i now have a true best friend who treats me better than she ever did. have faith. snow
Posted: Jun 29, 2008
I LOVED IT. It was really well written, and It expressed a lot of emotion.
I sent the poem to my mom, because she just had a bad friendship problem.
And... GREAT JOB!
Posted: Jul 1, 2008
Amazing poem! Write more. And thanks for welcoming me in such a warm way. Meanwhile, please give feedback on my story.
Posted: Jul 11, 2008
wow that was an awsome peom. it made me sad. but it was awsome.
Posted: Jul 12, 2008
That was really powerful, it was really sad.
Im writing a poem at the moment like that but its about being too forgiving and every time the person gets hurt they forgive and the pain gets worse every time.
Posted: Jul 13, 2008
I'm so sorry. You seem to be in real pain. That happened with me too. But I forgot her.
Posted: Jul 14, 2008
i can relate to this, I like it.
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
Brilliant! Simply brilliant. I loved it. Your poem really captured the sentiment of betrayal, something I would expect that everyone reading would have experienced at least one.
Posted: Jul 16, 2008
Swasti Manasvi
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Hmm...very touching poen..written from the bottom of your heart.
Dont wurry you will overcome this grief, as time heals everything.
Posted: Jul 27, 2008
I know how it feels to be betrayed by your best friend!
This was an incredibly beautiful poem! Very touching and you have put in a lot of very deep emotions!
Take care my friend!! ^_^
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
I understand what you're talking about, but I have trouble understanding the difference between when somebody breaks my heart and when my heart becomes broken by my own reactions to life.
Posted: Jul 29, 2008
Great writing! I'd really appreciate your thoughts on my new poem: Last Flight! Please! Thanks!
Posted: Aug 8, 2008
Liz :]
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I love this poem. It's so deep and honest. & i totally know what it's like to be betrayed, especially by your best friend. It stinks ): But, then again, you know you better off without them. Great job.
Posted: Sep 1, 2008
wow, that, i... can totally relate to. i had this best friend and i told her everything, wrote her so many poems, and then just one day... she told me she didn't wanna be my friend anymore. now she's a HUGE jerk to me... and i use to try to make her my friend again, but it's no use... she's mean to me. :( i love this poem.
Posted: Sep 5, 2008
yeah i lost a best friend...told her everything she helped me i helped her and then when something happened just one little decision and then 4 years of friendship gone in a instant... it crushed me and the wounds it left still haunt me....
your poem truly touched me : )
Posted: Sep 5, 2008
Yes , betrayal hurts .However, don't let it rule over your senses .
Posted: Sep 7, 2008
wwwooowww/thats really an amazing poem.and to tell you i know exactly how you feel been there before.and so is my poems. I wrote my poems basically on what happened to me and what i see around me.i'll be looking forward to see more of your poems.
Posted: Sep 10, 2008
I'm not a poet, but I've been wondering about the format of your poem. Usually short, cut lines are associated with short passages. Longer passages such as yours usually have intentions every few lines as a form of separation. I was just wondering if your format was intentional or just happened to be that way.
Posted: Sep 14, 2008
I went through that in middle school. I had two groups of friends, one that I've been with since elementary school, and the other one are full of backstabbers. Great poem, by the way. I might have the strength to find the backstabbers and give them their own medicine.
Posted: Sep 15, 2008
its a breaking fact that it did happen to me too.. =[ it does hurt. But just know, a friend who turns into an enemy has never been a friend. =]
The most important thing is, you dont close yourself into you, and you dont hold back when it comes to trusting anyone new.
Besides all that, i loved your rhymes.
take care, and remember, time heals wounds. =]
it did heal mine.
Posted: Sep 15, 2008
J Paul
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Very good conveyance of betrayance !
Posted: Sep 15, 2008
David
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My first read here on booksie. I'll be back. Good job.
David
Posted: Sep 15, 2008
Yee really great poem. I wrote one like it once and friendship is hard! Trust me, I know. I also had an experience like this. And she still tries to hurt me and even though I don't show it, it hurts.
Posted: Sep 23, 2008
I've felt EXACTLY like you. It didn't happen that back. You know even though this hatred causes us to say bad things but deep inside it still hurts a lot doesn't it? Very good poem, specially because I am sure many people can relate to it.
Posted: Sep 30, 2008
Cheese
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Wow. Just Wow! I read this like 10 times and then I just cried. I just experience something EXACTLY like this. It really hurts me. And you know, the best thing to do is try to be friends again, and if that doesnt work, just move on. Don't let it hurt you too much. It's Ok to be sad but its not ok when it starts affecting the rest of your daily life. With me it was more of a popularity problem. Well i was best friends since KINDERGARTEN with this girl... and well suddenly from being least popular person, BAM! everyone started following her arround for no exact reason, and i tell her that i feel left out, and alone. Like shes leaving me and going off with her "possy". and then i tell her, "I havent got a chanch to spend much time with you, and i feel like the people that you hang out with are not your real friends, they are just people that follow you arround and call you pretty." and then shes all, "Well, I have other friends and i can hang out with them if I want to." Then a fight started, My friends possy V.S. Me, and Jacqueline. BY the way her "possy" had about 40 people in it. and we were enemies for a long time, until i decided to write her a letter when i was at camp, and she forgave me, and i forgave her, and now were better friends than before. I hope this didnt hurt you way too bad. I know what its like and wish there was no such thing as evil.
Very good poem! Good Job! really emotional and sad.:D
Posted: Oct 3, 2008
jacqueline
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i agree with that poem well thats cause i was in it and thats poem is very good and its really emotional
and your welcome for reading if you were going to type thank you for reading on your comment
Posted: Oct 5, 2008
jacqueline
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i ment comment sorry not poem i wrote i agree with that poem but i ment comment
ya good job on the poem
Posted: Oct 5, 2008
Nick
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Oh Hey thats the same Jaqueline i know! Sup JR?
p.s. this is the same guy is cheese, great poem
Posted: Oct 11, 2008
thats really good; I've been through that a time or two, and it feels horrible. But i think it's a good thing that it happens because then we become stronger.
Posted: Oct 11, 2008
This is a human emotion that everyone goes through. Betrayal is painful, sometimes even more so than loss. A fantastic poem. Do you mind commenting on some of my work? I'm here to learn!
Posted: Oct 14, 2008
EeEeEe
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thank youu tje poem helped me to make somepeople understand what they done... :)
Posted: Oct 14, 2008
Betrayed my a bestfriend
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just read this poem I am feeling the exact way .A pain that its hard to discribed ,I Keep asking myself how can my bestfriend just ventured into my life and tear my relationship apart ,how can she lived with herself but I guess that how cold she his.
Posted: Oct 17, 2008
dark angel
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wow,that hit me.It is really good.I like it!Good job!It let me think what my friend did to me...she dissapointed me...now I just leave her alone!:)
Posted: Oct 18, 2008
dark angel
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You have great words,im writing poems but am tooo afraid to show poeple the real me in the inside...you should tell me when you writing a new poem....i love poems it makes me happy!!!!
Posted: Oct 18, 2008
I like your poem, its sad, but good poem.
Posted: Oct 21, 2008
I like your poem, its sad, but good poem.
Posted: Oct 21, 2008
I really like it. I've had this happen once before, but we eventually made up and we're friends again. I really don't think that we can NOT be friends; we just work together.
It's great, and really hard to find friends like that. Anyway, this is a really good poem, and I'm sorry you had to have something like this happen to you.
Posted: Oct 24, 2008
Ok I know you might hate me for saying this, but I've been betrayed by a friend too. If they realize what they did and try to say that they are sorry, and you turn your back, that would be understandable, but it just means your as heartless as they were. I'm not going to make you do anything about it (I can't even if I tried) but think about it.
XxTigerxX
Posted: Oct 28, 2008
S-K
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Well, its really heart-toching poem...gotta know a lot bout u and d way u wer treated by your so called bst frnd...If I had been in your place, I wud have been totally broken; but u did all right...Ur poem indeed helped me in some of ma problems wich none cud ever understand...Keep writing such Stuffs..Keep it up...
Posted: Oct 29, 2008
Shreya
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V nice v nice i totally relate to it after having been betrayed by an asshole I cared for so much
Posted: Nov 1, 2008
I know how just how you feel a good friend of mine did me the same way, always thinking everything was my fault because our friendship was on rocky ground.
When it was her to blame.
Posted: Nov 1, 2008
You know, I think that pain is always so much more difficult to deal with if it has been caused by someone that you entrusted to your friendship and friendship should mean that you will be true to that person. I feel sorry for her cause at the end of the day she is going to grow to be a very lonely person, for sooner or later word will spread that she is not true. Well done on the poem!
Posted: Nov 2, 2008
this poem is so sad.... but i know how that is!!!
my "best friend" went nuts and cut, burned, and tortured herself and me.
So i can connect very well with this poem--i find it hard to trust anyone anymore. :(
Posted: Nov 4, 2008
sarah
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wow! amazing. you can still trust other people tho, this betrayal will just make it easier for you to decode people's real ways in the future.
Posted: Nov 5, 2008
Oh god i know how you feel! But my situation isn't as bad. The person who used to be my best mate hardly talks to me because she says i hurt her. But when i ask her how she says nothing. Now she's mean to me! I don't get it but i hope your situation wasn't as bad if this is true. It's a very powerful poem, brill. :)
Posted: Nov 7, 2008
ok listen to me now, this is important. A wise person once said, "keep your friends close, but keep your enemies closer." Try and figure out the message in that. Also, dont let one person who betrayed you, make you mistrust the world. Its unfortunate that there are people in the world who will do that to you, but sadly, there are. But its important to know, that by not trusting the world, you are only denying yourself, and the rest of the world of getting to know you. You must find the strength to pick yourself up, brush yourself off, and tell yourself, "ok this hurt, but you know what? Im going to show this person im strong enough to survive without them." Let me tell you from experience, that if you let it get you down, and you stay down, depressed, and never trust anyone again, then they have won, and thats probably what they want and expect you to do. If you do that, then youll probably see that that is the reaction they want, because it gives them a sense of victory over you. They totally get off (no pun intended, sorry) on seeing your misery. Show them no misery, or dont be depressed forever, pick yourself up and show them wrong. Let them know that their evil rude ways are not enough to keep you down. Your stronger than they are,
show them that, and you have won.
Posted: Nov 9, 2008
A moving poem, all too true in this day and age.
This happened to me about a year ago, a mutual friend insulted the other friend to make her look good. Then laughed it off like it was funny.
Also she did some other nasty things to personal to relate. Suffice to say she lost 2 good friends that day. But I found my best and forever friend. She will never insult me to make herself look better and she is always supportive and my friend whatever happens.
My ex friend lost big time and we won.
Peace
Boneman
Posted: Nov 10, 2008
Just reading
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It was moving and showed depth and emotion. Well done
Posted: Nov 12, 2008
I really enjoyed reading this poem your a very good writer.Amie
Posted: Nov 13, 2008
Beautiful Poem. I loved it. Sorry about your friend.
Posted: Nov 13, 2008
FEEL LIKE A BUTT
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HEY THAT HAPPENED TO ME MY OLD BFF AND I HOPE U R ALRIGHT BECAUSE I HATE MY LIFE BECAUSE OF IT
AND I LOVE THE POEM IT EXPRESSED MY FEELINGS EXACTLY
Posted: Nov 16, 2008
really good. i think it might be even more strong if you get rid of the last line and just end it w/ "you or anyone". gives much more of a punch! screw lame friends. the good ones will always stick by you, no matter what. write on!
Posted: Nov 17, 2008
Wow. That was great.
I loved it. It was so sad, but so powerful.
Great poem!
Posted: Nov 17, 2008
anonymus
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i really liked it and i have gone threw the same thing and it sucks the only person you can count on betrays you it not a pleasant thing to have someone do
Posted: Nov 18, 2008
Beautiful. But Sad. Very Sad.
Esp. because I can relate to it like completely
and I think it gave me courage to look this person in
the eye and tell them I'm done with your foolish games.
Because that's how I feel.
well thanks and love your poem
xoxo
DOM
Posted: Nov 18, 2008
Wow, that was great. And I know the feeling >.> bleeh. Comment and read mine sometime! Thanks.
Posted: Nov 19, 2008
Your poem really was amazing! If it is true then that'd be horrible since I know what it's like a best friend being good then ruining a part of your life. Very good =]
Posted: Nov 24, 2008
Cheese
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Hey It's the person with the longest comment, CHEESE!
YEa again great job on this this is awesome
THats good that you got over it! Congrats!
Posted: Nov 24, 2008
Katiebug
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Omg i love it!! soooooooo cute well ya... very beautiful and sad. really knowing friends betray u. thats sad. i just lost my best friend iveknown her forever! and shes gone.. well it sucks but gotta happen. thanks for inspiration with poem.
Posted: Nov 26, 2008
Katiebug
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me again... well ya thats exactually how my life is lol.
Posted: Nov 26, 2008
G- unit
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I know exactly how you feel. I too have been betrayed by my so called best friend. They don't even know how much they have hurt you but then again, they don't care. I really like the poem =)
Posted: Dec 9, 2008
G-unit
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I don't know why but for some reason I just can't rid of her in my mind. For some reason there is a part of me that still wants to be her friend but I just don't know what to do. It hurts.
Posted: Dec 11, 2008
You know some thing....You are blessed to be able to express your feelings and putting it out there so creatively.
There is a famous saying from back home where I come from(India) "Pain is the father of a Poet" ;-)
Last week I found out that my one and ONLY best friend of 4 years cheated on me with my new and recent girlfriend and this had being going on for almost a year. Like G Unit said, They probably don't even know how much they have hurt me and what they have taken away from me....(...I doubt they realize that Betrayal is a SIN not just a Fallacy :-(....They have scarred me for life and I will have to pick myself from ground up all by myself....
Anyway, I have been reading self help books on all of the topics and was amazed to find amazing stuff on Google books and I must say that reading is helping me channelize my thoughts a lot better than endlessly doscussing with fr4iends as to who did what and why ?
Bottom line is that we need to face it and FACE IT WELL with our head high.....
Trust me, I can feel my heart ache for real (I thought I was getting a stroke but wasn't) so you can imagine what he must have meant to me....BUT I know now that no matter if we even reconcile it will NEVER be the same as before.....So like they why tread on path that doesnt lead to your destination ?
I will continue my search to find some more courage and DO THE RIGHT THING....which is .....MOVING ON.....I am positive that I will find genuine, loving, honest, caring people if I am wise enough to not dwell in misery and instead work on being at the right place at the right time with the right attitude.
@ G-UNIT....Your mind is playing games and creating a mirage of an oasis that doesn't exist. It is telling you that you will feel secure and better if you somehow are able to bring her back .....Your mind is insecure and creating a fear in you that you may be left all alone if you do not reconcile with this person .....Your mind/heart is most likely not MISSING HER....Instead it is missing the activities that you did with her......Remember your Mind is just a part of you ...IT IS NOT YOU !!! so BEFRIEND your mind first and nurture and love it with compassion and tell your mind that it will be OKAY and that YOU DO NOT NEED a Dishonest, Cheating, disgraceful, disrespectful person in your life.....So Let us all pause for few minutes and take a seat back and REALLY THINK THROUGH as to who and what kind of a person will we allow next to enter in our lives....some one who will enrich us or some one who is a disrespectful/immoral/unethical creature who absolutely has no respect for LOVE/FRIENDSHIP....
To every one who has posted here.....My heart felt wishes to you ...May we all heal....!
Wish me luck for my new book and a blog that I have decided to write more on...:-)
and TONS OF LUCK TO YOU TOO
Cheers and GOD BLESS
Soulfreetorhyme@gmail.com
P.S. Simple and Best and FIRST STEP/Technique to Befriend your mind is practice a YOGA exercise called "PRANAYAM".....Read it up on google....Trust me You will remember me for this million buck advise.
Posted: Dec 11, 2008
G-unit
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Hey Thanks for your advice; you are right, I may be missing the activities i did with her instead of HER!
You are from India? I am from India as well =)
Good luck on your book and blog!
Posted: Dec 12, 2008
emma
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I really understand what your goin through im still going through it I try to change but nothing workd my best friend went off with my other friends they leave me behind when they walk together that poem really reminds me what i am going through and what I should do about it but its to hard to let go because i havent got anything els and im scared if i lose what i already have then i wont have anyone els left anyway the poem made me feel gud and i hope u didnt go through anything what im going through
Posted: Dec 13, 2008
Mystory,
Deception and Betrayal, shatters our trusting feelings. Who can we trust ? An interesting poem, I love the imagery in your piece. Well written. I am inviting you to read my Poem entitled "Crown of Thorns".
Sabbay :)
Happy New Year !
Posted: Jan 3, 2009
That's so good very deep it makes you want to cry but i see why you were angry becasue i would be angry in your place to.
Posted: Jan 12, 2009
Oh WOW! That hit so close to home that it's not even funny. You did a great job on this piece, I really enjoyed reading it. :)
Posted: Jan 20, 2009
I like your poem.
You will find even when there are clouds in the sky
the sun will still be shinning
Posted: Jan 26, 2009
I like your poem.
You will find even when there are clouds in the sky
the sun will still be shinning
Posted: Jan 26, 2009
Oh gosh, this brings back many memories of youth. One particular 'best' friend that turned out to not be. I put it in italics because a true friend would never do that. Gaw, I will never understand what motivates some people! It's good that you could separate yourself and move on to find a real best friend. ~Em
Posted: Jan 26, 2009
I like it! it reminds me of what my ex-Best friend did to me.Like she knew i liked this guy and she told me he hated me so i started to hate him.But it ended up he never hated me.But now he does.And the only reason why she did that was because she liked him alot.
Posted: Jan 27, 2009
I have had a similar thing happen to me. My best friend of fifteen years did something that I could not forgive. He threw our friendship away. It sucks, I know. Very good write
Posted: Jan 27, 2009
Cheese
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Hey, it's me cheese... agaian! i left a long comment a few months back. Jaqueline did too. We are getting over our little problem now, that girl has gotten nicer, but since im at a new school, well umm... i really dont know. It doesnt seem like she's been answering the phone when i call... shes still the popular girl i guess... i dont like that. Well i visit once and a while, and it just doesnt seem like a major friendship anymore. (blame my old princable, if it wasnt for her I would still be at that school!) I still love ur poem!
ur fan, cheese
Posted: Jan 31, 2009
i have been betrayed by a friend and its kind of exactly the way you wrote it... she accused me of bringing booze to skwl in front of the teachers.... i forgave her, but she has done it time and time again. and enough is enough. i love wat u have written its really good...
Posted: Feb 1, 2009
I LOVE THIS POEM. EVERYTHING HERE IS SOO TRUE
Posted: Feb 5, 2009
this poem really touched me in a mysterious way. i actually used to have a very nest friend. Ever since i was two we were insperable! But she started drifting away and backstabbing me and just never hanging out with me. so, yeah. this poem is very touching and i really connected to it. thank-you so much! Keep Writing!
Posted: Feb 6, 2009
this poem really touched me in a mysterious way. i actually used to have a very nest friend. Ever since i was two we were insperable! But she started drifting away and backstabbing me and just never hanging out with me. so, yeah. this poem is very touching and i really connected to it. thank-you so much! Keep Writing!
Posted: Feb 6, 2009
wow. i loved this poem. usually, i find rhyming poems to be kinda corny, etc........but yours was so ....awesome!!
wow, keep it up.
:P
Posted: Feb 7, 2009
morgan
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MY "best friend" started talking to this guy way out of her league, she's the kind of girl that's quiet, layed back, sweet, and she could have any guy she wants and she chose Dylan the kind of guy that smokes anything he get his hands on. Well, Chloe, My best friend, started TALKING to him and I thought it was really strange and I along with a lot of others kept telling her that all he wanted to do was screw her but she refused to believe me. (dylan has red hair really chubby and a trouble maker) chloe's parents did not like him at all.So she got her phone takin away then she thought she might lose him and so they became boyfriend and gilfriend. Well I finally accepted them being together even though I knew it wouldn't work. her parents found out and forced them to break up. So Chloe told Dylan she would wait for him until she could make her own decisions. He said he would do the same. Well while he was waiting he decided to screw a girl in our class, Shanea. So then one day a brek chloe told Shanea to stay the F**** away from her boyfriend. the shanea told chloe that dylan was the callin her beggin her to come back. So chloe told me that her and dylan were completely over. well today during break chloe ran off in the bathroom into the handicap bathroom and that's were she goes when she's texting and dylan wasn't at school that day, and chloe was using someone else's phone and textin dylan . So, i went in there and asked her what she was doing and she said nuthin then I felt of her pocket just tocheck and see if she had a phone in it and she did. I ran out as she tried to "EXPLAIN" i stilll haven't talked to her So yeah i guess you can say BETRAYED by ur ex-best friend.
Posted: Feb 17, 2009
phokiey
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hey your poem is good and moving too.i like it, actually
i am in love with the poem. the poem brings a sad experience but anyway life goes on while we all living in it. remember to love them all but trust no-one.KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!
Posted: Feb 18, 2009
very strong voice and feeling throughout. Really well done.
Posted: Feb 19, 2009
I liked it a lot for it's innocence and strength of message in it's simplicity. Obviously you've touched a nerve with many people who've wanted to make comments. Everyone hurts, and you've shared it with pure words in a touching way. Nice job.
Posted: Feb 24, 2009
Wow! I really felt the pain on this one. I love this poem. And you know what, I can relate myself into this, way back years ago, I've also suffered this kind of pain which really turned my heart somehow into a cold person. But with God's help, I pulled myself together and here I am now. Still alive and kicking. :-)
Posted: Feb 24, 2009
friendshipgirl818
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i have been betrayed by a friend but everything is ok now but wen dat goes on it is not fun to go through dat.
Posted: Feb 25, 2009
Hey, please don't leave comments on my work if it has nothing to do with what I've written, or if it's to someone else. It's making my page run slower, and taking up space. If you want to talk to each other please use other means of communication. Hope I'm not sounding rude. Thanks.
-Mystory
Posted: Feb 25, 2009
morgan
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oh, sorry! no you dny sound rude. totally understand
Posted: Feb 25, 2009
anonymous
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well i dont think morgan should get mad at her ovr that but if chloe is keepin secrets from her"BEST FRIENDS" then u hav a reason to get upset
Posted: Feb 25, 2009
1 of ur bff
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morgan go to twist magazine and write a comment on their and i will write u back just tell me wat u put it under!!!!!!!!!!! ps this is last time i will write on here thanx
Posted: Feb 26, 2009
1 of ur bff
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srry 2 rite on here again but this is 1 of ur bff again instead of twist go to m magazine please dnt go to twist go to m magazine instead promise last time
Posted: Feb 26, 2009
tori
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im going thru this right now..
i found out my boyfriend was cheating on me with this chick. which was very upsetting.
and then this girl i clled my best freind started going out with him a week later.
possibly before that i dnt even know.
anywho it forreal pissed me off and just thought id leave a comment saying that this poem is freaking fantastic. i lik it alot and i can relate
very good
bravo:)
Posted: Feb 26, 2009
Lovely poem but very sad.This is a familiar feeling for me too.
Posted: Mar 3, 2009
wow...a lot of people commented in this one. I can relate to this poem, I was betrayed by a friend who had been my friend for half of my life at the time, it was hard to go through.
~Vicky :D
Posted: Mar 8, 2009
wew been there and its a bitch...why can twe just get along right..well, anyways take care..great write..
Posted: Mar 12, 2009
This was a very nice but sad poem. I did like it. IT is best to just move on from people like that. I know exactly how you are feeling in this poem as well. It has happened to me many many times.
Keep writing!!
Posted: Mar 17, 2009
judie
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im un ugly betch
Posted: Mar 19, 2009
judie
(not registered user)
SHUTUP KAITLYN UR JUST JEALOUS OF ME
smb.
Posted: Mar 19, 2009
Oh man I like this, it applies to me as well. I had a good friend, but he was talking about me (and my friends) behind our back. We found out, and yeah it really hurt at the time, but hey, getting rid of them is for the better. I like how you talk about how they ruined your life and then want back in and you didn't let them, it's totally warranted. I really liked this poem, partially because I felt like it spoke directly to me, and partially because it was just so well written, so overall great job!
Posted: Mar 20, 2009
great poem.but...i don't really like it.i LOVE it.its so sad and touching.goes to all betrayed by their BFFs.i have a best friend but we're not really that close these days. we go separate ways,into separate friends.but the good thing is we're still BFFs.i have a similar poem.its dedicated to all my friends in my section (not just my BFF). we really had loads of fun when on our last year,sophomore year (i just turned 15).i'm really going to miss them so i made our section a poem.if you have time, check it out. its entitled BRAND OF HEROINE. thanks :)).great job, anyway. it's so nose bleeding.
Posted: Mar 23, 2009
Very good poem, and judging from all the comments, you really hit a nerve! I went through it too with someone I thought was my best friend. When it turned out she wasn't, I felt like a fool. Well, live and learn.
Posted: Mar 27, 2009
wow..i know the feeling.this is a great poem,well thought and written with great skill...
----chuck
Posted: Mar 27, 2009
this is really good. while reading, i could automatically feel betrayl and sadness and hurt, boil under my skin. i have felt this way before and i am feeling it now. it's nice to know someone else feels the same. it makes me feel less horrible about myself so thank you.
Posted: Mar 27, 2009
oh my gosh this is so good and amazing, u are really really good keep it up
Posted: Mar 27, 2009
lalala(:
(not registered user)
That happened to me:( That poem is SO true!
Posted: Mar 28, 2009
Beyrself
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I went through it..is not easy to trust anyone again.. You have to let go otherwise you be painful over the years...God bless you
Posted: Mar 28, 2009
Great poem! I love it, I am going through the same thing and this poem speaks volumes to me. Great work.
Posted: Apr 18, 2009
This poem is so amazing! It hits home and it just reminds me of the same crap i went through with a friend i use to have. I completely understand the hate and anger you feel towards this friend. I was betrayed once by my friend and, oh god it hurt. Whenever i hear her name i still feel that hate.
This is a great poem! Thank you for putting it up for people to read. You are a really good poet.
Posted: Apr 18, 2009
wow thats deep. i liked it. i liked it because one of my friends recently did something to me that idk if ill be able to forgive. he deliberately got the girl i was interested in to hate me just so he can get in her pants... shes going to get hurt and idk what to do. this was a great poem and i encourage you to keep writing and dont let anyone stop you from doing so.
Posted: Apr 18, 2009
I think I love this poem.
Posted: Apr 18, 2009
This is great. It's sad, but it's cold, hard reality. It's something that happens to everyone at some point in their lives. I love it.
Posted: Apr 23, 2009
so sad!!! :'(
Posted: Apr 23, 2009
Well done! =)
I know how this feels, and I'm sorry you had to go through it. It's horrible when a "friend" does stuff like that. =/
Posted: Apr 24, 2009
Aw that's kind of depressing. I love the feeling you put into it. It's amazing! =D
Posted: Apr 25, 2009
ive been through that before and it broke my heart now were mortal enimes and want to kill each other, no joke. love the poem! its so sad but yet so real!
Posted: Apr 25, 2009
Buddy, you managed to touch the right cords,something which everyone has gone through..beautifully written..check my profile as well buddy..
Posted: Apr 26, 2009
wow this is great
i'm at a clash with a good friend right now, just like this
lots of people obviously can relate to this
you are amazing
feel free to check out my works too
Posted: Apr 29, 2009
gud poem strong emotions well written
Posted: May 3, 2009
Betrayed by my BEST FRIEND
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I liked dis poem a lot..my best frnd had betrayed me too..n wen i asked him ab8 dis he is nt ready 2 accept nethng xcept showing my faults wch doesnt hav ne meaning at all.he showed his feelings 2 me n wen i acept his feelings he started avoiding me like he wanted 2 get rid of me now.he thought dat if ever he wil betray me i wil nt cum 2 know ab8 dis.n wen i came 2 know he get angry wid me saying dat i hv -ve perceptions ab8 him n all.but i know da truth.so now our frndsip has got 2 an end..n it hurted me a lot dat aftr lng time of frndsip he did dis 2 me.. :(
i know how it feels wen u shared everythng wid a person whom u lik so much n trust so much..n at last dey wil betray u sumday..itz really painful..
Posted: May 4, 2009
This is good. I like it. The feelings were clearly expressed. However, make sure you're using the right "your". (sometimes, you mean to say you're but use your, just a small note). Over all, I like this one. :)
Posted: May 4, 2009
the poem is very practically
Posted: May 7, 2009
i liked very muchit. the poem beautifully defines the emotions of betrayal.it's a realistic poem.good work.
Posted: May 8, 2009
This Poem Is Obviously Something That A Hell Of A Lot Of People Can Relate To
I Have Been Through Something Very Similar And It Is Hard To Deal With, But You Are Usually Better Off For It In The End xD
Check Out One Of My Poems? I've Only Just Started POetry Really :)
Posted: May 12, 2009
faniola
(not registered user)
i really like it this is the best poem ever
Posted: May 14, 2009
Like It...
I can relate to what you mean. I have been through betrayed as well by a someone I thought I could trust.
Great Poem
Posted: May 16, 2009
I know how that feels. It hurts.
Very good. Nice rythm.
Posted: May 18, 2009
aw, thats proper good :)
x
Posted: May 19, 2009
Very strong poem, with lots of strong emotions. Well done :). I know the feeling...
Posted: May 23, 2009
Jasmine.
(not registered user)
This just happened to me so i understand this. I really like this poem.
Posted: May 23, 2009
wow that was amazing
I my bestest friend ever did that to me now she is just someone i just happen to know
Posted: May 25, 2009
i loved this poem so much!!!! i wrote a poem called soft thorns, it's kind of related to the same topic, i'de realy appretiate it if u read it ^_^ anyways this poem was realllly goood XD Mona
Posted: May 27, 2009
Thanks for sharing.
Posted: Jun 11, 2009
I know that feeling all to familiar. Its the worst. like the poem its something alot of poeple can relate to.
Posted: Jun 12, 2009
Wow this is amazing.
I know where you are coming from on this.
I wrote a poem sotra like this one time.
Posted: Jun 12, 2009
Harsh way to learn anything, but It's good you were able to put it on paper intstead of letting it fester...
Posted: Jun 14, 2009
wow. i've totally felt that way a million times before... my family, friends, parents, siblings- everyone minus 2 ppl, have betreayed me...omgsh!
that was totally deep- from one whose been hurt to another, may God blees you...try not to dwell on it, but be careful, i've given humanity chance after chance, and they still let me down...you should stop by and read some off my stuff, it could cheer you up, well, at least 1 of them will...at any rate, i've rambled long enough-i really liked the deepness.
you've always got a friend in me!! :) :) :)
Posted: Jun 20, 2009
wow. i've totally felt that way a million times before... my family, friends, parents, siblings- everyone minus 2 ppl, have betreayed me...omgsh!
that was totally deep- from one whose been hurt to another, may God blees you...try not to dwell on it, but be careful, i've given humanity chance after chance, and they still let me down...you should stop by and read some off my stuff, it could cheer you up, well, at least 1 of them will...at any rate, i've rambled long enough-i really liked the deepness.
you've always got a friend in me!! :) :) :)
Posted: Jun 20, 2009
lonely angel..
(not registered user)
dat poem was 22 gud n great...evn i had 3 ppl..whom i thought as my besst frnz 4 lyf...we were frnz frm 8 yearss..i just thought dey r my life... n now m walking a lnonely road..i dont hav ne1 now...cant tell u da whole story though...but ma heart keeps burning always...
Posted: Jun 21, 2009
lonely angel
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i think i cried so much dat amount of my tears can fill up a 100 big buckets[:D]...
Posted: Jun 21, 2009
lonely angel
(not registered user)
but its okay...JUST GO WID UR INTRESTS...DO WELL IN WHAT EVER FEILD U R...U MAY FIND GOOD PPL AGAIN, INSTAED OF BRODING OVER PAST..CYA!
Posted: Jun 21, 2009
Wow, you have TONS of comments! I really do love your writing, the emotion in it suprised me. Instantly after reading a few lines I could relate easily. I think anybody could relate to this in some way. You have captured a million emotions in just one or two simple lines, and as an overview its overwhelming. I love it. You are a great writer:)
Posted: Jun 21, 2009
Oh, forgot to tell you:
One line pretend was spelled wrong as 'predend'.
Sorry for the extra comment haha:)
Posted: Jun 21, 2009
I love the poem its really good, and true. Im 12 yrs old and Live in Aussie. I cant wait to read more of your stories.Im planing on doing a poem myself. Thank you if you could comment them!
Posted: Jun 22, 2009
I liked it a lot. It reminds me of something that happened to me. It is kind of sad though.
Posted: Jun 24, 2009
I'm a negative critic! Try writing in meter or maybe sticking to a definete rhyme scheme otherwise to me its just a poorly expressed sad story
Posted: Jun 25, 2009
i liked that alot!
that kind of made me feel like i have to be careful who i tell my secerets to. i have to be careful who my bffs r. but i still trust my bffs cuz i no even if we get into a fight they would never turn there back on me!
GOOD JOB! SOMEDAY U ARE GOING TO GIVE ADVICE TO PEOPLE, AND BY DOING THAT U WILL BECOME A FAMOUS PERSON JUST LIKE MICHAEL JACKSON!
Posted: Jun 29, 2009
This was very touching, I think I feel a tear coming down, I know what this feels like, the deep pain... You'll make it... as I did, I found a new friend, I trust her with my life, and she'll never let me down...
Posted: Jun 30, 2009
wow the rhyme is so natural, for a minute id dint even realize it rhymed, i was just lost in the beauty of the words. it is definitely rare when you have a poem so full of structure and passion, oftentimes one gets lost... a very captivating read!
Posted: Jul 2, 2009
that was amazing
Posted: Jul 5, 2009
Wow that is really good. What almost as amazing is the number of comments on here. It took me a minute of scrolling to get down to the bottom of the page! Wow! That is fantastic.
Posted: Jul 6, 2009
I like your poem. I think it is powerful and I can feel your anger and sorrow. I like especially the last part:
"How can you be so heartless,
And try to make me believe your lies.
I've learned form my mistakes.
I've learned from what I've done.
I've learned not to trust you.
You, or anyone."
I am new at this=) so... maybe you could tell me how crapy my poem is. =) It's called : I care about you though. Just if you like to. Would be great. Thanks and keep on writing!!! Bye=)
Posted: Jul 7, 2009
here is the link, as my profile sometimes does not show it. I am still confused=) thanks.
http://www.booksie.com/poetry/poetry/acwithoutd/i-care-about-you-though
Posted: Jul 7, 2009
aw i like it. mostly because everyone had been there at sometime in their life =) good job.
Posted: Jul 8, 2009
Beautifully written. It almost sounded like a song. I liked it because it is so realistic and everyone has been there. It rhyming is a plus, that's not easy to do, but you did it where it flowed very well. Great job!
-Olivia
Posted: Jul 13, 2009
GREAT WORK !!
it cant get worse when your best friend does it !!
touched me completely..
Posted: Jul 13, 2009
i really like this, its an amazing poem!!
Posted: Jul 14, 2009
Dream
(not registered user)
I like your poem. Its because i recently went through this that and searched about it and found this page. I went through so much these couple of months past that I found comfort reading through this, that I am not alone.
So Thanks!
Posted: Jul 18, 2009
Very nice! i have been through this many times and you really captured the emotion behind it! Great Work!
Posted: Jul 19, 2009
Beautiful. Very sad,
Posted: Jul 20, 2009
I realy like this! :)
Posted: Jul 20, 2009
Nice poem. It reminds me alot of some of my own style writing. It's very good and really conveys emotion well.
Posted: Jul 20, 2009
Excellent! This really touched me. First, I will say that the words were beautifully written, you can tell they came from the heart. I like how you had it shift from memories of the good times to how things secretly were and what they became. It is sad and painful, and the subject of betrayal is really the backbone to the piece. It hurts to confide in someone, to trust someone, to hold someone dear only to have them throw you away as if you never had any meaning at all. It's hard to get away from it, and it is a shame that someone that was once a close friend has to become such a hated enemy.
I can relate to this to the fullest extent. Two of my closest friends are no longer that. The first was my friend since I was in second grade. As we got older we were like salt and pepper, where there was one there was the other. He was my closest and most dear friend. I trusted him more than anyone else, and he was like my brother. Even my family looked at him that way. But he met this girl that changed him. She consumed his life and world, and forces him to do what she wants. She is mean to him, and won't let him see his friends. It's been two years since he has tried to contact me. How did my best friend end up this way? How can he not even try to call once?
And as for the other, he was somewhat the same. But he was trying to manipulate me into doing things he wanted to, albeit illegal. He also just did what he felt like and would tell private things to everyone. He also became obsessed with drinking and doing drugs all the time. I don't do drugs, and when I do drink, it's not often. We began to clash as I saw the real him come into light. It really, sorry about the language, pissed me off. It wasn't right or fair. It sucks that the two people I called best friends had to turn out this way.
Posted: Jul 23, 2009
please read my poem
what i used to be
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Posted: Jul 25, 2009
This poem is just amazing. this had happend to. know hhow you feel.
Posted: Jul 25, 2009
i can totally relate! i mean me and like 7 of my best friends are fighting now its weird to go back hating them so damn much
Posted: Aug 2, 2009
I have been theree a time or two. one was with a friend and one with a family member. So I can relate to this more than I would like to admit.It's an outstanding write.
Posted: Aug 3, 2009
I know exactly what you are going through. I've been through it in the worst way, however you cannot allow it to control and ruin your life. Don't allow them to effect you. By shutting them out and turning your back on them you're doing the same thing that you hate them for doing. That's being hypocritical! God tells us we must forgive or we ourselves will never be forgiven. We must love, even when it hurts. I know it hurts a lot, but you must choose to live and fight for better days. Love will always rise again! Choose to love, even when you are hurt and they turn on you.
Posted: Aug 5, 2009
i love it! great work.
Posted: Aug 7, 2009
your really good and so is this poem. keep writing :] sry about wut happened
Posted: Aug 8, 2009
alice
(not registered user)
thank you for writing this, im going through this as we speak. its been a really rough time in my life. im very young and not sure how to handle the betrayal.
Posted: Aug 9, 2009
It's nice to be able to relate to other people who go through the same events in their lives as you.
Everyone goes through this countless times while they're alive, it's just the kinds of people you judge poorly because they put on a facade when you first meet them and for the first few months... then all hell breaks loose and it's similar to a trainwreck.
It's a good thing that you're a Writer to pool out the negative feelings, or else you'd have to go punch the individual's face in.
I adored the poem. Looking forward to reading more of your writting.
-Onaki
Posted: Aug 14, 2009
leke
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I cried when I read this poem because the same thing happened to me a couple of years ago. I hope that you continue to write meaningful poems like this one.
Posted: Aug 19, 2009
I think that this is an amazing poem. Keep up the great writing.(:
Posted: Aug 19, 2009
The thing with friends is that you either have them...or you don't and honestly most of us don't. It is very rare that you find one person that you truly connect with...so I guess in a sense friends are like fruit...you have to pick just the right ones...
Posted: Aug 26, 2009
Heena
(not registered user)
Awesome poem, potrays each and everything what i have gone through recently.You really can't trust anyone in this world specially your own ppl....ur friends. These are the real feelings of mine i would say and in the end i want only one things n thats the regret what he should that he has lost a good freind n will never get ever in his life. a perfect poem...thanks to you to for protraying it in the exact order i have gone through in my friendship.:)...
Posted: Aug 27, 2009
This reminds me of the poem I wrote because my best friend walked away from me :)
Good job though.
Posted: Aug 28, 2009
This reminds me of the poem I wrote because my best friend walked away from me :)
Good job though.
Posted: Aug 28, 2009
i remember when my frend betryed me it sucked and then i hated her but then i knew u just got to forgive no matter what.
Posted: Aug 30, 2009
I love this so much. On my reading list :)
Please check out my first poem: Our Darkest Moment.
Thanks so much xxx
Posted: Aug 31, 2009
Loved it. Great poem.
Posted: Sep 3, 2009
NFWV
(not registered user)
Just wanted to say it is a very nice poem. I myself, can relate to your poem...Only I was the liar. I ruined the best friendship I EVER had over my lies. I don't even know why I did the things I did. I can't change them, I know. I nearly had to be locked away for a broken heart, one that still isn't quite right.
Posted: Sep 11, 2009
wow this poem talks a lot of sense! Wish I could send this to a girl who used to say she was my friend...
I have a poem about a loss, 'Nanny', please read :)
Posted: Sep 11, 2009
Your poem is amazing! I'v just had a girl I considered my best friend betray me after I suported her and was nice to her in her time of need, I can so relate to your poem it made me cry, I am so glad you have put this poem up! (read my work if you have time)
Posted: Sep 13, 2009
Naina
(not registered user)
That was really good =) I went through that just today. I know exactly how you feel. It just shows you can't trust anyone these days, not even your best friend.
Posted: Sep 14, 2009
It is painful when a friend betrays another friend. This person was not a friend to begin with. I can relate to this poem. My best friend had an affair with my now ex-husband while he and I were married. I had to forgive her, but I doubt I will forget what she did.
She actually did me a favor because 10 years later I met Gary and he is my world.
I guess some good always comes from the bad.
I still won't forget.
Great job on this!
Posted: Sep 22, 2009
great poem! I feel like printing it and giving it to 2 people i thought were my closest friends in the whole world x
Posted: Sep 30, 2009
To me it sounds like a mixture of betrayed by a best friend and/or signifigant other. Ive been betrayed by both. I was dating this senior when i was a freshman, I was 15, and i was in love. We'd only been together for about a month when we had sex,my first time. The monday after our two month anniversary he broke up with me. To back track a little there was this new girl, she was kind of a goth, which made me want to be friends with her. I tought she was cool, i introduced her to my group of friends,they befriended her and she started to hang with us. I confided in her about when my boyfriend and i had sex. She was the first person i told. Well the night my boyfriend broke up with me I found out he cheated on me with Her. You see that saturday was not only our two month aniversary but also her birth day party. They madeout with each other. The same day he dumped me he asked Her out after school. She said yes even though she promised me she wouldn't.
I got a revenge in a way she ended up pregnent and she lost the baby,i dont think it was an accident, she also dumped Him. So i know what it feels like to be betrayed. Oh I also have reason to believe that she told a bunch of people that i had sex with the guy.
Posted: Sep 30, 2009
this is amazing. my EX-bestfriend betrayed me 2. i hate her lol
Posted: Oct 8, 2009
wonderful poem, im feeling the pain, i can really relate to your poem... good job!
Posted: Oct 12, 2009
I liked it,go through mine also
Posted: Oct 13, 2009
I like this poem, really nicely written and easy to relate to xxx
Posted: Oct 13, 2009
So true...Amazing writing on capturing your feelings. =)
Posted: Oct 13, 2009
It's a brilliant poem that conveys how you feel perfectly. Keep writing :)
Posted: Oct 17, 2009
i absolutely love this because i just wrote a poem about losing a best friend and in a sense i stabbed her in the back. id really enjoy it if you found it in my portfolio and read it along with others. but at least it in particular. and to any body else that enjoyed this or just wanna read some more poetry check out the portfolio of mine... please
Posted: Oct 22, 2009
so genuine and heartfelt. i think we've all been there :)
Posted: Oct 28, 2009
milan gupta
(not registered user)
it feels so damn hurting wen sumthng like dat happens...i have been through d same feeling nd its really difficult..neways ur poem was really touching keep writing:)
Posted: Oct 31, 2009
This is an excellent poem it really portrays what the person is feeling. This poem made me want to cry because this sounds like a person I use to be best friends with.
Posted: Nov 1, 2009
nabeel
(not registered user)
great poem same thing happed to me i was on the internet searching for any answers but i found this well great job very nice may be you can give me an answer i had the same prb my best frnd betrayed me now he threathns me n now i dont trust any of my other friends n i am always thinking that he is trying to get back at me n i dont even know if i did any thing wrong
Posted: Nov 4, 2009
hey mystory this was very strong but heart felt poem but it was very nicely written
Posted: Nov 5, 2009
hey accidentely found your poem and this was just perfect as i feel now exactly the same when you wrote this poem...soo much emotion delievered in this poem and i have been there and know how hard it is to betrayed... but thank you for this poem was just want i needed today!!
PS think more people in this world need to read this poem
Posted: Nov 6, 2009
fuzzy
(not registered user)
i really like the poem it expresses all the feeeling that im going through at the moment wwith a ex friend she tells people we are friends but i say were not because she says stuff bout me to people and turned 5 people againsed me now i feel more alone than ever feel like i only have 2 people left that care bout me now and belive me it hurts evan more because she has done it before loads of time now im just going to forget about her the truth will come out on day but for now i will get by.
hope your ok now our friends are our enemies and our eniemes are our friends
fuzzyxxx
Posted: Nov 13, 2009
Amazing , i've been through or should i say i'm going through the same thing
Posted: Nov 14, 2009
This is amazing! I know the feeling, been through it before, but i think it teaches you that people aren't what you always expect. I try to see the good in people, and do anything for my friends to help them. But it always seems to backfire.
Posted: Nov 17, 2009
Good emotion. I can relate. I've been through that several of times, sorry to say.
Posted: Nov 19, 2009
That is deep! Can't wait for the next poem your write! Oh, by the way I am new to this site, I have four poems already up and published so you should all check them out, and I will keep you updated. Thanks.
DC Evan
Posted: Nov 19, 2009
i love this, it's how i feel right now and, well, i can relate so well, you put so much detail into and it made me cry. i really love this. :)
Posted: Nov 19, 2009
Oh yes, those "friends" one can do without, they are like vampyres draining one of blood and the joy in life all of us need. My only regret about the poem is that I - who always prefer short, pointed poems - find it too long. Never mind!
Posted: Nov 21, 2009
hay...This poem is so touching,It's sad and emotional
I've been betrayed by lots of friends, so I guess I know the feeling.
...Elne...
Posted: Nov 25, 2009
this is an amazing poem. its very relateable. iv lost many friends that way n its hard. but this is truely great work.
Posted: Nov 25, 2009
This is very good. Have you heard Bob Dylan's Positively Fourth Street? I Think you would like it, has the same feel.
Posted: Dec 1, 2009
ooooooh tear i went throught the same thing with sime girls named christal and sophie they talked behind my back and made me feel so bad about myself, used me because my parents had a car and the money. it got so bad that my dad punched the mail box and left it so marked up we had to get another one. they kept trying to talk on msn and email that i told them to f off. it worked. lol
Posted: Dec 3, 2009
thats crazy good..im kind of going thru something like that soo thats relevant? lol but i love it great job!
Posted: Dec 3, 2009
Wow. This covers the feelings I often have with one of my friends. It really hurts to be stabbed in the back by someone you care about and trust. I really like this poem, I understand it completely.
Posted: Dec 5, 2009
your poem flowed just perfect, i could almost write each line after the first myself. but i see many have gotten to complement way before..... let that tell you something
Posted: Dec 8, 2009
I like it, and i can totallly relate to it. I says everything id want to tell my best friend. Its probly something that ever person want to tell there old friend:). Very well written.
Posted: Dec 9, 2009
I love it! and can totally relate to it! it's amazing.
Posted: Dec 14, 2009
O.O OH woweee........ Its amazing, you can relate to it and it has a big long line to comment, and as I am commenting it my comment box keeps scrolls downwards for some reason.
I really love the poem, it is beautiful and grasps the attention it deserves, keep publishing!
^.^ Good luckles!
~LOVE OKAMI
Posted: Dec 19, 2009
This poem really captured what it's like to be betrayed, in words that most people can comprehend. very good.
Posted: Dec 30, 2009
Its such a sham we have to go through such hurt to find words to write, this was great I understood it and realise the cant trust anyone bit.
all we can do is learn from our trails ..
Posted: Jan 2, 2010
wow, very deep
Posted: Jan 5, 2010
I LOVE IT
Posted: Jan 5, 2010
deep and awesome
Posted: Jan 6, 2010
filled with emotion,the tupe of writing i like! good job, i felt it all the way.i felt YOU in it,all the way.
Posted: Jan 7, 2010
Beautifully written and so very true. =( It has happened to me before, as I'm sure it will happen to everyone at some point. Well done and I hope all is well!
Posted: Jan 7, 2010
brilliant. every word is so true, and so powerful. your emotions were strong in this piece. just beautiful work. keep it up
Posted: Jan 7, 2010
Oh wow, So many comments! ^^
Well, I'll try to make mine count.
I'm super surprised that no one on Booksie has written about this before! You capture the emotion so well, and keep the reader interested with rhyme.
I'm so glad you wrote this, because I can say for a fact that I've gone through this once in my life where a friend of mine was saying things about me behind my back so that she could become friends with "popular" people. It hurt when she lied and said she didn't say those things, but I made a good decision and let her have her new friends.
Thank you so much for writing this! You wrote it so wonderfully and I only wish people that cause this pain to others can figure out what it's like.
Keep up the great work! ☆
Posted: Jan 7, 2010
My friend did the exact same thing to me :(
Posted: Jan 7, 2010
Sarah
(not registered user)
This poem is so sad. made me cry. i went through something like this just a few days ago....except..it was the one that betrayed my best freind. i lost my best freind over me doing the most dumbest most hurtful thing in the world. and im getting what i deserve. heart ache. remorse. sadness. and regret. ill always miss miss my bestie. she would never have me back. i understand though and ive learned my lesson. the past will never be undone. and i will never be happy again nor do i want to. a freinds betrayal is the worst of all. Great Poem.
Posted: Jan 7, 2010
Wow, what a very touching poem. This really hit me home. I like it very much especially the words that was used in this.
Posted: Jan 8, 2010
Like the rawness. You might like my poem called "A light of change".
Posted: Jan 8, 2010
Lucky7girl
(not registered user)
i love it ! i am going thru the same here well similar ... my best friend tiffany betrayed me in such a way that it is so hard to believe she told me sweet words and then when i read her facebook comment on a picture she tol dthe girl in the photo that " hiii...hiii...hiii my name is tiffany and my bestie is a hawtiee
when i saw that i felt like i had lost someone so close then i looked back and notice that this was not the first time i was only a good friend to her ..... betrayal by A BEST FRIEND is harder touched by just a friend :(... so sorry you had to go thru that great poem though :D
Posted: Jan 8, 2010
I really enjoyed this Poem. I have a poem about betrayal. It's a good way to release stress whenever you write poems like this, because it takes so much emotion to really get the poem to hit it's target. Keep up the good work, and I am adding you as a favorite read.
Posted: Jan 8, 2010
anne_alejo <3
(not registered user)
this poem totally relates to me and my ex-bff! i luv it sooo much, i sent it to her! it spells my life PERFECTLY!
Posted: Jan 9, 2010
This is so sad, but I hope that you're stonger than ever.
I really love this poem though, all the rhyming is really good! :)
Posted: Jan 11, 2010
this is sad but it relates to reality so much and this has happend to me and trust has affected my life. Though you learn from these experiences and i was told by a friends that it isn't in school that you find who your real friends are but when you leave those are the ones that hang onto the friendship but anyway besides the sadness i really like it because its reality :)
Posted: Jan 15, 2010
very sad but very very good poem this has happened to me before too
Posted: Jan 16, 2010
I liked the concept of the poem, but the piece as a whole was immature. You have a good start, but the word choice and style lacks emotion. It's good, but not strong. Keep at it though.
Posted: Jan 16, 2010
This is such a great poem, clearly describing something that are hard for certain people to grasp. I do personally believe it was a little drawn out, and lost meaning towards the end, but the topic is strong just have to work out the kinks like any other great writer!
Posted: Jan 16, 2010
so true...so true! all i can say :3
Posted: Jan 16, 2010
bestie failed me
(not registered user)
this is happened to me so i sent half of this poem to the friend that betraded me and i did not get a reply
so i think she thinked it though
Posted: Jan 16, 2010
lisa girl
(not registered user)
i really like it.....my friend has done this to me also...i feel the pain.. noce poem
Posted: Jan 17, 2010
beautiful. i love it. i understand exactly where you are coming from; im going through something similar right now.
Posted: Jan 18, 2010
hah, i don't know how much my comment will mean considering just HOW MANY you got on this poem.
But I'll give it a go. I really loved this, it made sense of alot of the same feelings I had recently. I appreciate how well you've conveyed it all. I wish you never come across such a "friend" again.
All the best, Joe.
Posted: Jan 19, 2010
Oh, that is so direct, strong to the point!!! I can feel the pain, hurt and a lot of pride too. Well written, a great message of strength and self awareness!! Loved it!!!
Posted: Jan 21, 2010
Great job! I really like the emotion in this poem, especially since I've been through it myself recently. You've made a fan out of me! :)
Posted: Jan 21, 2010
wow. this is a very beautiful poem. heartbreaking and true. I know what that feels like all too well. When someone who I THOUGHT was my best friend told me she was never really my friend, I became a selective mute and couldn't really speak to anyone but my family. So I turned to writing as my way to speak to the world and tell it my thoughts. I still get really shy and start acting childish around complete strangers, but I'v opened up more and I am much more outgoing and talkative than I used to be.
Thank you for sharing this.
Btw, don't take this offensively, but there are a few slight mistakes that you should probably fix up. Just a bit of constructive criticism!
Why don't you check out some of my stuff?
Posted: Jan 21, 2010
Masdar
(not registered user)
I have been betrayed by my best friend too. I trusted him with my life. After the tenth betrayal i've finally given up though. And i m so sorry for u and all those who feel the same way. Its a great poem and i can realte to every part of it. It brought tears to my eyes man!
Posted: Jan 23, 2010
Beautiful! XD
Posted: Jan 24, 2010
hey!! very nice poem, deep-full in meaning and strong in story!! keep it up! im new to this site yet this poem caught my eye out of many, please take a chance to look at my work if you get the time, and criticism is more than welcome =)
Posted: Jan 24, 2010
i think that was terrific, and i understand how u feel
Posted: Jan 25, 2010
Thanks for sharing this with us. You really have a gift.
Posted: Jan 25, 2010
This was so wonderful i love it so much...that's what i feel like sometime with a lot of my friends. You have talent for writing.
Posted: Jan 26, 2010
Simply amazing.
Betrayal from a best friend has happened to me too, and from reading alot of the comments i can see it has happened time and time again sadly...
You truely have a unique style of writing and i enjoyed reading your work, i also love how you express your feelings through it, very talented indeed.
Keep up the good work!
Posted: Jan 29, 2010
wow that is amazing i love it i felt like that to when my best friend did this to me but i love the work good job :)
Posted: Feb 2, 2010
reb
(not registered user)
this is so amazing :) i love it :D well done! i can really relate to it :)
Posted: Feb 4, 2010
I feel like this poem is expressing my emotions that are still kept inside me by my ex bf breaking up with me. He started treating me like crap and then he would act like a friend then he got a new gf and she was telling him not to be friends wtih me so he listened. ANd they talk behind my back and all the stuff uve expressed through this poem. I want to say its really good that your readers cant relate you your stuff and I give this poem an overall 100% rating. Its very deep and touching
Posted: Feb 5, 2010
I know this is going to sound random but i know you have a playlist and I wanted to know how you got it on your profile? Like I tried putting one on my but its not wroking. :/
I'd gladly appreciate your help
Posted: Feb 5, 2010
Christina
(not registered user)
That's so gay
Posted: Feb 5, 2010
