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Poem By: native2music
Poetry

Tags: life, sorrow, depression, spiritual

A poem I had written in my past - date unknown View table of contents...

Submitted: Sep 13, 2008 Reads: 53 Comments: 1 Likes: 2

Heavy heart within this tomb
Laden sorrows my open wound
Muffled cries that all remains
Christ please help me make a change

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Comments:

sitting ponderer

You know had you elaborated more on this one it would've been better. I am just saying because this piece is very beautiful and describes more sorrow than shown here :p

Posted: Sep 16, 2008

Author Comment:

I agree with you 100%, and I like constructive criticism. I was in such a sour mood at the time of writing this that I think I pretty much tossed it aside after the four lines. It's not often, but when I get like that I am pretty much unproductive in everything that I do (which is a very common symptom of depression).