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COLD HOPE

Poem By: nEoPOL
Poetry


A bleak poem about life losses and change. View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 14, 2008    Reads: 32    Comments: 1    Likes: 2   


COLD HOPE

By nEoPOL

The rain poured and yet I ran,

falling through the world,

it's hollow substance,

no container for my woes.

***

Once there was purpose,

now there was only bleakness,

a sense of order lost,

direction changed.

***

The path still sodden,

the road still wet,

the end in sight,

but only sorrow to get.

***

The chance of a future,

a life recindled perhaps,

hope destined to take me,

it's cold embrace teasing me,

taunting me.

***

As time would pass,

the road would dry,

the footing solidify,

the answers so crass,

would inform me well,

that hope would be undoubendly, become my cell.


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Comments:

nEoPOL:

Another good one and another "I Like It" vote.

Some spelling errors (perhaps). Suggested deletion are in parentheses "()". Examples:

it's hollow s(t)ubstance,

a life recind(l)ed perhaps,

that hope would be undoube(n)dly, become my cell.

If you would like to know my thoughts about poetry and how it is best written, please read the "comments" appended to my posting entitled: "Love Intended: #1, #2 & #3".

Thank you.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks for the use of your eagle eyes!!! LOL! I couldn't see the wood for the trees with those two errors!



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