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Reversed Fault

Poem By: Nessly305
Poetry


about life and its thoughts of god ppl and things View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 4, 2007    Reads: 61    Comments: 1    Likes: 0   


Stare at me with despair of my blood shot eyes.

Thinking of all the pain and lies.

Angels of heaven feeling it as it dies.

Minus the hate and the greed of the devils crys.

Tormented with hell as throughout it flys.

 

How can god let it be.

Left with a lonely tree.

All my life i been on one knee.

And knows what it does to me?

How it feels to never see.

 

Revenge taken with a lifetime.

Moments and thoughts turned on a dime.

Pushing you down so further your forced to climb.

Uttered only words a million ideas can define.

Calling the true evil intelligent design.

 

 

 


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Comments:

Great poem. Love the idea bu i think the rhyming was a little too much. try using a little less rhyming, for example line 1 rhymes with line 2 and lines 3 & 4 rhyme, or line 1 & line 3 rhyme and line 2 & line 4 rhyme... something like that. But this is a good poem anyways :D

Posted: Aug 4, 2007

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