It’s the second coming
A storm I thought over
And the rustling wind
She comes to my bed
The monsters are waiting
In the shadows of my room
And all can I do
Is step into them
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This may sound like a negative poem but I don't know, the end suggests something good. But I will let you all decide. ;) View table of contents...
Submitted: Aug 9, 2008 Reads: 67 Comments: 7 Likes: 7
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Hi Nic, is this something to do with the ghost experience you had written about earlier? Sounds rather like that to me. Creepy. Yes, step into them, lady. They will vanish into thin air.
Posted: Aug 9, 2008
Memories of a bad relationship, maybe? Short and...um, spooky. Nice job. Hope all is well. Ted
Posted: Aug 9, 2008
hahaha, I too thought it was about a ghost lol, yes, because of your ghost story I suppose, speaking of; I thought there was to be another? ok well, this here is a good poem it is that line; 'all I can do is step into them' that makes it so great for me :) because it gives the sense that you should not be affraid.
see you laters Nix
~katie
Posted: Aug 9, 2008
This is about uncontrolled emotional fear the thought of life being totally out of our control and in to somebody else's hands. (maybe helplessness)is the key watch word here.
We all have our soul to bare and maybe the feelings that if we embrace our fears and go forth and conquer then life becomes much easier to contemplate.
Any way i just wanted to congratulate Nixie on a fine piece of work really liked now i'm going to play some clannad and chill out with their cd (macalla) whilst watching the film (match point)with Scarlett Johansson you have set the right mood for me thanks.BUFFERDUDE
Posted: Aug 9, 2008
This really has such intensity in it. I love it. It makes me wonder what type of monster is waiting within the shadows. Excellent Job my friend. Like always. :)
Posted: Aug 10, 2008
Hey Nixie :) I agree with Ted, this does seem kinda spooky...but I love spooky, hehe. The poem's wording is simple on the surface but when I re-examined it, I could definitely read more into it. You are a true artist Nixie. Take care, Regan
Posted: Aug 11, 2008
Nixie this has a very dark feel - in fact I find the ending even darker! Stepping into the monster and the shadows as if you are being swallowed up in the blackness. How I feel about your words, I can see the sense of conquering the fear too (since Katie so neatly pointed it out) but it also sounds as if you are "giving in" to the darkness and who knows what horrors are waiting?
Nicely written.
Posted: Aug 11, 2008
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