Drowning in love

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Poem By: Nixie
Poetry

Tags: ocean, water, sea, drowning, love, falling in love

Another poem - who knows when this phase will die. :) View table of contents...

Submitted: Apr 7, 2008 Reads: 62 Comments: 12 Likes: 9

My left foot in - I see the water

Spinning waves of emotional torture

My fists are tight - lifelines broken

I was always destined to walk this ocean

My bed is made - the sunlight whispers

Your heart is fire and starting to blister

My eyes are closed - I move in deeper

I'm drowning in love but I know I can't keep her

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Comments:

Eric JHRB Egan

Tight rhyming pattern Nix, well conceived, I like it.

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Eric, much appreciated! ;) ~ Nixie

Mel

I don't know how you put stuff like this in words?
I held my breath since the 2nd verse... And then read it again... It's beautiful and sad all at the same time...

X x x Mel x x x

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw Mel, I love your comments. I'm glad it caught your breath, it was a brief write but you male it seem worthy. :) ~ Nixie

Anna Therese

I like this Nixie, the sense of inevitability, of being out of control and the depth, despair and joy blend of falling in love.

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

You said it! I think I could've written more but I was rushed with time - the story of my life! :) Thanks Anna. ~ Nixie

You`re so talented. I don`t know how you do it. Honeslty, i think this is my favorite so far. So heart felt, it makes me wanna cry ( I know I know I`m a big baby, lol) LOVED it. Keep them comming lovely.
Steph:)

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey Steph, wow, your like a little 'pick me up' arn't you lol. Thanks for always commenting and making me smile! ~ Nixie

mum55

Another great poem.....you have got the talent...great write....Take care Juliet

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks again Juliet, that's a lovely compliment! :) ~ Nixie

Jbortti

really interesting ! Nixie you are in a constant metamorphosis , i just would like to know when this butterfly will come out from the cocoon. Beautiful as always .

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, that's so sweet! Big smile :) ~ Nixie

apodiform

Wow! You always blow me away with how much you can say and express in so few words. I could feel myself standing at a precipice not wanting to go in but pushing my way ahead anyway!

Posted: Apr 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw thank you, what a lovely comment. I guess, or at least with me, the heart controls everything and it would quiet happily push you in until your head was under and you were reaching for air. Oh, now here’s a thought - maybe it's like cake, you say no and then someone offers you a taste and you say, hmm yum, I want more so you have a thin slice. But that isn't enough so you have more and before you know it half the cake is gone! lol I really do talk to much huh? :)

Thanks again ~ Nixie

Jak Sylvian

Who knows when this phase will die out... With any luck it won't as poetry like this is inspiration worthy. You always seem to put feelings into writing so easily. :-)

Posted: Apr 8, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, shucks, thanks. I find poetry so much easier than a full on story, but I enjoy the story more. It's hard to say where it comes from, but I've been writing songs since I was about 11 (even though it was a cheap 30 inch keyboard lol) which is often poetic, so maybe I've been doing it a while. Who knows? Thanks a lot matey! Smiles all round! :) ~ Nixie