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It's been cold here lately, especially this morning when I left my house at 5:30am. I don't know why, but I was inspired by it! - Ps. the ending was an unexpected development! View table of contents...
Submitted: Feb 15, 2008 Reads: 209 Comments: 26 Likes: 17
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Very nice...
Its almost as if i was there watching them disapear in the dark...
Love it... :)
x x Mel x x
Posted: Feb 15, 2008
This is a true story. Villain the proper word. You are using multi levels of your brain here. High Five.
Posted: Feb 15, 2008
Fantastic ! Very poetic ! And this history got a very sexy secret . And I liked this Idea :"Two secret lovers
For just one night" . Does the cold make you to think in many hot things, it is not? Great write!
Posted: Feb 15, 2008
You have excelled yourself with this peice really great.......visions you expressed are great.....Till Later Juliet
Posted: Feb 15, 2008
Nicky this is quite lovely and the sharpness makes us shiver.
Posted: Feb 15, 2008
Good poem; strong imagery.
Posted: Feb 16, 2008
Hey Nic, the ending was unexspected for me as well.
it is a very interesting piece. Was able to give you 3 'I like it's' LOL! ya, that happens sometimes, the page don't change and you press it again thinin' it didn't take then before you know it you have a bunch of 'I like it's' LOL cool huh? Hey take care....peace and love ...katie
Posted: Feb 16, 2008
Really really good. It was just like I was there with them. Really good descriptions, I loved it:)
XxxxxBrokenxxxxX
Posted: Feb 16, 2008
How brilliant!
I love it!
Great wording! You are so impressive! This is really well structured.
Keep it up!
xoxo.
Posted: Feb 17, 2008
darn good poem :D
Posted: Feb 17, 2008
Very good and the imagery is amazing!
Posted: Feb 17, 2008
I can't wait to read more of your writing!
Posted: Feb 25, 2008
Very atmospheric, painting a lovely breath-holding image.
Posted: Feb 25, 2008
Sent shivers down my spin! its really good!
Posted: Mar 9, 2008
I love the way it flows. very beautiful. LOVED it!
Steph:)
Posted: Mar 24, 2008
Wow. It almost seems like I was inside the wall or part of the housee. That's amazing, very few poems actually to that to me. I love your writing style, its amazing.
~Kaori
Posted: Mar 29, 2008
Great writting:)
Posted: Mar 31, 2008
Gave it a "I like it" for it's simplicity and gr8 imagination
Posted: Apr 15, 2008
Wow, why didn't I read more of your stuff earlier! So simple, yet so vivid.....
Posted: May 6, 2008
wow you made it so crisp and beautiful you have great talent!
Posted: May 11, 2008
This poem is reallyyy good. ;)
Posted: May 17, 2008
I loved the rhyming. It was beautiful.
Posted: Jun 2, 2008
I liked it a lot. And I really enjoyed the short stanzas. It kind of made it flow faster and keep my attention more.
Posted: Jul 15, 2008
i really enjoyed this , poetry as it should be , telling a story . if freezing your bum off , inspires you to such quality , dare i suggest , you sit on a block of ice every day.
Posted: Jul 21, 2008
great imagery and great flow!!
Simple and wonderfully presented words!
LOVED it!^___^
You do have a great talent!^_^
nuttyz~
Posted: Jul 28, 2008
Gave it a *like it* great idea..
The lines 'two secret lovers for just one night' has a great vibe about it.. Love it.. write some more plz
~Danniella
Posted: Dec 2, 2008
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