Very nice. I love the way you showed this so visual. In a way it sort of remind me of heartache. The way love slowly falls within time. Excellent poem my friend. I don't know if that was what you were trying to portray in this poem. It is just what I saw in it. :)

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

the last line was perfection! I agree with Michael, excellent poem Nixie!
STeph(:

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

Excellent work:)

Posted: Jun 22, 2008

So beautiful.

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

The word scraped jarred me and then I thought about the imagery and really loved it. Whoosh! I could just imagine it; like the wind catching it. Beautiful.

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

I love the imagery! I could see it so clearly as I read your words. Short and sweet :D

Stephanee :)

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Nixie so simple yet do discriptive loved this...Take care Juliet

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

Oh My (in awe) Nix, this was EXTRAVAGANT!
that got me too, the; 'scrapes the air' but even the title grabed me along with the picture, it is like i was so drawn to this even before reading and then whilst reading i was in awe hahaahahah, ya, that kinda mood leaves one a little speachless.

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

scrapes the air is an artists line, thanks for putting it up

Posted: Jun 23, 2008

SIMPLY LOVELY

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

'Left to right
Right to left'

You use simplicity to make the truths you tell even more beautiful. If that's possible~

Yes, it is! One feat I'm not sure I can reach...

'I like'd it' sincerely,
~rain

Posted: Jun 24, 2008

Aw, i like watching a falling leaf--swirling and whirling and twirling---flying and dancing and swaying in slow mo. Oh, just love watching one. Great job, Nix! ^^

Posted: Jun 27, 2008

i could visualise the petal falling from the ROSE....Oh it tore my heart apart but this is destiny...the petal had to fall down one day....

But it is so tough to accept it....i am not sure if i am strong enough

Posted: Jul 2, 2008