When the heat rises

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Poem By: Nixie
Poetry

Tags: ice, summer, heat, cold, drink

This was something completely random. I didn't want to give the end away but I think you will get it before the last line. View table of contents...

Submitted: Jun 9, 2008 Reads: 69 Comments: 18 Likes: 16

Here I sit

The ready soldier

Cold and deprived of your touch

And stuck at your mercy

I’m completely surrounded

And clogged inside myself

Frozen like a memory

Are the days I ran free

And here I wait

For the day you come

The day the heat rises

And you have no choice but to surrender

That’s when you’ll open the door

And reach inside for me

Finally breaking me free

Into your fizzy lemon pop!

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Comments:

AngelaSteele

I want ice right now! It's burning where I live. No, I don't want ice, I need IT!! By the way, I thought that was really clever. If only I was an ice cube right now *sigh*

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL aww, I can swap you some ice for some sun if you like? :) Nothing like ice on a hot day huh? Heehee! Thanks for reading Angela! ~ Nixie

AngelaSteele

Haha. Hmm. More ' I liked it ' votes than reads...how is that possible? lol

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL ask Lacey, her computer seems to like me! :)

Irwin
(not registered user)

Good little poem Nixie. renibds me of my schooldays when this sort of thing was popular depicting teapots and so on - yours is far better!

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Hah, good times! I enjoyed writing this, I might work on a few more. :) Thank you Irwin. ~ Nixie

Mel

Nice work... Very origianl...

Posted: Jun 9, 2008

Author Comment:

Hey Mel! :) Thanks for reading, glad you liked it! ~ Nixie

Susan Hartline Fouts

This was a very good poem.

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Hi Susan, thank you for that and for always coming by. I really appreciate it. ~ Nixie

I thought the first two paragraph type things (- stanzas is that right??) you could apply to a nose! :-)

I'll never understand how you can just bang these little works of literary art out faster and easier than a fat fella on a beans and pasty diet....

Do I need to say I jabbed the I LIKE IT?

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL that's so funny! OMG, I read back with the nose in mind and it's quite scary! You know who I think of when you mention fat fella on a beans and pasty diet, dont you? :) I say no more. lol Thanks Jak! ~ Nixie

stephhlebreton

hehe, I love your poems, so clever you are! Another brilliant piece, you are a star!
Steph(:

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, you always put a smile on my face Steph! You're too sweet. Thank you so much for that. :) ~ Nixie

Pratibha

AHA.....there it is ....like Lacey said...a puzzle to solve....

And imagine the scenario on a hot summer afternoon....AHA......

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Ah, we had one of those afternoons today. I had no idea how hot it was because I'd been sleeping after my night shift but when I stpeed outside, WOW! ice came to mind. lol Thank you for always coming by Pratibha, you are such a pleasure!! :) ~ Nixie

Michael68

excellent job. I love this poem. :)

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks Michael, you're a star for always reading and commenting! :) ~ Nixie

mum55

Nixie such an insperational and orginal poem....loved it ..Take care Juliet

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you so much Juliet, I'm touched you like it. :) ~ Nixie

Anna Therese

Intruiging little poem - until the last stanza I was seeking deeper meaning. It works beautifully and is a delight to read.

Posted: Jun 10, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you Anna, I don't quite know where I got the idea but it was fun! I'm glad you liked it, thanks again! :) ~ Nixie

lexie

whatever the other guys said before me... a bit shallow doesn't it.
i loved it!! can i write that agian?
i loved it!
fizzy lemon pop? funny i think.
all the best... lexie

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Ah, yay! I'm so glad you love it! I love anything lemon, :) ice and lemon is prefect on a hot day! Thank you Lexie. ~ Nixie

Urja

And I thought you wrote serious stuff! This one had me in splits, because I really did not anticipate the end. A good mid-week perk for me!

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Hah! I guess I have been quite serious lately, I'm glad though this lightened the tone a little. :) Thank you Urja, I'm glad it gave you a little perk, heehee! ~ Nixie

Classy Peach

Like ice between your thighs....

big grin.

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL lucky ice cube! (can't believe I just said that! LOL) ~ Nixie

raindown

Sweet poem Nixie, ;)

I taste lemons, and fizz*

You always know the perfect way to describe what you see, and in this case taste and feel...to your readers.

Cool...

~rain

Posted: Jun 11, 2008

Author Comment:

Aw, what a perfect comment! Thank you for that Rain, nothing like the taste of cool lemon fizzy drink whenn it's hot. ;) ~ Nixie

Jak Sylvian

I never normally leave a 2nd comment but I felt I must as reading your reply to my comment and the who you think of made me laugh...

out loud....

to a caller!

Posted: Jun 12, 2008

Author Comment:

LOL that's so funny! I'd of loved to of seen that, did anyone else see you? *sniggers* LOVE your comments! :) ~ Nixie

Jak Sylvian

Nah no-one else saw me, I am the epitome of professionalism and tact...

Kind of -just to be sure I then quickly ran off to get a round in!

Oi oi, that makes three comments in one, you are a bad influence Miss Nixie!!!

Posted: Jun 15, 2008

Author Comment:

Haha! I am sorry, I do love your comments though, I always end up giggling to myself. :) I'm glad Mick didn't catch you, he might have asked for 10 sit ups! Haha! ~ Nixie