Moon
Shining shadow
Mysterious and beautiful
Bringing light to Earth
Luna
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Beautiful Moon
Poem By: NocturnalMuse
Poetry
Tags: moon
I decided to try and start writing poetry so I can get better at it. I looked up different styles and decided to us the style known as "Cinquain".
I was half asleep as I wrote this.
I had a lot of help and criticism done by Alice Oiseau. I redid it so many times I'm not surprised she didnt tell me to stop sending it to her. lol
I hope everyone enjoys!
Especially Punishment =)
He made me giggle so much while I was writing it.
Thanks guys!
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Submitted: May 28, 2008 Reads: 75 Comments: 17 Likes: 6
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Wow Mandy,
I think Ill draw a picture about this. Hahahaha XD
Posted: May 28, 2008
First to comment! Hahaha! Alice is probably so angry now. Hahahaha! XD
Posted: May 28, 2008
well you know what i think of it. haha
i love the contrast of the first line ^^
so simple, yet so beautiful. a poem well written my friend.
for the rest of you to read: it was harder to write than you think! haha
great work mandy :)
Posted: May 28, 2008
Well done. I like this alot.. You really create an image with this. Short poems usually do and you nailed it. Great job. :)
Posted: May 28, 2008
I love it. You created great imagery in such a short poem. Keep it up!
Posted: May 28, 2008
If the moon can read poetry, she'll like how she's described in this one...
Posted: May 29, 2008
You did really good though for one of your first poems.
I think you'll do fine with any poetry that you do.
~DarkFairy~
Posted: May 29, 2008
this was prettttyy
i liked it
gawsh you are such a good writer
you have a great imagination
how do you come up with all of this?
~faith marie~
Posted: May 29, 2008
awww, lovely. I'm glad I came across your page:P lol, I'm off to read your other stuff:P hehe
Steph(:
Posted: May 29, 2008
Beautiful! I love the moon and I love your poem.
Posted: May 30, 2008
hi! mandy. u ended it well with LUNA - roman myth name for moon goddess. i like mythical stuff. ;-)
Posted: May 30, 2008
So sweet MANDY....this surely captured my attention beyond words
Posted: Jun 1, 2008
i agree with bubbly the end was simple yet pleasent! good work!
Posted: Jun 6, 2008
hey thought the poem was wonderful, the imagery is really beautiful...what makes it even better is so many things are written about the moon, but you still made it your own :)
Posted: Jun 30, 2008
I like the second line alot, "Shining shadow" it is such a great description although of it's opposition!
-Merrill G.-
Posted: Jul 5, 2008
i love it! :) you should keep writing poetry...it's a great style of writing and i love it !:)
Posted: Jul 7, 2008
a very good start , old willy shakespeare will be trembling .
terry
Posted: Sep 5, 2008
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