Submitted: Aug 28, 2008
Reads: 58
Comments: 9
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Canopy
Washed up as I was
Squint-eyed in the glare
The day was too bright
It lingered
I curled round a branch
Dropped leaves on your head
And scratched at the bark
So quietly
Some songs for you, dear
A light show all round
You shimmered and rose
To touch me
Dusk fell on our bed
The dew soaked your face
All creatures gathered
To watch us
We’d tell them the tale
Of where they came from
If they understood
Our noises
We’ll sleep nose to nose
Wrapped deep in the moss
And breathe each other
Till morning
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Comments:
Beautiful! A wonderful read O
~katie
Posted: Aug 28, 2008
OO, I get drunk on your poems, if you know what I mean.
Posted: Aug 28, 2008
Oh, I absolutely loved the last stanza! You capture that feeling so well! That desire is creeping over me as we speak... *sigh* I've missed your poetry, lovely writing! ~ KB
Posted: Aug 28, 2008
Pastoral love song. Wonderful. A pre raphealite painting.
Posted: Aug 30, 2008
Connection to nature in idylic form. Love it!
Posted: Aug 30, 2008
cartera
(not registered user)
Good to see you back. There is no doubt that you have a great talent for expressing the deep feelings between one person for another at the early and end stages of love. Or should that be romance?
Some of your poems remind me of the islands of Scotland: they speak almost of a personal Paradise, but, underneath, there is something that does not quite fit, so leaving the tourist with an underexposed, one-dimensional, albeit very pretty, image.
The best is yet to come.
I look forward to your first published collection.
Good to see you back.
Posted: Aug 30, 2008
Oh that last stanza makes my heart pound.
This is beautiful.
Posted: Sep 2, 2008
Simply lovely.
craaig
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
Hello,
let me just start off by saying that i loved your poem. It is so rare to find a poetess on booksie who can evoke sensuality and romance without resorting to the age old gimmick of using hardcore imagery. Everything in your poem was wistful and heartfelt. It was both sensous and oh so subtle. Great job.
P.S you know i dont really go for this sort of poetry except when its written by Peachy, but i am so happy there is finally someone else to give her a run for her money LOL.
Posted: Sep 18, 2008
