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Submitted: Aug 18, 2008 Reads: 69 Comments: 10 Likes: 7
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Oh My God, I Love, love , love love love IT! lol ^_^
yes totally cosmical/metaphysical
this I adore: "time knows what time is, but it won't tell us" and "something is exhaling just quietly enough so..." it is as if you can dissapear so deep into the moment you could almost see something materialise/being breathed forth.
well, anyhoo, HA! ok, I remember seeing you a while back and before I got to read much of your posts I think you were gone. This one is totally awesome, glad I remembered you -- October O cool name
~katie
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
Simply beautiful. Can't say much more.
Posted: Aug 18, 2008
Tell Katie to back off, I found you first! ha!
As always, your poetry is divine and I, myself, being a devout believer in the universal laws of celestial sighs, must admit this is one of my favourite pieces of poetry October O.
Posted: Aug 20, 2008
Hey October :) I am glad that I finally got a chance to read something by you. And, wow, was it worth it. I agree with peach above me, this is also one of my favorites now. I love the tone and wording (you used the word "retrograde"!). The phrasing is also perfect, absolutely perfect. I am definitely a fan now :) Take care October, Regan
Posted: Aug 22, 2008
Wow, that is one big celestial sigh! The first stanza hit home for me, those lines suggest your fate is set by the universal laws which are out of our control. I keep writing about time and fate, both are working against me. This was... possibly is your best, aaah, so hard to stamp it the winner when they're all so good! ~ Nixie
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
To be honest with you, this one affects me in a different way each time I read it. I suspect that may be one of the points it's making. It's big! I'll get back to you... if we're spared.
Posted: Aug 24, 2008
The title is brilliant as is the poem.
Love the third stanza.
Posted: Sep 2, 2008
*I don't know how to describe this-it is awesome and takes you to another realm*
-Meg-
Posted: Sep 5, 2008
I love the precision in this. The stellar like qualities that speak of deepness.
Posted: Sep 8, 2008
I heard that! I LIKE IT; More than that.
craaig
Posted: Sep 16, 2008
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