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Precipice Divorce Conundrum

Poem By: October O
Poetry


Silly,silly,silly. And not autobiographical, by the way! View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Mar 6, 2008    Reads: 65    Comments: 9    Likes: 5   


 

Precipice Divorce Conundrum

 

 

When you pushed me off the precipice

I wondered why you’d want me dead

The shoes

The booze

The bad reviews

Of how you were in bed

 

The hours on the phone to my girlfriends

My mother staying for weeks

My weight

Big plate

I didn’t fellate

The frequent methane leaks

 

The pots unwashed till next Tuesday

The bills unpaid and unchecked

The smoke

The coke

How people spoke

Of my behaviour when wrecked

 

The endless hours of shopping channels

And criticising your sounds

Friends banned

Wedding planned

I wouldn’t stand

For that nasty ring you found

 

When you pushed me off the precipice

I wondered why you’d want me dead

No clue

My review

Is it’s all about you

And the rocks that you have in your head.

 


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Comments:

That's getting it out of your mind & heart.

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Nowt like a good purge every now and then.

Excellent stuff. Funny thing is: it's often a soft landing.

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Not this time! Brains dashed out on Blackstone Edge, more's the pity.

Great Rhyme! Fantastic stuff, October! Where DO you get your ideas?!

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Oh, I wonder, Mr E....I wonder...

Liz Lochead has just sprung to mind with this one.

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Must be the Scottish genes!Thanks,cartera...

This is so original to me, with a hint of humour! I love it! ~ KB

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Why thanks KB, can't seem to do anything other than slightly warped humour!

October O:

This the 1st of your postings of which, I thought, was sufficiently concrete for me to comprehend and, therefore, comment.

Losing a loved one. Under the most unpleasant of circumstances. When they choose to leave amidst mutual recrimination, acrimony and ad hominem attacks. To others as well. Can't get much worse than that.

Happier trails,

Ed Bradley.

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Yes, the abstraction dial was set to 'low' for this one! Thanks for your considered comment, Ed.

Oh evil laughter...that cliff is familiar to me. Darn.
October Orion
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I'm glad you're on here, you've got some fun reads.

Posted: Mar 6, 2008

Author Comment:

Pick any of those - like 'em all!Thanks Peach, glad you're here too...

I love the humor in this one. It should hit home with a lot of people!

Posted: Mar 7, 2008

Author Comment:

Hopefully! If not I think I might be a bit mad...thanks,Lacey

tickled me to death.loved it. trying to think of something funny to say,but id probably sound misogynistic so better not.once again think it is great.

Posted: Aug 21, 2008

Author Comment:

Thanks - and don't worry about misogyny...it would swifly be countered with misandry!



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