Star Fall
I watched it happen
You fell into my body
Just a molecule
Potent and concentrated
Time gathers and has no corners
And I hold my breath
All future is yours
And I’m a willing vessel
What a curious ocean
You will inherit
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Submitted: Mar 4, 2008 Reads: 75 Comments: 9 Likes: 7
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Absolutely correct! And beautiful. I love how you watched it happen aspect.
Posted: Mar 4, 2008
Love the economy and selection of wording. Moving too to boot. 'Like it' Ricky.
Posted: Mar 4, 2008
Wow! Beautiful words, October. This is exactly what a poem is for! Literally awesome.
Posted: Mar 4, 2008
I agree, stunning poem. Glad you visited my page so I could "find you".
Posted: Mar 5, 2008
A nice descriptive read. From now on I'm going to be thinking of myself as a vessel! You really have a knack for poetry! :) ~ Nixie
Posted: Mar 5, 2008
Irwin
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You have a clear and distinct style of your own which I like. Glad you brought your work to my attention.
Posted: Mar 5, 2008
Just on this Booksie. Enjoying your poetry. Tried to become a Fan but as a technodumpling it has not happened yet. I will try again. It won't be long befor you have publishers knocking at your door.
Posted: Mar 5, 2008
Realy unusual style...great to read
Posted: Mar 5, 2008
this is realy amaizing. wow... im sraring at my screen trying to think of something to say:) i think i'll stick with amaizing. alot of emotion packed into a small peice.
Posted: Aug 17, 2008
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