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Submitted: May 26, 2008 Reads: 39 Comments: 8 Likes: 4
Mist on the purple mountains
The ice in the air
Water, like tiny fountains
Drip and dribble there
Quiet like the river
Large as the sea
Loving as the giver
Giving much to thee
Elusive as a bird,
From heights unknown to man
The real beauty blurred
In the mist it plans
Mist on the fiery mountains
No ice in the air
No water in tiny fountains
Only fire, fire is there.
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And when ice and fire collide,
There forms steam.
So is there a winner?
Think.^^
Posted: May 27, 2008
this is really good!! wow!
Posted: May 27, 2008
hi! kaori. nature at its very best. i don't need to take a trip to the mountains when i can read ur poem and visualise it all. lol. ;-)
Posted: May 30, 2008
that was a good one, i love nature poems!
Posted: Jun 1, 2008
A most unsual place to write a poem but the poem came out as a 'brilliant' one....I could visualise the sequences....that's the beauty of the poem
Posted: Jun 12, 2008
Ah yes, balance is everything. A thick mist may smolder a fire or a strong fire will evaporate the mist. Beautiful poem.
Posted: Jun 14, 2008
Beautiful! Most amazing imagery, and you convey it most successfully....lovely piece of work. I'm very happy to have read it.
Much love
Ash
Posted: Jun 16, 2008
I't had so much imagery and using nature just makes it so much better, so calming.
Posted: Jun 21, 2008
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