oh wow! this poem reminded me of a poem i wrote about a month ago. it had this general theme to it. the fact that the world keeps passing you by, but you aren't moving.
i especially like the ending. iuno. i actually see it ending on a positive and happier note. b/c its like... yes everything keeps passing me by, but theres still my world. i havent lost that yet. and thats what matters. but then i can also see that from a pessimistic view... but lets not go there b/c i dont like being pessimistic! lol

another great poem kaori!!

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

I agree with you and Alice word by word and this is how my poem "life beckons..." started...

I observed my husband and realsied that he also caught up in the race, not knowing what he wants, he is missing out on simple pleasures which according to him are distractions....I wonder when will he will understand....time is not still...one day, kriish will grow up and leave the home for higher studies, then?? Then i think he will realise....

And just like you, i created my own niche, a small world, where I would decide and my decision would be based on MY needs...only my needs...

My father also doesnot support my decision But MOM does and that is what matters to me .....i am so glad that i could share this with you via this lovely poem....

Posted: Jul 18, 2008

This was a very nice and well written poem. We never stop in this "rush world", and take a time to think what is going on around us is something that we need to do. Gave an "I like it vote".

Posted: Aug 6, 2008

WOW!! I really loved this one!! And the ending is great.
'I like it' voted!XD

Would really appreciate if you could read my poems...when ever you have time.
Thanks a bunchy!!

Take care.

Posted: Aug 24, 2008

WOW! this is sooo goood!!! i like the end where your world slowed for you, and it just fit nicely... but it's true how quickly things flash by, and i too have just stood still and watched it, it's crazy! Great poem!

Posted: Sep 3, 2008

I liked it. Also the poem about your friend. Both are really good. I liked this one better. This a reoccuring theme and you still managed to get a successful poem without sounding cliche(actually a little cliche), but that my friend is besides the POINT! Anyway, keep writing. I would be ever so grateful if you were to read some of my works. Thanks! -Nick-

Posted: Oct 4, 2008

This is a very true poem. Very true and I have to agree on the comment about you and your parents. I know how that is. Though I'm not the one raising. I wasn't really raised at all per say though I definitely go to my sister's and brother when I need something cuz my parents are never there so I know what its like.

Posted: Oct 9, 2008