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This might be one of my best pieces or worst. Hopefully will soon find out:)
Also not sure about the title would love any other suggestions
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Submitted: Aug 21, 2008 Reads: 49 Comments: 1 Likes: 2
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Greeting Pen my dear. It has been a while.
I liked this poem. You deal with you opposing factors very tactfully leading you down the varies possibilites but always pointing you the way you wanted us to go.
Skilled I must say.
Reason is indeed the the betrayer of hope and reason. Love the way you put that.
Though I do have one nitpick. This poem has moments where you are tapdancing around the subject a little too much. Just stretching it out a little too far. Though maybe thats just me.
That said I don't think this is best work, but still a very very good one. I think my fav is still Castles painted in the sky.
As always just a thought.
Posted: Aug 23, 2008
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