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My Tainted Wings

Poem By: poet 3
Poetry


Tags: life, heart, wings, fantasy

This is a poem I wrote fo ra contest for school... It got like Fifth.... View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Aug 12, 2007    Reads: 59    Comments: 8    Likes: 2   


My tainted wings
Black as night,
Dulled by heavens
Holy light,
Burning flame
Patient fire,
Dwindling dusk
Blazing dawn,
Booming voice
Soft sweet tune,
All beating in my heart to make
My tainted wings as
Black as night,
Dulled by heavens
Holy light.


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Comments:

Great image at the end. I could see a dark angel being illuminated. Thanks for the image. It was cool as hell. Very symbolic.

Posted: Aug 12, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanx!!

I think that was why it got Fifth out of like 37....

GLAD someone liked it!!
^_^! *Peace!*

I like the poem style. A lot.
The contrast between each line is awesome too.
Like where you said "dwindling dusk" "breaking dawn".

Sheer melody! 5/5!

Posted: Aug 29, 2007

Author Comment:

Thanx!!
I am so glad ppl actually like my poetry, I am trying the novel thing but I am not sure if it is good enough to continue...

Wow! Your poem had a great rhythm, I was nodding my head to it! The imagery is great, and it ran really smoothly. I loved it!

Posted: Oct 31, 2007

Author Comment:

Thank You,
Most ppl thought it sounded like a chant and didnt like it much!

FIFTH, FIFTH! THIS IS AN OUTRAGE SOMEONE DESERVES TO BE SHOT!

Posted: Nov 4, 2007

Author Comment:

What?
So do you like it?
Hahahah!
Kinda hard to tell with your comments... ^_^!

OUTRAGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted: Nov 4, 2007

Author Comment:

Hahahahah!!
Thank You I think... :)

yes i like ti, it means i think this should have one and its an outrage that it didn't also the judge needs to be shot :)

Posted: Nov 5, 2007

Author Comment:

Hahahah!
Thank You!
The judge does need to be shot!!!!

Strong voice and Strong words... a beautiful read!

Posted: Feb 13, 2008

Author Comment:

Thank you! :D

april this has always been one of my favorite poems of yours and yes the judge should be shot

Posted: Dec 1, 2008

Author Comment:

lol. Ok, Now I am going to have to go back and reread all those comments to find where that came from. lol.

I'm not sure I like this one that much, i is kind of strange. lol
Not one of my best works.



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