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Submitted: Jan 9, 2008 Reads: 74 Comments: 11 Likes: 2
She was just sort of thin.
Could hide behind a pin.
My love just seemed slim.
More like on a long limb.
An arrow came from her heart.
Just like a very tiny dart.
It spoke of her heart.
Under my skin it did part.
Her love grew like an infection.
There was no mortal rejection.
Now our life is full.
A love cancer, no bull.
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I liked how you juxtaposed cancer and love. It makes me think.
Posted: Jan 9, 2008
Strong poem ! Her love grew like an infection it was very well used here . Love sometimes seem a infection.
Great.
Posted: Jan 10, 2008
I've been infected and what I can tell you is that though it nearly killed me I still miss it and I envy you your cancer.
Posted: Jan 13, 2008
Love Potion ?...thought it was a myth...guess I was wrong
JoKa
Evelyn
Posted: Jan 22, 2008
Yeah I liked how you compared cancer to love and stuff, it was good. Ur good.
XxxxxBrokenxxxxX
Posted: Jan 26, 2008
I like the comparison- love an infection- so true!
:)
Posted: Feb 11, 2008
Very emotional poem! excellent use of words to create thought and visual!
Posted: Feb 12, 2008
very different poem...loved d way u used the words!
Posted: Mar 4, 2008
What the fuck do you know about anything asshole?
Posted: Apr 5, 2008
Liked this poem too.
Evelyn
Posted: May 3, 2008
Love is more lethal than cancer.Cancer effects the physical sheath but the love penetrates deep within our mental sheath , paralyzing our ability to take rational decisions .
Posted: Sep 13, 2008
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