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"An Ode to Rain"

Poem By: RaisinGirl
Poetry


Tags: rain, shame, pain, ode, space

I wrote this five years ago so why not post it too? View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jun 15, 2008    Reads: 61    Comments: 4    Likes: 2   


RAIN

SO VAIN

IT POURS

WITHOUT RESTRAINT

RAIN

SYMBOLIZING PAIN

LIKE ASHES OF SUGAR CANE

DISAPPEARING WITHOUT A TRACE

INTO THE VAST NIGHT SPACE

RAIN

COME AGAIN

NEVER TO RETURN

IF ONLY TO REMAIN

NEVER TO REDUCE TO SHAME

AND TEARS FLOW

FOR NO ONE

AN ODE

TO RAIN


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Comments:

i liked it. somehow its the darker side of rain!

Posted: Jun 16, 2008

Author Comment:

really? I don't even think this is any good, but my new saying is 'post it, don't waste it', so thanks......

this is kool but i love the rain and if the rain had a darker side i beleive this would be it i like it heaps tho so yeah yay!

Posted: Jul 15, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks-you are the second person to say this-the darker side to rain-I wrote it a long time ago, so I didn't even know what it meant...I was probably on 'another cloud' at the time, if u know what I mean....

This was neat. The way it was formatted and the short phrases made it more fun to read

Posted: Jul 22, 2008

Author Comment:

Yeah, I kinda thought you would be the right one to comment about that...since you know how to write really well in that format type...it is your style, Codey ;D

I really like "ashes of sugar cane." I will never think of rain the same way again. :)

Posted: Aug 2, 2008

Author Comment:

wow-that's so awesome to know that I could change rain(lol) into another concept...thank u for reading...I am happy to hear these types of comments as always, and especially from yourself :DxXx*Pip*xXx



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