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Dripping (jfm98 challang)

Poem By: Rat
Poetry


this is jfm98's challang and i had to couse a pic that was on the page and i chose the one that is my cover page for this. plez tell me what you think View table of contents...

 

Submitted: Jul 27, 2008    Reads: 37    Comments: 6    Likes: 4   


Dripping
 
I hear you coming from behind
You scare me even though I know you are there
I hear the dripping of your blood hitting the floor
It is crating a puddle where ever you go
All I hear as I walk away is
Drip, drip, drip
I start to run down the hallway
Drip, drip, drip
You are getting closer
You are right behind me
Just stop
I yell out to you
Drip, drip, drip
I take a glance behind me to see if I can see you
Drip, drip, drip
I see your blood soaken face
I let out a scream
I say
I’m sorry I did that to you but I had to
I then pick up my pace
Drip, drip, drip
I keep running but I can not lose you
I’m sorry
I yell one last time before I fall down
And you take me with you down to hell
So now I wander the same hallway with you doing the same thing
To me that I did to you
And no mater how much I scream
You will not stop
 
 


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Comments:

Wow! This is VERY pwerful! LOVED it! Good Job!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks i'm glad i did good on your challang

Sorry, I meant powerful!

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

that is ok :]

lolz. its awesome. reminds me of how i feel of my sis. MUAHAHAHA! jk. that was mean huh?oh well. nice poem i loved it.

Posted: Jul 27, 2008

Author Comment:

that was mean but you took it back so it's fine. glad you love it thanks for reading

hi! rat. u've excelled the picture itself. the dripping effect comes out very well. good work here. lol. ;-)

Posted: Jul 29, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks for reading glad you like it

awesome...

liked it very much

Posted: Jul 30, 2008

Author Comment:

thank you

i like how u put a lot of details
because i had a great visul

Posted: Aug 8, 2008

Author Comment:

thanks i'm glad you liked it and thx for reading



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